Q: Explain how you responded to a significant challenge that you have encountered and what you learned in the process. Max. 250 words
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At the tender and late age of 10, after seeing a pianist's nimble hands dancing merrily across a sea of black and white keys, I was hit right in the head with a dream of becoming a pianist. From that time onwards, I began to fervently practice my piano. I took my Grade 8 exam in August 2012, after 5 years of piano playing, but I was faced with a crisis. I only had 2 years left to finish my piano exams before I graduated. Many of my cousins graduated high school with a grade 8 or 9 piano, but once they started to attend university, they stopped playing it, letting all those years of hard work go to waste. My teacher suggested a solution to the problem; skipping grade 9 and directly going to grade 10. I signed up for the Grade 10 piano exam in August 2013 and was put under a major deadline. Along with taking my piano exam, I also had 2 summer school completion courses, and a part time job. Even though I was on a tight schedule, I continued to practice 3 hours each day. In the end, I managed to get 85% on my piano exam which is very high, considering that I skipped grade 9 and only learned for a year. Through this impossible challenge, I learned that with hard work and determination, you can achieve your goals and dreams, even though you are far behind from others in your skills.
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At the tender and late age of 10, after seeing a pianist's nimble hands dancing merrily across a sea of black and white keys, I was hit right in the head with a dream of becoming a pianist. From that time onwards, I began to fervently practice my piano. I took my Grade 8 exam in August 2012, after 5 years of piano playing, but I was faced with a crisis. I only had 2 years left to finish my piano exams before I graduated. Many of my cousins graduated high school with a grade 8 or 9 piano, but once they started to attend university, they stopped playing it, letting all those years of hard work go to waste. My teacher suggested a solution to the problem; skipping grade 9 and directly going to grade 10. I signed up for the Grade 10 piano exam in August 2013 and was put under a major deadline. Along with taking my piano exam, I also had 2 summer school completion courses, and a part time job. Even though I was on a tight schedule, I continued to practice 3 hours each day. In the end, I managed to get 85% on my piano exam which is very high, considering that I skipped grade 9 and only learned for a year. Through this impossible challenge, I learned that with hard work and determination, you can achieve your goals and dreams, even though you are far behind from others in your skills.
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