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"our skiing trip" - MIT significant challenge



gigi5 3 / 12  
Dec 27, 2010   #1
Hey! ;)

I am not sure whether I am really answering the prompt, I don't know what they are expecting to read there. So please tell me what you think the topic should be if this seems inappropriate.

Tell us about the most significant challenge you've faced or something important that didn't go according to plan. How did you manage the situation?(*) (200-250 words)

Both legs are safely fastened to the board, nothing can happen to me. I have knee and hand guards and even a helmet. So what am I afraid of? I am smoothly balancing my weight from the front edge to the rear edge and back to the front, everything is fine. But wait, the slope is getting steeper. If I go on like this I will go too fast. And I know that I will fall down. No, I can't do this. This is it, I am stopping now...

The last day of our skiing trip. We get out of the cable car and I look down the slope. This is it, I tell myself. If I don't do it now, I won't get another chance for a whole year. So I push myself towards the slope. I feel that I am going faster and faster, I can barely avoid crashing into other people, and wait, is that a pile of snow in front of me? I close my eyes and jump...

I lift my head and clear my glasses from the snow. While trying to find the place I took off and counting the turns I made rolling down the slope, I am smiling. I did it! I did not stop!

And it's always the same with sports like these. I freak out at greater speeds and I just stop. I know I will get over this fear someday, but to get there I need my own little victory from time to time.

pintianz 7 / 11  
Dec 27, 2010   #2
Your essay did answer the prompt nicely and you got a good intro with a smooth transition, I got no negative comments. good job!
nikamonster 9 / 29  
Dec 27, 2010   #3
i kind of got lost between your first and second paragraph. i thought you stopped...but then you go back to the very beginning of the story. so what does your first paragraph actually refer to? when you're about to go over the pile of snow?

I can feel myself going faster and faster. I struggle to avoid crashing into other people, and wait, is that a pile of snow in front of me?


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