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I spent this past summer performing in a show at the Winnipeg Fringe Theatre Festival ACTIVITY ESSAY


victoria_003 3 / 4  
Nov 27, 2018   #1

Tell us more about ONE or TWO activities listed above that are most important to you.


Please explain the role you played and what you learned in the process. (Max 350 words)


The activity that's most important to me is the time I spent this past summer performing in a show at the Winnipeg Fringe Theatre Festival. I was fortunate enough to get cast in a show called 'Tumbling After' through the Summer Studio program at Manitoba Theatre for Young People, where we spent four months rehearsing the play and getting involved in every aspect of the production, including costuming and lighting design. During the last two weeks of July we performed the show in the Fringe Festival which was truly an experience like no other. Since we were performers, we were able to see any Fringe show we wanted for free, so the cast and I took full advantage of that opportunity and over the course of two weeks we ended up seeing over twenty Fringe shows. Being able to experience the Fringe Festival in its entirety was such an amazing experience to have because it exposed me to many different kinds of theatre and art, and taught me a lot about what a career in the arts could look like.

Getting involved with this show was something that was initially a hard decision for me to make, I was extremely anxious over the thought of auditioning for something that I almost didn't do it at all. I'm so grateful that I worked up the courage to audition for it, because I know I'll look back on that whole experience as one of the highlights of my life thus far. Between performing in my own show and seeing many others, I learned so much about the art of theatre and the importance it plays in my life. The opportunity I had with the Fringe Festival made me fall in love with theatre even more than I already was, and made me realize that it's something I want to do for the rest of my life. . I've learned so many valuable things both about theatre and myself through being involved with the Winnipeg Fringe that I don't know where I would be today without that amazing opportunity.

Thanks for taking the time to read! I'd love to hear some feedback about ways I could make this stronger. Overall I feel good about it since it really is the thing that I'm most proud of, but if there's anything I can do to make it even better than I'd love to hear it! Thanks so much!

isica 2 / 2  
Nov 30, 2018   #2
Hi Victoria it really seemed like you learned a lot by participating in the Winnipeg fringe theater festival. However, over half of your paragraph is spent on describing the festival and its activities rather than why it was important to you. I would like to see more about what exactly you learned by performing at the festival and why you grew as an individual.
Holt [Contributor] - / 7,322 1844  
Nov 30, 2018   #3
Hi Victoria, the essay in itself needs to be better presented. The strength of the essay and the interest of the reviewer will come from the proper "hook" that you will be using. I suggest that you open the essay by saying:

The activity that's most important ... Winnipeg Fringe Theatre Festival. I learned ... importance it plays in my life. The opportunity I had with the Fringe Festival ... without that amazing opportunity.

By using parts of your second paragraph to create the stronger interest in your presentation, the reader is enticed to know more about the festival and what your participation was. Then you can use all of the first paragraph, this time using the first person pronoun "I" instead of we since this essay is all about your experience and why it became very important to you. Try to highlight any weak skills that you had in relation to theater production that you found yourself strengthening towards the end of the activity. Then close the essay by indicating that you continue to develop the skills you learned through this activity or, let us know if you are continuing to hone your skills through your continued participation in the activity.


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