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Essay C topic:
There may be personal information that you want considered as part of your admissions application. Write an essay describing that information. You might include exceptional hardships, challenges, or opportunities that have shaped or impacted your abilities or academic credentials, personal responsibilities, exceptional achievements or talents, educational goals, or ways in which you might contribute to an institution committed to creating a diverse learning environment.
I'm not too sure how I did, so please be honest. I'm under individual review and I'm really really trying to prove myself to this college! Feel free to revise it in any way :)
My essay:
When I was first assigned to an art project in elementary school, I never thought that later on in life I would have such a passion for it. It was always fun to draw and create things with art, but I never thought about how much I actually enjoyed doing it. It wasn't until my junior year of high school that I finally decided to join an art class. Though, then I didn't realize it would pave my way for such great opportunities.
In my junior year of high school I signed up for Art I. The first day I walked in, I realized that I didn't know anyone since most of the students in there were freshman, and because of that it made me want to drop the class and try for another elective, but as the year went on, I realized how not knowing many people helped me to stay focused on my artwork. I worked diligently and effectively, and throughout the year I developed friendships with creative minds just as I had, and they helped me to boost confidence in my work. They would compliment my work, but they also helped me with their constructive criticism, and throughout the class I grew to become a better artist. Not only did my classmates notice, but my teacher also began to notice.
Later on in the year, a project was presented to us by my teacher to create a picture using a technique called "scratchboard". Basically, it's a two-layered surface with black on top, and white underneath. You use the scratchboard tool to scratch at the black to reveal the white, creating lines and all different kinds of textures. At first it was a simple example, creating flowers, bugs, and other objects, but then we had our actual project, to recreate an image using the techniques we learned. I chose a picture of a bird I had found from a magazine in class, and thought it would be a perfect choice since I could show how much texture the feathers produced. As we worked on that for a few days, my teacher noticed how well it was turning out. When I was done, I had a nice, simple sketch of a bird on a branch, and my teacher loved it. She then asked me to add more to it by creating more branches and adding another bird in the background, and we even decided to add watercolor to it. That weekend, I took it home and worked on it everyday, making sure it would look perfect. When I came back my teacher was astonished at how well it looked that she actually told me to enter it into the upcoming VASE art competition. I was a little uncertain at first knowing that the art displayed there was absolutely stunning, but I decided to go for it, confident in my work.
To my surprise, my piece was not only recognized in the city competition, but it was moved on to compete at the state level competition. A few months later the day came and my work was there displayed next to all the other great artists around the state. I felt honored. At the state competition I received a 3 out of 4, and back in San Antonio my art was displayed in a district art show where I received an NISD teacher award, along with a "C" award from my high school, Tom C. Clark.
Through all of this I have learned that when you love doing something, you should always stay with it, and that if a great opportunity approaches you; go for it. I also know that because of my art teacher, I now have a more professional outlook on art, and would consider it as a lifelong career. It has also made me understand that to do great work, it takes time; so from my junior year to my senior year I learned to focus more on my school work as well. I know now that through my last two years of high school I have learned to be more independent, mature, and determined in all of my work, and if I was accepted to UTSA, all of those qualities I could prove, and they would only advance. Not only would I strive to show my talent in art, but I would strive to prove my determination in all classes, proudly graduating as a UTSA Roadrunner.
Thanks for your time and help!
Essay C topic:
There may be personal information that you want considered as part of your admissions application. Write an essay describing that information. You might include exceptional hardships, challenges, or opportunities that have shaped or impacted your abilities or academic credentials, personal responsibilities, exceptional achievements or talents, educational goals, or ways in which you might contribute to an institution committed to creating a diverse learning environment.
I'm not too sure how I did, so please be honest. I'm under individual review and I'm really really trying to prove myself to this college! Feel free to revise it in any way :)
My essay:
When I was first assigned to an art project in elementary school, I never thought that later on in life I would have such a passion for it. It was always fun to draw and create things with art, but I never thought about how much I actually enjoyed doing it. It wasn't until my junior year of high school that I finally decided to join an art class. Though, then I didn't realize it would pave my way for such great opportunities.
In my junior year of high school I signed up for Art I. The first day I walked in, I realized that I didn't know anyone since most of the students in there were freshman, and because of that it made me want to drop the class and try for another elective, but as the year went on, I realized how not knowing many people helped me to stay focused on my artwork. I worked diligently and effectively, and throughout the year I developed friendships with creative minds just as I had, and they helped me to boost confidence in my work. They would compliment my work, but they also helped me with their constructive criticism, and throughout the class I grew to become a better artist. Not only did my classmates notice, but my teacher also began to notice.
Later on in the year, a project was presented to us by my teacher to create a picture using a technique called "scratchboard". Basically, it's a two-layered surface with black on top, and white underneath. You use the scratchboard tool to scratch at the black to reveal the white, creating lines and all different kinds of textures. At first it was a simple example, creating flowers, bugs, and other objects, but then we had our actual project, to recreate an image using the techniques we learned. I chose a picture of a bird I had found from a magazine in class, and thought it would be a perfect choice since I could show how much texture the feathers produced. As we worked on that for a few days, my teacher noticed how well it was turning out. When I was done, I had a nice, simple sketch of a bird on a branch, and my teacher loved it. She then asked me to add more to it by creating more branches and adding another bird in the background, and we even decided to add watercolor to it. That weekend, I took it home and worked on it everyday, making sure it would look perfect. When I came back my teacher was astonished at how well it looked that she actually told me to enter it into the upcoming VASE art competition. I was a little uncertain at first knowing that the art displayed there was absolutely stunning, but I decided to go for it, confident in my work.
To my surprise, my piece was not only recognized in the city competition, but it was moved on to compete at the state level competition. A few months later the day came and my work was there displayed next to all the other great artists around the state. I felt honored. At the state competition I received a 3 out of 4, and back in San Antonio my art was displayed in a district art show where I received an NISD teacher award, along with a "C" award from my high school, Tom C. Clark.
Through all of this I have learned that when you love doing something, you should always stay with it, and that if a great opportunity approaches you; go for it. I also know that because of my art teacher, I now have a more professional outlook on art, and would consider it as a lifelong career. It has also made me understand that to do great work, it takes time; so from my junior year to my senior year I learned to focus more on my school work as well. I know now that through my last two years of high school I have learned to be more independent, mature, and determined in all of my work, and if I was accepted to UTSA, all of those qualities I could prove, and they would only advance. Not only would I strive to show my talent in art, but I would strive to prove my determination in all classes, proudly graduating as a UTSA Roadrunner.
Thanks for your time and help!
