Think of 'free' ; UNI OF MICHIGAN/COMMUNITY

Hey guys , I'd be applying to the University of Michigan and I would really like some help with this essay.

I know that it is very late now , but I hope someone can help me !

Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)

" Free software is a matter of liberty, not price. Think of 'free' as in 'free speech', not as in 'free beer'."

These are perhaps the most famous and the most influential words of Richard Matthew Stallman, the founder of the free software movement. Like many others , I too have been greatly influenced by the ideals for which he stands.

As supporters of the free software movement, we believe in free and open source software for all. 'Free' software is that which can be obtained without spending money, and open source software is that whose clockwork machinery is visible to all, like Google's Android.

We believe that everyone should be allowed to make their own changes to softwares and distribute these modifed softwares so that we may help our neighbor. These ideals are based on the simple notions of freedom and sharing; knowledge is not something to make profit from , it is something that must be shared.

I play my role as a part of this communtiy by using free and open source softwares for all my needs. I come across as a geek when I talk about free software with the level of seriousness that I do. However,I firmly believe that the ideals that we stand by are ones worth preserving.

"Free software is a matter of liberty, not price. Think of 'free' as in 'free speech', not as in 'free beer.'"(Corrected spacing and punctuation issues)

These are perhaps the most famous and the most influential words of Richard Matthew Stallman, the founder of the free software movement. Like many others, I too have been greatly influenced by the ideals for which he stands. (Don't mention others. Focus on yourself and Stallman's influence on you)

As supporters of the free software movement, we believe in free and open source software for all.(Just yourself)As a supporter of the free software movement, I believe in free and open source software for all." Free" software is that which can be obtained without spending money, and open source software is that whose clockwork machinery is visible to all, like Google's Android.

WeI believe that everyone should be allowed to make their(his or her) own changes to softwares and distribute these modifiedsoftwares(fixed spelling error. Spell check is your friend!) so that weI may help our neighbor(the community, or society, or humanity. Take your pick) . These ideals are based on the simple notions of freedom and sharing; knowledge is not something to make profit from, it is something that must be shared.

I play my role as a part of this community by using free and open source softwares for all my needs. I come across as a geek when I talk about free software with the level of seriousness that I do. However, I firmly believe that the ideals that we stand by are ones worth preserving. (Fixed more spacing and spelling issues)

Few advice:
1) Spellcheck and look for spacing/punctuation issues. Grammars matters a lot.
2) You are not speaking on behalf of the free software community. You need to sell yourself to the college. You chose a community and you described it. But you did not describe your place within it. Furthermore, you need to discuss what you can bring to University of Michigan.

3) I may sound repetitive, but this is not about Free Software, or even Stallman. This is about you. From your essay alone, all I learned about you is that you are a supporter of the free software movement. I didn't learn anything about your qualities as a person.

Don't be discouraged, 250 words is a tough limit. I'm sure you'll write a great essay!
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