Hahahaha this is awesome! (I'm also trying to answer the same Stanford prompt!)
The focus on feeling "embarrassed" by success is awesome-- and also extremely relatable.
I used to curse my parents for giving me a middle name that sounded more like the Latin word for that one bug you couldn't identify in science class, but though I used to be particularly insecure, people as diverse as you are remind me that my middle name is my own stamp of cultural identity.
Possible run-on sentence-- the part about the bug in science class is clever. I would end the sentence at "science class" and then make a new sentence about how you are now grateful for having such a unique name, etc.
Through humiliation I learned self-respect and modesty, and I learned to gain an appreciation for the personal uniqueness my name gives me.
Is humiliation the right word? Perhaps a better way to phrase this is "Eventually, my embarrassment in the face of recognition was transformed into self-respect and modesty..."