Why Tufts? Distinct Mission; INTERNATIONAL RELATIONS

Which aspects of Tufts' curriculum or undergraduate experience prompt your application? In short: ''Why Tufts?''

In our increasingly globalized world, dramatic changes are taking place. With requirement of a World Civilizations course, language proficiency, and a strong focus in International Relations, Tufts seeks to provide its students preparation for this emerging global society. Four years at Tufts, with its diverse and international student body, and its distinct mission, will prepare me to thrive in this new playing field.

[Do you guys find this to be incredibly generic and impersonal? Is it something I shouldn't use for my supplement? How can I improve it, in terms of topic, style, voice? Should I not use this at all?

with requirementS (it is inclusive of World Civ., lang prof. AND intnl focus - so it's plural)

I have a question: are you working with a word/character limit?
because then I can edit it in a different way to cut the repetition and give you more space to express ideas.

This meets the word limit but cutting it down would be good!

I think it's great. You sound really focused on what you want to do. But since it's Tufts I would make it a bit more relaxed. I'm guessing they'd like that from their essay prompts. "OMG, LOL"

But how can I make it more personal and relaxed?

How about this guys?

In ten years, I envision myself as a successful lawyer, fluent in the languages of economics, international law, and Italian. From the School of Arts and Sciences' outstanding International Relations program to its foreign language requirements, the Tufts experience fits me. The diverse atmosphere and geography are ideal. As a cross country runner, championing hills is my specialty.

I like the new one. I really like how you ended it.

I'm also applying for TUFTS International Relations. I think I may need to revise mine. Because mine sound flat compared to yours.

Good Luck!

I like the new one better, its more personal so they can get to know who you really are.