taught me to these feelings
Maybe it's just me, but I don't quite understand this part of the sentence.
we should feel the plight of others which will give us the desire to eliminate it
How about: Care providers should always be empathetic and collected; we should feel the plight subsequently act to eliminate it.
effectively assessment
effective assessment?
be directly applied in everyday life
If you think the "directly" is necessary, keep it. Otherwise...
continue to improve himself, in the hopes of making a significant
I don't know if the comma makes your sentence flow well. Try reading the sentence out loud.
This is as good as your other one! Good Luck!