I turn to the language of creativity; Extracurricular Activity

What once was a mere imagination transformed into a tangible fantasy as my brush plunged into a realm of possibilities. When I can't explain something with my native language, I turn to the language of creativity. The brush attacks the canvas, twirling the ink to create a whirlpool for my mind to intertwine with reality. Art has become my passion in which I feel lost without. It not only acts as a stress reliever, but it allows me to tell a story. While art brings many challenges, mainly with my pushing yourself to think more creatively, my mind is free to drift away from the day's stressful moments. As I continue pouring my emotions onto that page, I stop for a moment to recuperate my thoughts and continue until I'm interrupted by the dismissal bell which serves as a portal back to my day.

A certainly creative and illustrative statement, however your message gets lost in the phrasing at times. Here are some examples:

What once was a mere imagination transformed into a tangible fantasy as my brush plunged into a realm of possibilities.
The wording is really confusing. Try maybe "What was once mere imagination has transformed into a tangible fantasy, my brush plunging into a realm of possibilities." Something like that...

mainly with my
I feel like that should be "such as"

I too agree ... :)


When I cannot explain things in my native language, my brush came in my aid.


It runs on the canvas,wirling the ink to create a whirlpool for my mind to intertwine with reality


Art has become not just my passion, but a part of my life.

Thank you guys so much.