gabriellemuniz 2 / 3 Nov 7, 2013 #1What once was a mere imagination transformed into a tangible fantasy as my brush plunged into a realm of possibilities. When I can't explain something with my native language, I turn to the language of creativity. The brush attacks the canvas, twirling the ink to create a whirlpool for my mind to intertwine with reality. Art has become my passion in which I feel lost without. It not only acts as a stress reliever, but it allows me to tell a story. While art brings many challenges, mainly with my pushing yourself to think more creatively, my mind is free to drift away from the day's stressful moments. As I continue pouring my emotions onto that page, I stop for a moment to recuperate my thoughts and continue until I'm interrupted by the dismissal bell which serves as a portal back to my day.
mrth 3 / 10 1 Nov 8, 2013 #2A certainly creative and illustrative statement, however your message gets lost in the phrasing at times. Here are some examples:What once was a mere imagination transformed into a tangible fantasy as my brush plunged into a realm of possibilities.The wording is really confusing. Try maybe "What was once mere imagination has transformed into a tangible fantasy, my brush plunging into a realm of possibilities." Something like that...mainly with myI feel like that should be "such as"
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592 Nov 9, 2013 #3A certainly creative and illustrative statement, however your message gets lost in the phrasing at times.I too agree ... :). When I can't explain something with my native language, I turn to the language of creativity.When I cannot explain things in my native language, my brush came in my aid.The brush attacks the canvas, twirling the ink to create a whirlpool for my mind to intertwine with reality.It runs on the canvas,wirling the ink to create a whirlpool for my mind to intertwine with realityArt has become my passion in which I feel lost without.Art has become not just my passion, but a part of my life.
