A Penn education provides a liberal arts and sciences foundation across multiple disciplines with a practical emphasis in one of four undergraduate schools: the College of Arts and Sciences, the School of Engineering and Applied Science, the School of Nursing, or the Wharton School. Given the undergraduate school to which you are applying, please discuss how you will engage academically at Penn (please answer in 300 words or less).
Right now, I have not every specific references to Penn itself and would life suggestions on that. It's my first draft so be very harsh!
Given the undergraduate school to which you are applying, please discuss how you will engage academically at Penn. (Please answer in 300 words or less.)At one period in history, far before Women's suffrage and the abolition of slavery, education was meant for the rich, the noble and those who are destined for greatness by blood right. Now, centuries past those unjust sentiments, we have co-ed, multi-racial and overall diverse institutions of education. And when I walked onto the college campus of the University of Pennsylvania, with lush greenery surrounding every building, the gothic architecture that imbued it with a sense of purpose and tradition and the ever-evolving structures present on campus, I saw a University that would guide me to the threshold of the ever-changing college education in the most rewarding and effective way.
As the founder, Benjamin Franklin, dreamed of when he founded the University, the institution was not only intended to teach young scholars theory and suppositions, but also practical knowledge that they could redirect into solving problems in society, creating the first liberal arts curriculum. Of course, there would be no looking back for me. I would immediately take advantage of the small faculty to student ratio of 6:1 to incessantly ask questions and take the initiative to participate in the undergraduate research center to learn at the forefront of scientific research. While my interest lies in learning biomedicine, I would play to the advantages of the liberal arts education the University offers as well and delve into various subjects such as political science, environmental science, the humanities and even history to become a more well rounded student who can converse with others on a variety of issues and form a versatility that spans all disciplines.
For me, the University of Pennsylvania would be a door to shed hesitation and take risks. It would mean bold advances to attempt to grasp fleeting opportunities in education and pursue passion. Already supported by my strong pillars in higher level education with a myriad of AP courses spanning natural sciences, literature and history, I wish to not only to experience the outstanding research and science facilities but also perpetuate the need for a practical, well-rounded education and hopefully, in the years after attending the University, support that assertion with the fruits of labor.
Nicely written essay! I have no criticism to give either.
It seems like you are more than motivated, even passionate about getting into Upenn, which I think that's what the college wants.
Good job, and good luck!
I think your statement has good potential. However, I feel like you are a little all over the place with this one in particular.
I'd focus on possibly one or two specific items of discussion rather than transitioning from one to another.
Try it! Otherwise it was overall pretty good.
Maybe change "as a child..." very generic and nearly every essay I see uses that as an intro
