USc - I made a choice about studying abroad

I was just wondering if this 1st paragraph will fit the topic or not.. I'm not good at writing essays.
Or tell me if this topic is too cliche because it feels like all the international students write about coming to united states.

HELP ME OUTT hahaa

ths is just the 1st paragraph. it's not done but i jst want to know if i can use it
also grammar and word correction will be very thank ful happy new year

Albert Camus once said,

"Life is sum of all your choices."

Everyone has to make choices either good or bad, and the choices make whom they are. On January 15, 2001, I had to most enormous decision of my life, which was studying abroad in United States, in order to put myself in better position of fulfilling my dreams and goals. At the time, I had no idea how this choice will effect and reshape my life. Studying abroad without the family was a real tragedy for me as 11 years old international student; I often fall in to depression and insomnia. However, I was the one who made the choices and I knew the choices causes certain consequences. Also, I couldn't let my self down and the family who gave me the unlimited support. Therefore, I never gave up and now I cross the line too far to give up. From my view, choice can play the important role in life because it's making a decision about what one want and where he pictures himself in the future from the choices he made.

em...what is the prompt? Or is there a prompt, I am a high school junior that are worry free of college apps so I don't know the format very well.


Do you really want to use the word tragedy? Since tragedy means more about incidents that are caused by outer forces, miserable maybe a good word choice?


You have build some really strong emotion there, use it, say like ...give up getting into college or something.

I hope those comments help, it look good other wise, at least way better than my writing =P good luck :D

...had to make th e most...

... this choice wou ld affect and reshape my life.

Therefore, I never gave up, and now I crossed too far over the lin e to give up. From my view, choice can play the important role in life because it's making a decision about what one wants and where one pictures himself in the future. from the choices he made.