mspivey2 /
Nov 6, 2008 #1
Hi I have written my short answer for Common App but I am worried that it doesn't really flow. I think it is ok and was willing to send it but I really just want someone else's opinion before I do. Also you can only have 150 words, no more so it was driving me nuts towards the end!
In my spare time I volunteer at an orphanage here in Senegal. It is physically and mentally challenging. There are more than 60 babies under the age of 9 months who are all vying for my attention at the same time making things very difficult because I can't play with them all. They are so sweet and loveable and all they want is to be held, even if it is just for a few minutes. I wish I could take them all home, because sadly, many of them are never adopted. I am, however, very thankful that they were brought to the orphanage because things could have very easily been much worse had they been left on the streets. My dream is to come back to Africa one day and start my own orphanage, that way I can hopefully make sure that no children are left to fend for themselves on the streets.
Thanks for your help!
Madeleine
In my spare time I volunteer at an orphanage here in Senegal. It is physically and mentally challenging. There are more than 60 babies under the age of 9 months who are all vying for my attention at the same time making things very difficult because I can't play with them all. They are so sweet and loveable and all they want is to be held, even if it is just for a few minutes. I wish I could take them all home, because sadly, many of them are never adopted. I am, however, very thankful that they were brought to the orphanage because things could have very easily been much worse had they been left on the streets. My dream is to come back to Africa one day and start my own orphanage, that way I can hopefully make sure that no children are left to fend for themselves on the streets.
Thanks for your help!
Madeleine
