Hi, I'm applying for UWC for the 2022 session. I'd really like some feedback/constructive criticism on my essay that I'm submitting along with my application. The topic was as follows:
Reflecting on UWC's mission and values, what you might contribute to the college and what you would hope to gain from the experience.
I'm interested in attending a UWC college because I'm eager to gain new experiences that will enable me to grow into a mature and responsible person, as well as to collaborate with peers from different parts of the world. I believe studying in a much more diverse community than my current schools will help me open my eyes and mind which will eventually lead me to achieve my dreams and make a contribution to the world.
I think UWC's values are among the most important ones for an individual to grow into an energetic game-changer who advocates world peace and justice, and a sustainable future. In my opinion, UWC's mission and values are well connected. Without possessing these values, it will be impossible to accomplish the mission.
In terms of sustainable development, I'm particularly concerned about the deteriorating environmental issues around us. I joined the school's bird watching club when I was in grade three. Since then, nature has become a great fascination to me. I started to realize that with intelligence, sapiens have evolved and developed tremendously. However, if we keep on exploiting the natural resources and do not put a brake on carbon emission, this planet will inevitably encounter another mass extinction that has already taken place on many species nowadays.
If I get accepted by UWC, I would like to further develop my skills and interest by starting a project that aims at preserving nature and wildlife. With UWC's diversity, we can make the project more global and it will hopefully create a wide impact on human beings. Furthermore, I hope through the project to pursue my goal in further education and a career that will make the world a sustainable place to live in.
Please provide a statement explaining why you are interested in attending a UWC college.
Reflecting on UWC's mission and values, what you might contribute to the college and what you would hope to gain from the experience.
I'm interested in attending a UWC college because I'm eager to gain new experiences that will enable me to grow into a mature and responsible person, as well as to collaborate with peers from different parts of the world. I believe studying in a much more diverse community than my current schools will help me open my eyes and mind which will eventually lead me to achieve my dreams and make a contribution to the world.
I think UWC's values are among the most important ones for an individual to grow into an energetic game-changer who advocates world peace and justice, and a sustainable future. In my opinion, UWC's mission and values are well connected. Without possessing these values, it will be impossible to accomplish the mission.
In terms of sustainable development, I'm particularly concerned about the deteriorating environmental issues around us. I joined the school's bird watching club when I was in grade three. Since then, nature has become a great fascination to me. I started to realize that with intelligence, sapiens have evolved and developed tremendously. However, if we keep on exploiting the natural resources and do not put a brake on carbon emission, this planet will inevitably encounter another mass extinction that has already taken place on many species nowadays.
If I get accepted by UWC, I would like to further develop my skills and interest by starting a project that aims at preserving nature and wildlife. With UWC's diversity, we can make the project more global and it will hopefully create a wide impact on human beings. Furthermore, I hope through the project to pursue my goal in further education and a career that will make the world a sustainable place to live in.
