The Prompt
'When choosing a college, you are choosing an intellectual community and a place where you believe that you can live, learn, and flourish. To this end, the Board of Admission is interested in knowing your reasons for applying to Wellesley College and how Wellesley will help you to realize your personal and academic goals.'
My response
Tethered to the world by the chains of history, women are still engaged in a struggle to obtain equality that is effortlessly given to men. We are immersed in a culture where women are no longer required to tread ten steps behind a man, nonetheless, I want more. I want to sing myself hoarse during Step-Singing, I want to browse the shelves of the campus library, and I want bask in the sun on the Severance Green.
Tethered to the world by the chains of history, women are still engaged in a struggle to obtain societal positions that are effortlessly given to men. We may live in a culture where women are no longer required to tread ten steps behind a man, but progress still needs to be made. Clair Babrowski, retired Executive Vice President of Toys 'R' Us, once said, "We picture men in leadership roles. As a woman you already have this hurdle to overcome." As a woman interested in pursuing a career field dominated by men, I believe Wellesley College can help me overcome these hurdles and provide me with the foundation necessary for success. Wellesley cultivates leaders, and I intend to be one.
Wellesley College has an unparalleled academic and social community that transforms students into professionals and individual passions into a career. With the flexibility of a liberal arts curriculum, at Wellesley I can flourish, be innovative, and fulfill my educational desires. At Wellesley, I want to sing myself hoarse during Step-Singing, I want to browse the shelves of the campus library, and I want bask in the sun on the Severance Green. Wellesley gives students a voice and with the small class sizes, my voice will be heard. The college's dedication to service and leadership will prepare me for post graduate life, by providing me with a holistic education, while also allowing me to focus on my academic disciplines of International Relations and Political Science. Additionally, Wellesley will provide me with a place to be unique, to grow, to educate my inquiring mind, and to interact with a diverse body of people. As a Wellesley student, I can picture myself achieving academic success, studying abroad, engaging in revolutionary research, living in Tower Court, and participating in the Wellesley in Washington Internship Program. Furthermore, with the exchange program and the city of Boston located only miles away, there are no limits to a Wellesley education.
College is a medium through which students can turn themselves into what they want to be. I aspire to be a member of the Wellesley community; I want to be a Wellesley Woman. Moreover, I want to live by the Wellesley motto "Non Ministrari sed Ministrare-Not to be ministered unto, but to minister"
Any feedback would be great as this is due today and I will read your essay in return. Do you think I should add more because I feel like I should. Be mean please
'When choosing a college, you are choosing an intellectual community and a place where you believe that you can live, learn, and flourish. To this end, the Board of Admission is interested in knowing your reasons for applying to Wellesley College and how Wellesley will help you to realize your personal and academic goals.'
My response
Tethered to the world by the chains of history, women are still engaged in a struggle to obtain equality that is effortlessly given to men. We are immersed in a culture where women are no longer required to tread ten steps behind a man, nonetheless, I want more. I want to sing myself hoarse during Step-Singing, I want to browse the shelves of the campus library, and I want bask in the sun on the Severance Green.
Tethered to the world by the chains of history, women are still engaged in a struggle to obtain societal positions that are effortlessly given to men. We may live in a culture where women are no longer required to tread ten steps behind a man, but progress still needs to be made. Clair Babrowski, retired Executive Vice President of Toys 'R' Us, once said, "We picture men in leadership roles. As a woman you already have this hurdle to overcome." As a woman interested in pursuing a career field dominated by men, I believe Wellesley College can help me overcome these hurdles and provide me with the foundation necessary for success. Wellesley cultivates leaders, and I intend to be one.
Wellesley College has an unparalleled academic and social community that transforms students into professionals and individual passions into a career. With the flexibility of a liberal arts curriculum, at Wellesley I can flourish, be innovative, and fulfill my educational desires. At Wellesley, I want to sing myself hoarse during Step-Singing, I want to browse the shelves of the campus library, and I want bask in the sun on the Severance Green. Wellesley gives students a voice and with the small class sizes, my voice will be heard. The college's dedication to service and leadership will prepare me for post graduate life, by providing me with a holistic education, while also allowing me to focus on my academic disciplines of International Relations and Political Science. Additionally, Wellesley will provide me with a place to be unique, to grow, to educate my inquiring mind, and to interact with a diverse body of people. As a Wellesley student, I can picture myself achieving academic success, studying abroad, engaging in revolutionary research, living in Tower Court, and participating in the Wellesley in Washington Internship Program. Furthermore, with the exchange program and the city of Boston located only miles away, there are no limits to a Wellesley education.
College is a medium through which students can turn themselves into what they want to be. I aspire to be a member of the Wellesley community; I want to be a Wellesley Woman. Moreover, I want to live by the Wellesley motto "Non Ministrari sed Ministrare-Not to be ministered unto, but to minister"
Any feedback would be great as this is due today and I will read your essay in return. Do you think I should add more because I feel like I should. Be mean please