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I'm writing an essay to show unique qualities to myself. How to make it interesting?

nnpurnama 2 / 2  
Sep 12, 2011   #1
my vocabulary is not TIME's magazine level and I don't really know how to make my essay THAT interesting
any advice?

I grew up, for the past 17 years, in a family which is financially stable, more or less. Fortunately for me, I have the chance to go further in terms of education. My family owns a pipe fitting company. At my younger ages I discover and learn new things by just visiting there and observing how the systems worked. This is why applying for material engineering in University of Michigan suits me the best.

Chemistry and Physics interest me in a lot of ways and it helps me to advance and understand deeply those subjects. No matter how hard they are, they never stop me to dig in more and more. I have always based my studies on curiosity. It never occurred to me to stop asking and learn more whenever I am given a new mystery especially at school. I have always been competitive since I was a kid. This nature is what has caused me to never accept the fact that I lost. I always have to win things academically or even just a in games. I am optimistic that these aspects will help me when I explore engineering, in particular, material engineering.

Outgoing nature has always been in my blood. This quality that I discovered within myself is actually helping me to be socially active. I strongly believe that connection is also an important essence to be successful. My creativity leads me to ideas that are out of the box. In material engineering, creating new things that would be useful for the society is the main goal. By having such creativity, I am confident I will do great choosing this major.

Material engineering will enhance me in many ways. It helps me to learn about creating new useful things. My determination is to try establishing many ways to improve today's inventions to become more efficient. Being a part of a study like material engineering is the best way to improve the world to be a better place.
beskate 2 / 5  
Sep 12, 2011   #2
You have great answer, but you just need to turn sentences around a bit. Instead of saying (I understand that ...) try something like ( understanding of XYZ is important to ...)

For example:

Learning experience from my parents has helped me to identify my passion and apply for material engineering in University of Michigan.

and next I understand the value and importance of Chemistry and Physics, which brings greater understanding of engineering.

So you get the idea , go on you can do it :)
collegebound28 13 / 22  
Sep 17, 2011   #3
A thesaurus is always a good resource- try to vary your sentence structures.
Klose_Jun 2 / 2  
Sep 18, 2011   #4
Try to transform the structures of your sentence, as well as thinking of some adjectives pretty enough to express your meaning.
steven18 - / 1  
Dec 17, 2012   #5
essay on things that make me unique

I am writing an essay on what makes me unique but i am very bad at writing essays can anyone help?
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Dec 17, 2012   #6
can anyone help?

Yes we can : )
Think what's unique about you; how you are different from others.... Jod down them in point form.
Then find examples for each point from your past experiences and incidents. These situations should reflect that you are a unique person.
Then start writing.;
Write your introduction by introducing yourself to the reader. Briefly mention why you think you are unique
Then have your body paras to explain each point that you took down.
Do your first draft and send it here. We would help you to polish it further : )

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