Unanswered [6] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Undergraduate   % width   Posts: 5


Yale (Why, Criminal Minds, Tetris, Stonehenge, Daily Routine)



Reaper1Shi 7 / 24  
Dec 31, 2010   #1
What would you do with a free afternoon tomorrow?
- After having lunch with my family, I'd watch some Hetalia episodes, finish reading The Girl Who Played with Fire and have a Criminal Minds marathon with friends.

What do you wish you were better at?
- Tetris. I often find myself with every spot filled except for that one line. I wait for the straight piece but it never appears. Tragic.

- I wish I were better at remembering. Too often I find myself unable to recall a dream from the night before. More embarrassingly, I will tell the same story to friends.

Recall a compliment you received that you especially value. What was it? From whom did it come?
- "For an immigrant, you speak good English." (Planning on changing this if a better one comes to mind.)
If you could witness one moment in history, what would it be and why?
- The burning of the Library of Alexandria. As a lover of books/An avid reader, I want to know who was truly responsible for the tragedy. It took over 2000 years to rediscover the lost knowledge.

- Stonehenge was created by a culture bereft of written records. I want to witness its creation to uncover the "mystery of Stonehenge." Was it a temple for religion or science?

If you were choosing students to form a Yale class, what question would you ask here that we have not?
- If you had to eliminate one thing from your daily routine, what would you choose to remove? Why?

Why Yale?
-Just as an assignment accidentally left unfinished the night before does not magically write itself, there is no ideal college experience that exists. Or so I thought, until I found Yale. Yale offers students room to explore their interests with its distributional requirement system that allows you freedom in designing your curriculum. Additionally, it's residential college systems welcomes you into a warm and close knit family. Essentially though, there is no story without a cast of characters. And at Yale, the rich and eclectic cast of extraordinary professors and quirky students augments and defines the tale, a tale I want to be part of.

Help! :O I need to cut down on my word count for the "Why Yale" question and make it flow better! Additionally, I'm not sure which of the answers I should use for the Short Takes.

Metrol 2 / 11  
Dec 31, 2010   #2
The first one is a fragment. Sounds like Harry potter. I'm not sure if the first sentence tightens up the whole. Maybe consider removing it. --> an assignment accidentally left unfinished the night before does not magically write itself,

Hope that helps.

The following is my allocation of time for tomorrow after noon. Please read:
I will drink a cold up of orange juice and think about my future like place to stay for March break. I will finish my applications and learn about how the fed operates.
OP Reaper1Shi 7 / 24  
Dec 31, 2010   #3
There is no tale without a cast of characters. And at Yale, the rich and eclectic cast of extraordinary professors and quirky "Yalies" define the story that I want to be a part of. Students have an opportunity to find themselves. The distributional requirement system allows freedom in designing your curriculum, helping students stumble upon their passions. With rigorous courses, notable faculty and collegiate character, Yale is a melting pot of opportunities.

I rewrote my "Why Yale?" paragraph. Let me know how this is, please!
pchen1 - / 3  
Dec 31, 2010   #4
Reaper1Shi
I like it. Maybe talk about the motto of yale if possible? To show that you ve actually done some researhces?
OP Reaper1Shi 7 / 24  
Dec 31, 2010   #5
Thank you for your comment. I tried to incorporate it in, but it just didn't seem to flow.

Good luck with your apps!


Home / Undergraduate / Yale (Why, Criminal Minds, Tetris, Stonehenge, Daily Routine)
Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳