Yale motivation - What do you think?

One of the most important things to me is that Yale is both traditional and modern, which creates an environment where students will be able to reap enduring values and, at the same time, forge the new ones for the future. In addition, I recognize myself with the sense of globalization strived by the university. To complete, Yale is synonym of excellence, the same excellence that I aim to achieve following a degree at this university.

Hello,

Whenever your write an essay like this, it is best to give an example. Anyone can say Yale is great, Yale is amazing....give concrete examples of why it is great and amazing. Failure to do this will just make the admissions committee think you are just applying to the school for the "Brand Name" and not for the resources. -AAO

Hope this helps.