Prompt: Choose an issue of importance to you. The issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.
Youth's Lack of Interest
We find ourselves today in a generation full of young adults that know little or nothing about the world that surrounds them. Who can blame them? They have school, family, friends, sports, and their own personal issues to worry about, which keep them from engaging with outside problems. The real issue is not that they live hectic lives because if that were the case, then no one would know about problems that were going on in the world. The main setback here is: many young adults are starting to become uninterested in today's political concerns, which inn return, affect them. Take voting for example. In the 2000 presidential election, only 36.1 percent of adults, ages 18-24, voted. As one can see, the percentage of young adults that voted is very low. This is due, according to research, to the youth's lack of knowledge in the politics area. This is obviously something to be very concerned about since these vote are the ones that decide the future of our country. Another common reason as to why young people do not vote is because they believe one will not make a difference. If these young adults were informed and more concerned about what was going on around them, they would realize that one person can make a difference. They could go out and pass out flyers to people, informing them about the different parties that were running. That way they would really make a difference. With all the different activities that young people have today, it is not surprising to see that they lose interest on important political issues that go on today.
We find ourselves today in a generation full of young adults thatwho know little or nothing about the world that surrounds them.
They have school, family, friends, sports, and their own personal issues to worry about, which keeps them from engaging with outside problems.
Hi Maria,
I am offering you a few of the needed corrections and one suggestion. Note the sentence with the word "since." Be careful when using this word, as it is a record of time. Use the word "because" in sentences such as these in the future.
Otherwise, I think with a little work, your essay can be a very good one.
--Mark :)
The real issue is not that they live hectic lives, because if that were the case, then no one would know about the problems that were going on in the world.
The main setback here is:that many young adults are starting to become uninteresteddisinterested in today's political concerns, which inninreturnturn , affect them.
This is due, according to researchAccording to research, this is due , to the youth's lack of knowledge in the politics area.realm of politics.
This is obviously something to be very concerned about since these vote are the ones that decide the future of our country.
--> A common error: the word "since" is a record of time. Therefore, the word that is supposed to be here is "because."
Mark,
Thank you very much for your help!
I was wondering? Do you think I should extend this essay a little bit more? And do you think i'm proving my point?
This is obviously something to be very concerned about since these votes are the ones that decide the future of our country.
Who can blame them? They have school, family, friends, sports, and their own personal issues to worry about, which keep them from engaging with outside problems. This sentence is the distraction. It is better without it.
:-)
I do think you should extend it. What is the most important reason we need to encourage young people to vote?
