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The following graph shows the percentage of unemployment rates for the female in the UK.

2 - The summary overview and analytical paragraphs do not feel complete. It comes across as having missing information. There is...

Writing FeedbackHoaitam123 - Apr 9, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Writing task 1: online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

2 - It is always best to indicate the number of images provided in the summary overview. That way the reader...

Writing Feedbacka pearl - Apr 7, 2024 / Holt - Apr 19, 2024
IELTS WT2: spoken communication is more powerful than written communication.

2 - There is a problem in the opening paragraph. There is no real restatement. as required by the task accuracy...

Writing Feedbacktanquocnguyen - Apr 7, 2024 / Holt - Apr 19, 2024
In order to learn a language well, we should also learn about cultures. Do you agree or disagree?

4 - Hi there, Your essay is well-written in my opinion, the idea is fully developed and some advanced words are...

Writing Feedbackhuong186 - Mar 31, 2024 / chloepham - Apr 16, 2024
Pros and cons of developing tourism industry

4 - i think you can give further explanation on the main idea of body1, like why "The tourist industry is...

Writing FeedbackIxora Ho - Apr 6, 2024 / chloepham - Apr 16, 2024
Is technology (television, computers, cell phones, tablet devices, MP3 players) beneficial for child

3 - Do not ramble and try to inflate the word count. It will only confuse the reader. Try to cut...

Writing FeedbackUrie - Apr 6, 2024 / akmaster101 - Apr 14, 2024
Some people believe that traveling alone is the best way to experience a country or a culture.

4 - On the one hand, it is seemingly understandable why people subscribe to the view that traveling alone is the...

Writing Feedbackalicean242 - Apr 3, 2024 / echo5016 - Apr 14, 2024
In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing

3 - Yes, like Holt said, use a space after any punctuation used, such as a period or comma. Additionally, I...

Writing FeedbackNguyenVanHung24 - Apr 3, 2024 / akmaster101 - Apr 13, 2024
How many migrants worked temporarily in 4 different countries

2 - The task 1 essay should only be composed of 200 words at the most. You have over analyzed the...

Writing FeedbackANCUTO - Apr 6, 2024 / Holt - Apr 13, 2024
IELTS Writing Task 1- Households owning electronic devices

2 - Do not overwrite in the task 1 essay. Stay within the 200 maximum word count. Writing more than that...

Writing FeedbackJennieaufif - Apr 4, 2024 / Holt - Apr 13, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - EDUCATION TOPIC

2 - The prompt restatement has 2 immediately seen mistakes. The first, is that the opening sentence is unrelated to the...

Writing FeedbackJennieaufif - Apr 3, 2024 / Holt - Apr 13, 2024
The only reason for learning a foreign language is to travel to or work in a foreign country

2 - There are 3 points of view that should be present in the first paragraph. The first public opinion and...

Writing FeedbackChuyen97 - Apr 2, 2024 / Holt - Apr 12, 2024
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and

2 - Sadly, the essay does not meet the minimum word requirement of 150 words. This will get an automatic failing...

Writing Feedbackwtfight - Apr 2, 2024 / Holt - Apr 12, 2024
Task 2: an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home

2 - Okay. This is a single opinion essay, not a comparison essay. Therefore, the response paragraph that does not relate...

Writing Feedbackjade126 - Mar 31, 2024 / Holt - Apr 12, 2024
Owned and rented accommodation - IELTS 1: Bar chart

4 - Data Accuracy: Double-check the percentages mentioned in your summary to ensure accuracy. Ensure that the percentages add up correctly...

Writing Feedbackffriendd - Mar 29, 2024 / DeverX - Apr 9, 2024
writing ielts task 1: The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were

5 - Clarity and Precision: Be precise with your descriptions. Instead of saying "the bar chart witnessed several changes," specify what...

Writing Feedbackpthu553 - Mar 29, 2024 / DeverX - Apr 9, 2024
Young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community

3 - Hi there, I'm a bit confused by your conjunction " granted", I assume that the previous sentence and the...

Writing FeedbackKhacHauPham - Mar 29, 2024 / Jennieaufif - Apr 4, 2024
Miles Morales and his Legacy as a New Spider-Man

2 - You could also consider including a discussion that relates to the comparison of the previous iterations of Spider-Man against...

Writing Feedbackanthonys455 - Mar 31, 2024 / Holt - Apr 3, 2024
The gaming industry - PS5 ENG102

2 - I believe that focusing your paper on specific problems early on in the research would also help. I do...

Writing FeedbackTolaDuressa - Mar 30, 2024 / Holt - Apr 3, 2024
Comparing living with parent and living in campus

2 - There is no effort on your part to paraphrase the original prompt. You merely did a cut and paste...

Writing FeedbackDuDu123 - Mar 30, 2024 / Holt - Apr 3, 2024
Writting task 2. The best way to solve the world's environmental problem is to increase the cost

2 - The essay discussion is based on the extent of your (dis)agreement with the provided discussion. It is not based...

Writing FeedbackTrang1711200 - Mar 28, 2024 / Holt - Apr 2, 2024
Mindset for ielts 1: the maps below shows Colwick Arts Centre in 2005 and today

3 - @Holt Thank you so much, I will try my best for the next time...

Writing FeedbackSarahisme - Mar 20, 2024 / Sarahisme - Apr 1, 2024
Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal

2 - You did a good job in the prompt restatement. It is on point and sticks close to the original....

Writing Feedbackphuonghanguyenth - Mar 28, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
Essay about interview in most large companies

3 - @klinh2806 List your views specifically on your selection. Give detailed explanation on why you agree or disagree. Your essay...

Writing Feedbackklinh2806 - Mar 6, 2024 / Catherine Frank - Mar 28, 2024
ielts writing task 2: Rich countries often give money to poorer countries

2 - The essay will receive an immediate failing Task Accuracy score because you did not reword/restate/rewrite the topic in your...

Writing Feedbackpthu553 - Mar 28, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
Social media has completely changed the way family and friends communicate with each other.

2 - You have not taken the writing time allowance into consideration with this essay presentation. It will be impossible for...

Writing FeedbackTHUY BACH - Mar 18, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries.

3 - it is a great time....

Writing Feedbackanne150707 - Mar 25, 2024 / garrickchaos - Mar 28, 2024
Engineering, rough draft about engineering

2 - There are instances in the presentation where you could use more concise language. Some of your paragraphs tend to...

Writing FeedbackAprieto - Mar 27, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
Some educationalists argue that non-exam, art-based subjects, such as music, drama, art, and craft..

2 - English essays follow one specific golden rule: All sentences must begin the first word with a capital letter /...

Writing Feedbacktohonganh - Mar 26, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people

2 - The first paragraph cannot meet the maximum preliminary scoring considerations because the writer has not made an effort to...

Writing FeedbackProlevelmax9 - Mar 25, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Annual Pay of Doctors and Other Workers

2 - An accurate summary overview would include a listing of the 7 countries in the line graph. It would also...

Writing Feedbacksophiemoore62 - Mar 23, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
Essay about whether we should remove the non-academic subjects or not - revised required

2 - Kindly remember that the word "I", in reference to oneself, must always be written in uppercase, as a capital...

Writing FeedbackMidu - Mar 22, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
IELTS-CAM 9-TASK 1-ISLAND BEFORE AND AFTER THE CONSTRUCTION OF TOURIST FACILITIES

2 - In the second paragraph, you do not have to say "2 maps". Instead, you should refer to the first...

Writing Feedbacklinhdatielts8 - Mar 21, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
IELTS Task 2, working in large business

2 - Why did you write the response in quotation marks from beginning to end? That is unnecessary in a task...

Writing FeedbackFieldJing - Mar 21, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
[IELTS TASK 2] Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled...

2 - The prompt restatement is incomplete as it does not refer to the basis of the debate regarding legislating recycling...

Writing Feedbacksnackara - Mar 21, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
Is it wiser for a first-time buyer to opt for a larger or smaller home??

2 - Being a research proposal, there should be a series of sources being indicated in the presentation to aid in...

Writing Feedbackmsodek1 - Mar 20, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
Large companies use sports events to promote their products.Some people think it has a negative...

2 - Your opinion is not based upon the correct premise. The question you have to answer is "Some people think...

Writing FeedbackTranMinhKhoi - Mar 19, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
An essay: Different ways of studying

2 - The writing guide has asked you to mention the effects of studying as a group vs. individual study time....

Writing Feedbackwannapassenglish - Mar 19, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
Are libraries necessary? IELTS 2: OPINION ESSAY

2 - The prompt restatement is only partially correct. It deviated from the original discussion when it said "there are no...

Writing FeedbackEmmadafish - Mar 18, 2024 / Holt - Mar 28, 2024
Some people think that children perform better in a single-sex school

3 - Maybe you might add more words such as futhemore, moreover, due to the fact that, considering the fact that...

Writing Feedbackanniejshsjh - Mar 5, 2024 / Leila321 - Mar 25, 2024
To succeed in a business, one needs to be good at maths. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

2 - To what extent? Your response is incomplete. You need to use a measured or emotional response in this...

Writing FeedbackTheodoris - Mar 17, 2024 / Holt - Mar 21, 2024
Pros and cons of self-study

2 - If this was written as a simple English writing exercise, then I would say "good job!" you got your...

Writing Feedbackthanh lam - Mar 15, 2024 / Holt - Mar 20, 2024
IELTS writing task 2 - Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are...

2 - Try to avoid the use of the same words or phrases from the original prompt. That is because you...

Writing FeedbackZebb - Mar 14, 2024 / Holt - Mar 20, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during...

2 - The summary overview is not restated enough in the words of the writer to not be considered a cut...

Writing FeedbackDang Gia Bao - Mar 14, 2024 / Holt - Mar 20, 2024
The graph below shows the percentage of adults whose healthcare needs went unmet in the past year

2 - The summary overview will receive a failing mark because it is a run-on sentence. There are about 3 ideas...

Writing FeedbackJessica159815 - Mar 13, 2024 / Holt - Mar 20, 2024
The diagram below shows how a solar powered water pump works

2 - The immediate problem with this presentation is the format. A task 1 essay follows the 3 paragraph format in...

Writing Feedbacknhatanhen - Mar 12, 2024 / Holt - Mar 20, 2024
Task 1 (Pie Chart) About the highest level of education achieved by people over 21 in 2 countries.

2 - Your summary overview is inaccurate. You are not properly identifying the components of the image. There are 2 pie...

Writing FeedbackAdrena1998 - Mar 12, 2024 / Holt - Mar 20, 2024
Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life.

3 - @thuongnguyen6372 please your first sentence in your second paragraph has some uncertainty which you need to avoid that; be...

Writing Feedbackthuongnguyen6372 - Feb 28, 2024 / Aroma - Mar 14, 2024
ONLY GOVERNMENTS CAN TAKE PART IN PROTECTING THE ENVIRONMENT?

3 - @strawberry jasmi Please, you only emphasized on what individuals do to degrade the environment but you did not write...

Writing Feedbackstrawberry jasmi - Mar 9, 2024 / Aroma - Mar 13, 2024
IELTS Task 1: The graph below shows of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000-2010

3 - Thank you very much!...

Writing FeedbackHZQ - Mar 11, 2024 / HZQ - Mar 12, 2024
The table below shows the production of cacao beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998.

2 - The summary overview could use some additional information such as a run-down of the 6 countries and the measurement...

Writing FeedbackThanhdat2510 - Mar 11, 2024 / Holt - Mar 11, 2024
ONLINE APARTMENT PROMOTION

2 - The statement tries to be exciting to entice the reader to use the service. However, the writer fails to...

Writing FeedbackVThuong - Mar 10, 2024 / Holt - Mar 11, 2024
It is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school

2 - The essay is not long enough. As a task 2 paper, this opinion presentation should meet the 250 minimum...

Writing Feedbacklethixuandaoa - Mar 10, 2024 / Holt - Mar 11, 2024
Essay about the waste collection by recycling centre - writing ielts task1

3 - @Holt Thank you a lot for your feedback. I will practice more to overcome the problem mentioned....

Writing Feedbackdramoon - Mar 5, 2024 / dramoon - Mar 10, 2024
ỈELTS 2 - Many people believe that social networking sites cause negative effects

2 - Incorrect vocabulary. This is somewhat of a redundancy since bad and consequence actually refer to the same thing....

Writing Feedbackalicegemma - Mar 9, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024
Video records are a better way to learn about the way other people in the world live

2 - The writer's opinion is incorrect. The question to be responded to is based upon the premise of "To...

Writing Feedbackttuuyenvg - Mar 8, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024
Some people say that men are naturally more competitive than women

2 - Avoid sounding uncertain when presenting discussion points. It is not good for your score since the examiner is...

Writing Feedbackthuytiennguyenho - Mar 8, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024
IELTS TASK 2 It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed

2 - The essay starts off strong with a very good prompt restatement, a clear writer's opinion, and an excellent thesis...

Writing Feedbackhelld - Mar 8, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024
IELTS writing task 2 - These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born

2 - The word count is within an acceptable number. However, the essay itself is not well written nor developed. The...

Writing FeedbackSilviotto - Mar 7, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024
Essay about The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites

2 - I will admit that you have met the word count requirement of this essay task. However, having met the...

Writing Feedbackhalanvuong - Mar 7, 2024 / Holt - Mar 10, 2024

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