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Summary: Why education, not punishment, is the solution to reducing crime | John Lonergan

3 - Hi there, Your writing is good and its topic is interesting,however, i found some mistakes. Let me share them with you,-This is because...

Writing Feedbackibe13 - Sep 21, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 22, 2016
Summary of TED fusion is energy's future (Steve Cowley)

7 - Hi Ifan21,I have few notes for you.* One of the crucial environmental {to make it clearly} problems nowadays isEnergy {energy} crisis and...

Writing FeedbackIfan21 - Sep 21, 2016 / Panjul88 - Sep 22, 2016
There are many nurses migrating to developed nations in favour of well-paid vacancies.

2 - Hi Rizaldo Let me give you some advice...... nations in favour of well-paid vacancies(salaries). ... health care system where nurses are the preliminary...

Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 22, 2016 / Yonathan - Sep 22, 2016
(TED) What Islam Really Says About Women: Alaa Murabit

4 - Hallo,There are several correction for you,In globalized globalization era,..... ...As a young Libyan Muslim woman,... ...She said that nowadays religious religion institutions are dominated...

Writing Feedbackelasyari93 - Sep 22, 2016 / David54 - Sep 22, 2016
Learn to understand of ourselves

4 - Hi there, I've read your writing and I want to give you some suggestions. In my opinion, there are some unclear sentences, I...

Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 22, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 22, 2016
The history of Circus started in ancient times already

5 - Hi MJT,I have few corrections for you.- The circus is one of the ... - There are two kinds of the circus that...

Writing FeedbackMJT - Sep 16, 2016 / Panjul88 - Sep 22, 2016
Summary: Chinese Anti-Corruption Activists on Trial for "Disturbing Public Order"

3 - Hii firman, Here my suggestion for your text. You have some misspelling words on text such as:Occured = occurred Transparency Representated activiests = activists Persepted = presented...

Writing FeedbackFirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 22, 2016 / Abu_Gosok - Sep 22, 2016
The nursing shortage is still a problem in both developing and developed countries

3 - Hi Yonathan,after reading your summary, i have some suggestions, perhaps usefull for you 1."countries to get better salary salaries and better" 2."....In developing countries...

Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 22, 2016 / Dioba - Sep 22, 2016
Summary: Sees the Progress of Tuberculosis Treatments

4 - Hi Hanachi,Your writing is quite good, but I have few notes for you. *.....sleeping by yourself, alone {more appropriate to use} ...

Writing Feedbackhanachi - Sep 22, 2016 / Panjul88 - Sep 22, 2016
Summary: Over 30 Killed in Attack on Nigerian School

2 - Hi Firman Let me give you some advice...This tragedy was (occured) two years ago in Nigeria. There was a terorism action and a...

Writing FeedbackFirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 22, 2016 / Yonathan - Sep 22, 2016
Should students study in the single-sex schools in order to perform better academically

3 - Hi Kwang Let me give you some advice...Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, (other people) believe...

Writing Feedbackkwang997 - Sep 22, 2016 / Yonathan - Sep 22, 2016
TED Summary: The Taboo Secret To Better Health by Molly Winter

5 - hi ledha i have suggestions on your essay to be better It is caused by drinking sewage water.have you ever think...

Writing FeedbackIedha01 - Sep 21, 2016 / bismillah - Sep 22, 2016
TED Summary: A Guide to the Energy of the Earth by Joshua M. Sneideman

4 - hi... Fitri12 let me try to give you some correctionsto make a noun phrase, you need to construct an adjective and noun so...

Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 21, 2016 / Jawa - Sep 22, 2016
When art and technology pull each other to bits

3 - confusing sentence although art and technology have a close relation, those came apart at art festivals in some capital cities throughout the...

Writing FeedbackJawa - Sep 21, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 22, 2016
Advantages of having tattoos - they may increase your chance of working

4 - Hello @fira28, I got some advice for your writing. Hope, it can help you ..Tattoos is an art that lies in the...

Writing FeedbackFira28 - Sep 21, 2016 / elasyari93 - Sep 22, 2016
A history of India's independence

6 - Hello Jawa, I have little notes for you: There was no This was not exception for India which had ......, Nehru ordered...

Writing FeedbackJawa - Sep 19, 2016 / FirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 22, 2016
Arctic ice melt is killing birds and will leave caribou stranded

3 - too many misspelling words. The increasing loss of sea-ice whicH caused by melting ice in Artics victimizeS the local ecosystems [ singular/plural...

Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 21, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 22, 2016
TED Summary : what do you think when you look at me?

3 - Hello Jawa, This is little note for you :The United States of America is the most racial discrimination country ... ( Ithink...

Writing FeedbackJawa - Sep 21, 2016 / FirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 22, 2016
Nadia Lopez: Why open a school? To close a prison

4 - Hello @mdamanhuri77, i got some advice for your writing1. When Nadia Lopez openedschool, Mott Hall Bridges (...) purpose: Open school to Close...

Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 22, 2016 / abdasyari93 - Sep 22, 2016
News contributor elect what to show on television and what to print in newsletter

3 - Hallo bams, i have corrected your writing, i have some suggestions to you1. at this sentence: "Not only that news also can...

Writing FeedbackBAMS14 - Sep 22, 2016 / hanachi - Sep 22, 2016
How to Conquer Ourselves For Public Speaking

2 - Hello @agungdanprakoso5, I got some suggestions about your writing.Here my advice:1. Right now, i want to discuss related to video from TED...

Writing Feedbackagungdanprakoso5 - Sep 22, 2016 / abdasyari93 - Sep 22, 2016
In China, Michelle Obama Tours School, Forbidden City

3 - 1.According VOA news daily ACCORDING TO THE VOS DAILLY NEWS2.Michelle Obama hadBEEN visited China that aim to speech exceedingly human rights and...

Writing Feedbackagungdanprakoso5 - Sep 22, 2016 / BAMS14 - Sep 22, 2016
In recent days, some professional athletes become millionaires

2 - could you mind, if i give little bit suggestion for u here we go. 1. "Some companies is using the famous effect...

Writing FeedbackDafahAhmad - Sep 22, 2016 / agungdanprakoso5 - Sep 22, 2016
TED Summary: How to succeed? Get more sleep.

3 - hi ibal... of our mind is a small idea notion that can awaken much bigger than others ones inside. ..., energetic and cheerful...

Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 21, 2016 / mdamanhuri77 - Sep 22, 2016
Summary: Violent Crime Rising in U.S. Cities Compared to 2015

2 - hi ibe, let me see your summaryin2016 saw a dramatically increase of violent of crime in some majors U.S. cities. This It continues...

Writing Feedbackibe13 - Sep 21, 2016 / mdamanhuri77 - Sep 22, 2016
More and more people do not ride the bicycle as a model of transportation even though it has many

3 - Hi, your essay seems intresting and convincing. Here are some errors i noticed; How to can one encourage people to use ......to other...

Writing Feedbackkenxu - Sep 21, 2016 / philo - Sep 22, 2016
Article Summary: Weekend Rehab:Trying To Fight Off Pollution by Dawn Davis

2 - hi liedha... terrible experience which is related to the air pollution. ... felt that treadmills an gyms and are not suitable ... ... bring...

Writing FeedbackIedha01 - Sep 21, 2016 / mdamanhuri77 - Sep 22, 2016
Summary of Article "Air pollution is sending tiny magnetic particles into your brain" (Clare Wilson)

2 - Hello @ifan21, I got some suggestions for your writing.Here my advice:1. nanoparticles Nano particles magnetic iron are less than 200 nanometres nano...

Writing FeedbackIfan21 - Sep 21, 2016 / abdasyari93 - Sep 22, 2016
Let Us Socializing about Alzheimer's disease !!

3 - The effects of Alzheimer's disease includes losing items (like glasses) in the house, forgetting someone's name or difficulty in finding the right...

Writing Feedbacknomoto79 - Sep 21, 2016 / nehakhatri17 - Sep 22, 2016
Summary Article: Revisiting globalization of English

2 - Hallo Ibal28 It is such a great Essay, These following are corrections to make it even better : ... two kinds of English...

Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 21, 2016 / Ifan21 - Sep 22, 2016
A Great Elephant Was Defeated By an Ingenious Ant Once upon a time, in the jungle forest, lived ass

2 - Hi San, I believe this is my first review for your work and with that, I would like to WELCOME you to...

Writing Feedbackhanachi - Sep 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 22, 2016
Popular image of Hawaii that always relates to hula dancing with women swaying their hips

7 - Hi, thanks for getting back to me. I would suggest this replacement sentence:The popular image of Hawaii that prominently features women...

Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 21, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 21, 2016
(TED) Judson Brewer: A Simple Way to Break a Bad Habit

6 - Hi there! @abdasyariI have read your writing and wonder about some tips like these:1) It is commonly known/knowledge that everyone has positive...

Writing Feedbackabdasyari93 - Sep 21, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 21, 2016
Traditional clothes, bowler hats, handmade macramé shawls, layered skirts and blouses in La Paz

2 - Hi Bekuk22. You did it well. I found a minor mistake. So, I just left a few of suggestions.Currently (you may also...

Writing FeedbackBekuk22 - Sep 21, 2016 / ibal28 - Sep 21, 2016
TED Talk Summary; Nicholas Stern: The State of The Climate - and What We Might Do about it

2 - hallo rizal there are few suggestion for youCountries, nowadays, face remarkable enhances (...) economic achievement,nowadays, but they are vulnerableS to overcome...

Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 21, 2016 / BAMS14 - Sep 21, 2016
Hula dancing plays important function as an important aspect of Hawaiian culture.

2 - Hi Dils, your writing is pretty good, I found only slightly mistake.Hula is (put article "a" since Hula is the only one...

Writing Feedbackdils - Sep 21, 2016 / Fitri12 - Sep 21, 2016
THE TED SUMMARY MONTH IS THE VOICE

3 - Hi bismillah. I left some suggestions for you. Hope it can helps you.Each one of us (you can use Everyone or Some...

Writing Feedbackbismillah - Sep 21, 2016 / ibal28 - Sep 21, 2016
Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job really enjoy? WRITING TASKS 2 - IELTS

2 - Hi Andika, here I give you another example regarding your introduction as my though after reading your essay. I hope it can...

Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 21, 2016 / Anaguna - Sep 21, 2016
Summary Article - Nascar hit with $500 Million Racial Discrimination Lawsuit

2 - Hi, since you didn't post a link to the article, I can't really comment on the content of your summary, but here...

Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 21, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 21, 2016
Article Summary: This Woman Might have Found a Deep-Fried Rat's Head in Her Popeyes Meal

3 - Hey Fitri12 These following corrections are addressed to make your great essay even better : That (That is only used if you've mentioned...

Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 21, 2016 / Ifan21 - Sep 21, 2016
It is our responsibility to the earth to solve the climate crisis

4 - Hello You have a good summary I have some correctionsAs a human, wepeople should be more concerned about this matter pay more...

Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 21, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 21, 2016
Hawaii islands are one of interesting places to visit because of their original culture

3 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections... because they have originally culture and beautifully landscape to see. ... is...

Writing FeedbackAlamsyah Ismail - Sep 21, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 21, 2016
Traveling is the best way to relax and enjoy the beautiful scenery after the hectic pace of life

2 - Hi giansy11, I think your essay is good enough, however, there are only some minor mistakes that I have found. Let...

Writing FeedbackGiansy11 - Sep 21, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 21, 2016
Hula dance takes an important role in Hawaiian culture as a part of ritual in honor of gods.

2 - hallo Yonathan, i have corrected your writing, i have some suggestions.1. at this sentence: "Although the origin" should be "Although the origins"2....

Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 21, 2016 / hanachi - Sep 21, 2016
The incredible story of Hula Dancing and Hawaii. Gorgeous islands.

2 - Hi Dio Your summarization are great but here is some advice to improve your writing skills...... the characteristics of Hawaiian dancer (dancers). ......

Writing FeedbackDioba - Sep 21, 2016 / Yonathan - Sep 21, 2016
Having a job that we love can be simply called as enjoying our hobby and get paid for it.

4 - hi kiki, today I just focus on your introduction. It is clear that to make introduction well, you have to pay attention two...

Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 21, 2016 / ibe13 - Sep 21, 2016
Talent and Hard Work as an Important Key to be Success

4 - Hi mem, here my thought... people want to be a successfulsuccess and do everything ...... have a natural ability and talentedbut...

Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 21, 2016 / Aris05 - Sep 21, 2016
The Story of a Mouse Deer and a Snail

2 - Your writing was pretty good, but much of this story was confusing to me. I don't understand what the plan was....

Writing Feedbackabdasyari93 - Sep 21, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 21, 2016
The level of satisfaction of workers depends on how they do their job, the occupation is not crucial

2 - hi friend i have some suggestions to you about some people say that in order,if you want to be happy that...

Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 21, 2016 / bismillah - Sep 21, 2016
The most important thing to be happy is to have an occupation that we enjoy doing. Is it true?

2 - Hi! I have some advice for you:disagree that statement... should bedisagree to the statement......because of happiness it not depends on job. you...

Writing Feedbackryan31 - Sep 21, 2016 / kiki23 - Sep 21, 2016
Miss Indonesia Wins Best National Costume at Miss Universe 2014

3 - incomplete sentence. there is no verb. a prestigious event annually holds in different countriesthe flow to the next sentence is poor. without explaining...

Writing FeedbackFira28 - Sep 20, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 21, 2016
Summary article_Eating Junk Food Changes Your Cravings

6 - Hii david, i have some thought for youFast food not only causes you are boring bored to eat other cuisine,it's it is...

Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 21, 2016 / Aris05 - Sep 21, 2016
Summary 7: Hula Dancing in Hawaiian Culture

6 - Hi erwin,after reading your summary, i have some suggestions, perhaps usefull for you. 1. "which be located in the Pacific Ocean"----> which is...

Writing Feedbackerwiin - Sep 21, 2016 / Dioba - Sep 21, 2016
Reasons for Urbanization & Negatives of City Life

2 - Hi mem77, Your writing is good, but I found some grammatical issues there, let me show you-The first is, many people move to...

Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 21, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 21, 2016
Summary Article: Population, urbanization and environment

3 - =in several countries, to live in the city is more fascinating for inhabitants rather than in rural area =city becomes the most fascinating...

Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 20, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 21, 2016
Find this out friends. EILTS Summary 5_Hola Dancing in Hawaiian Culture

4 - Hi fatirtalent,after reading your summary, i have some suggestions, perhaps usefull for you. 1.Hawai Island ----> as we know, Hawai is an archipelago. 2.Hawai...

Writing FeedbackFatirtalent - Sep 21, 2016 / Dioba - Sep 21, 2016
Nigel Marsh shared his point of view on how to balance between life and work

2 - In my opinion, the above summary is well written. You have a good skill on writing, Fadhil. To enhance your writing further,...

Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 21, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 21, 2016
Women presence in the every sector of human life

2 - Dear FirmanRomadhon, here are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct me,This video is topic what-->The topic of the video...

Writing FeedbackFirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 21, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Sep 21, 2016
TED.com Pete Alcorn: The world in 2200

3 - ... planet is going to be a bad for inhabitans. the U.N's population data displayed that the trend of population in the...

Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 20, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 21, 2016
Article Summary: Miscarriage Is The Last Thing People Want To Talk About by Jamie Otis

3 - It was Aterrible moment but she tried to share it in order this conversation so that this issue will become more common...

Writing FeedbackIedha01 - Sep 20, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 21, 2016

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