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|Some people argue that government should spend their money on elderly people's care. However, other
5 - there are a lot of grammatical mistakes in your essay. For example : the first sentence of body 1...
Writing Feedbackthuythuong - Jul 22, 2022 / Iloveielts - Jul 25, 2022
|Task 2: Today people live away from their friends and family to find a job in other cities.
3 - From my perspective, the essay is good. However, take care of the thesis sentence: the reasons why the merits...
Writing FeedbackIwilltrymybest - Jul 18, 2022 / Iloveielts - Jul 24, 2022
|The gap between the rich and the poor countries has become more evident in recent years
5 - In the beginning, you use the wrong grammar : relating to + v-ing. The wrong of grammar will affect...
Writing FeedbackHeilwig - Jul 21, 2022 / Iloveielts - Jul 24, 2022
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers.
3 - @Nguyen Thi - "they don't let us be the people person we want" - "they don't want their children...
Writing FeedbackNguyen Thi - Jul 24, 2022 / Thuy Tran 07 - Jul 24, 2022
|People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world. Show your reasons solutions
3 - It seems to me that the writer is trying to make unnecessary sentences and prolong his presentation to showcase...
Writing Feedbackerafmary - Jul 17, 2022 / alice05 - Jul 24, 2022
|Face-to-face interaction between people is getting rare these days
3 - You indeed gave a good start and a nice ending,but you are too detailed in the middle which make...
Writing Feedbackdatanh1601 - Jul 21, 2022 / Apurba_unique - Jul 23, 2022
|Education is the key to reduce consumption of junk food
3 - @Holt Thank you for your advice, I really appreciate it and I wonder if you have time to take...
Writing Feedbackalice05 - Jul 22, 2022 / alice05 - Jul 22, 2022
|Essay about the best way to produce a happier society
2 - The writer has used several advanced English words incorrectly in this presentation. These improperly referenced words reduced the LR...
Writing Feedbackanalysa - Jul 21, 2022 / Holt - Jul 22, 2022
|The proportion of males and females who have done their driving test in certain area in Asia
3 - The first thing I wanna recommend is to attach an image of the chart you are reporting about so...
Writing Feedbackuser2345 - Jul 21, 2022 / alice05 - Jul 22, 2022
|Essays: The juvenile crime rate is growing in metropolises around the globe
3 - add an example to consolidate what you want to express. That is just my opinion, it is better to...
Writing Feedbackbaongoc01 - Jul 19, 2022 / Iwilltrymybest - Jul 21, 2022
|Many people agree that education should be compulsory to all children until a certain age
3 - You need to give at least 2 sentence explaining your viewpoints before giving an example as the example will...
Writing Feedbacktramnguyen2205 - Jul 21, 2022 / Iwilltrymybest - Jul 21, 2022
|Young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community
3 - sorry sir but there are some points I cannot understand what you say so I continue to make such...
Writing FeedbackIwilltrymybest - Jul 20, 2022 / Iwilltrymybest - Jul 21, 2022
|It is a waste of time for high school students to learn literature such as novels
3 - "probably ... arousing their patriotic feelings" - grammar mistake. You should change it into "probably make the reader love...
Writing FeedbackZari - Jul 5, 2022 / alice05 - Jul 21, 2022
|Many governments budget money for the sports industry
3 - you have misbalanced 2 body paragraphs. Use more practical example to prove your explanations as it has little relevance...
Writing Feedbackdieuhoa - Jul 19, 2022 / Iwilltrymybest - Jul 20, 2022
|Essay about ielts writing task 1 : The process illustrates how plastic bottles are recycled.
2 - The writer should try to meet the sentence requirement for each paragraph. For an acceptable summary overview + trending...
Writing Feedbackcamellia24 - Jul 19, 2022 / Holt - Jul 19, 2022
|Essay about the internet connections in different countries during the period of 2001 and 2002
2 - Since there are 2 images presented, there should be at least 4 sentences in the summary overview. 2 sentences...
Writing Feedbackislaaa - Jul 19, 2022 / Holt - Jul 19, 2022
|Discuss the cause of air pollution, conclude the benefits of car-free days, give three solutions
2 - Thank you for outlining how you decided to approach the writing of the essay. I have to point out...
Writing FeedbackEmmaNguyen - Jul 19, 2022 / Holt - Jul 19, 2022
|Nowadays, the consumption of sweetened drinks is dramatically increasing in society
2 - I reviewed the original prompt and discovered that there is no reference to obesity or blood vessel diseases. These...
Writing FeedbackAlice98 - Jul 19, 2022 / Holt - Jul 19, 2022
|IELTS TASK 2: HOSTING INTERNATIONAL SPORTS EVENT - OPINION ESSAY
Writing Feedbackflorairene - May 4, 2022 / florairene - Jul 19, 2022
|Today, fashion is becoming more and more important in choosing clothes. What are the reasons?
Writing Feedbackjjgenius - Jul 12, 2022 / jjgenius - Jul 19, 2022
|Nowadays people depend on technology for leisure activities. Is this a positive or negative trend?
5 - using more supporting sentence for each of your ideas. Recheck the use of comma. Try to diversify your vocabulary....
Writing Feedbackthaoliinhhh - Jul 8, 2022 / Iwilltrymybest - Jul 18, 2022
|Bullying - a common crisis in schools. Main root causes and viable solutions.
3 - Your essay seems to be too long to fit with the essay required time of ielts test. Furthermore, writing...
Writing Feedbackfkem - Jul 17, 2022 / Iwilltrymybest - Jul 18, 2022
|The percentage of international and UK students gaining second class degrees or better
Writing Feedbacknguyenhung1711 - Jul 17, 2022 / Holt - Jul 18, 2022
|A blessing and the painful truth of living a longer life
2 - Why is the essay discussing centuries of long life? That is a misinterpretation of the topic for discussion and...
Writing Feedbackrinkypham1801 - Jul 17, 2022 / Holt - Jul 18, 2022
|The chart and table below show customer satisfaction levels in the US with airlines and aspects ...
2 - The statistics about airline agencies are a totally different discussion presentation from the 5 aspects of flying experience. Though...
Writing Feedbackmaylly0 - Jul 17, 2022 / Holt - Jul 18, 2022
|Share as much information as possible or limit them ? (discuss both views)
2 - The opening sentence of the prompt restatement is confusing to read. It is stating the first information as a...
Writing Feedbackalice05 - Jul 16, 2022 / Holt - Jul 17, 2022
|The decision of whether pregnancy termination should be prohibited or not
2 - There is a complete lack of pronoun usage in this essay which indicates that the public opinions were not...
Writing Feedbackhnguyn7 - Jul 16, 2022 / Holt - Jul 17, 2022
|The comparison of water consumption for industrial, agricultural, and domestic purposes
2 - The pie chart enumeration in the trending paragraph is not complete. It should mention all 6 countries as represented...
Writing Feedbackkhain43 - Jul 16, 2022 / Holt - Jul 17, 2022
|Considerable growth in global tourism nowadays
2 - Where there is no evidence to any controversial claims made in the original reference, none should be made in...
Writing FeedbackMinhhh2005 - Jul 16, 2022 / Holt - Jul 17, 2022
|Technological advancement have substantial effects on children's leisure time
2 - There is a problem with the prompt restatement in this presentation. The provided topic is an idea presented in...
Writing Feedbackbdt16032000 - Jul 16, 2022 / Holt - Jul 17, 2022
|TASK 2 | Whether or not to share information about scientific research, business and the academic
Writing FeedbackV_Nhi0802 - Jul 15, 2022 / Holt - Jul 16, 2022
|IELTS TASK 1 The maps below show a breachfront area in AUsstralia in 1950 and today
4 - Try to paraphrase the topic in your essay before writing the overall and you should separate your essay into...
Writing FeedbackLinna2002 - Jul 12, 2022 / Minhhh2005 - Jul 16, 2022
|People buy a range of household goods ( positive or negative development? )
3 - There is a slight inconsistency here. You stated in the introduction paragraph that "the drawbacks significantly outweigh the benefits."...
Writing Feedbackalice05 - Jul 15, 2022 / Minhhh2005 - Jul 16, 2022
|IELTS TASK 1 | The graph shows the average Japanese month salary, and the prices of different TVs
3 - Your essay is really too long for IELTS writing task 1, which only requires at least 150 words. You...
Writing Feedbackanhhkia - Jul 15, 2022 / Minhhh2005 - Jul 16, 2022
|Computers enable people to be able to work at home and children to study at home.
2 - Do not begin the opinion discussion in the first paragraph. While the writer believes he merely restated the prompt,...
Writing Feedbackjjgenius - Jul 15, 2022 / Holt - Jul 15, 2022
|Causes of a rising tendency of youngsters committing crimes in large cities. What can be done?
2 - The paraphrasing attempt of the writer is definitely successful. It stayed focused on the topic without adding or removing...
Writing Feedbackthehappyapple - Jul 14, 2022 / Holt - Jul 15, 2022
|Increasing the minimum legal age for driving is the best way to increase road safe
3 - @trlinh Hi I just have grammar corrections in your essay 1. "To illustrate, 60% patients' case ...". This should...
Writing Feedbacktrlinh - Jul 13, 2022 / alice05 - Jul 15, 2022
|Allocate money in railway lines or existing public transport. Discuss both view give opinion
2 - The essay is too wordy for a task that needs to be completed within 40 minutes. This should not...
Writing Feedbackthienduc2312 - Jul 14, 2022 / Holt - Jul 14, 2022
|An essay about sport (discuss both views)
2 - Do not include a personal opinion statement at the start of the paraphrase. This opinion should not be included...
Writing FeedbackCurtistran - Jul 14, 2022 / Holt - Jul 14, 2022
|MANY MUSEUMS CHARGE FOR ADMISSION WHILE OTHERS ARE FREE. PROS OF FEES OUTWEIGH CONS?
2 - The writer had an almost correct approach to the discussion. The examiner will not be against his providing a...
Writing Feedbackphuongoanh476 - Jul 13, 2022 / Holt - Jul 13, 2022
|The most effective ways to deal with environmental problems
4 - This essay hasn't met the task response yet (the effective way to deal with environmental problems), there is no...
Writing Feedbackstellamnj - Jul 5, 2022 / phuongoanh476 - Jul 13, 2022
|The two pie charts illustrate how different kinds of waste released in one country (1960 - 2011)
2 - The topic restatement based on the existing images is insufficient in terms of reference. Yes, the number of images...
Writing Feedbackyentk - Jul 13, 2022 / Holt - Jul 13, 2022
|The graph & chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission (England, Wales)
2 - The writer has not made an effort to provide a complete summary and analysis of the 2 images. Had...
Writing Feedbackkachyy - Jul 12, 2022 / Holt - Jul 12, 2022
|Pop stars earn much more than classical music performers. Some people think this is fully justified
2 - The word usage of the writer tends to be on the side of incorrect usage. Specifically,the use of the...
Writing FeedbackIwilltrymybest - Jul 12, 2022 / Holt - Jul 12, 2022
|Nowadays fashion plays an important role when people are deciding which clothes to wear
4 - you should divide the essay more appropriately, the introduction and the conclusion are too short compared to the body...
Writing Feedbackmiccc - Jul 9, 2022 / ashleyhoang - Jul 12, 2022
|Students learn what they like or study subjects that are useful for their future? Discuss both views
2 - The essay failed to pass the test the very minute the irrelevant prompt restatement and opinion sentence was presented...
Writing Feedbackphuongoanh476 - Jul 11, 2022 / Holt - Jul 11, 2022
|News media are important in modern society. Why are they so important?
2 - The writer has misunderstood the discussion question. This lack of proper question perception led to both a wrong opinion...
Writing Feedbackhellowdefrgtyj - Jul 11, 2022 / Holt - Jul 11, 2022
|Question about the benefits of universities. It is a topic for IELTS Writing Task 2.
3 - The third paragraph did not fully answer the second question. In the third paragraph, you only mentioned the benefits...
Writing Feedbackkenny311006 - Jul 5, 2022 / camtu0502 - Jul 11, 2022
|"Not everything that is learned is contained in books" the quote perfectly reflects my point of view
2 - A TOEFL test does not require a flowery and empty topic restatement. What sets it apart from the IELTS...
Writing FeedbackJnar - Jul 10, 2022 / Holt - Jul 10, 2022
|Should countries be given a right to interfere in other countries' internal affairs?
2 - There is no need to overstate the discussion topic in the task 2 essay. The examiner is just looking...
Writing FeedbackPham Bien - Jul 10, 2022 / Holt - Jul 10, 2022
|Whether or not the parents are the best teachers has been long discussed dilemma
3 - On the surface ur essay maynot meet length requirement of Ielts writing, even though i havent counted it yet....
Writing Feedbackuser999 - Jul 10, 2022 / Pham Bien - Jul 10, 2022
|Writing task 2; Which institution should be responsible for solving the housing shortage?
3 - perhaps I see your essay is not long enough. Try to use more supporting sentence to consolidate your opinion....
Writing FeedbackQuybao013 - Jul 9, 2022 / Hungneverlose - Jul 10, 2022
|Opinion: the ultimate time for children to commence their formal schooling is as soon as possible
Writing FeedbackHungneverlose - Jul 9, 2022 / Hungneverlose - Jul 10, 2022
|The tendency of replacing conventional classrooms by virtual ones
Writing FeedbackThuy Tran 07 - Jul 9, 2022 / Thuy Tran 07 - Jul 10, 2022
|Students in UK at a university who were able to speak additional languages to their native language
2 - The summary overview is confusing. It is difficult to understand the information because of problems with sentence clarity and...
Writing Feedbackkimmiez - Jul 9, 2022 / Holt - Jul 9, 2022
|Charity in the USA - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - PIE CHARTS
2 - The summary is not as accurate as it could be. Some incorrect information was provided that reduced the authority...
Writing Feedbackjoeynguyen181 - Jul 9, 2022 / Holt - Jul 9, 2022
|Some people believe that teenagers should be required to help the regional community
Writing FeedbackHeliooo - Jul 8, 2022 / Heliooo - Jul 8, 2022
|Ielts Task 1 - The graph represents how much money was spent on meat and fish in a European country
2 - The instruction is to have the writer produce at least 150 words. He was not instructed to write exactly...
Writing FeedbackCheng_ting - Jul 8, 2022 / Holt - Jul 8, 2022
|The line graph shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002-2012
2 - I am unclear as to what type of image was provided for analysis. I cannot imagine how the measurements...
Writing Feedbacklangxuyen0806 - Jul 8, 2022 / Holt - Jul 8, 2022
|The increasing rate of immigration is causing substantial changes in societies
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your precious advice on my work here, it's really effective in providing me...
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