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|Tourism has developed remarkably over the last five decades
3 - @thanhbui64 You should summarize disadvantages more fully in conclusion, rather than just mentioning "would be dangerous...". For...
Writing Feedbackthanhbui64 - Jul 29, 2023 / tieuthanh - Aug 7, 2023
|The essay is about food waste in the world - IELTS Writing
2 - Please remind yourself of the writing time limit for this task. A task 2 essay should be completed within...
Writing Feedbackhoangthu27 - Jul 30, 2023 / Holt - Aug 6, 2023
|The percentage of changing prices every month of three metals (copper, nickel and zinc)
2 - It is difficult to follow the discussion presentation. You have not clearly summarized the image provided. Aside from the...
Writing Feedbackhoanguyen5193 - Jul 30, 2023 / Holt - Aug 6, 2023
|WRITING TASK 1: The two maps demonstrate the changes of Colwick Arts Centre over an 18-year period
2 - The presentation does not follow the correct task 1 format. The task 1 essay should be presented over 3...
Writing FeedbackThanhna - Jul 29, 2023 / Holt - Aug 6, 2023
|Is having dinner together important to people?
2 - It is good to know that you are referencing the discussion options in your presentation. However, the requirement...
Writing Feedbackmaiphuong1806 - Jul 29, 2023 / Holt - Aug 6, 2023
|Essay about IELTS TASK 2 - topic government spending on public services or on space projects
2 - The topic restatement is incomplete. The public opinion is not properly referenced in the writer's version. In fact, it...
Writing Feedbackhuyenchi - Jul 29, 2023 / Holt - Aug 6, 2023
|IELTS 1: The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients
2 - You are short of the minimum word count by 1 word. You will still receive a small deduction for...
Writing Feedbackphydy314 - Jul 29, 2023 / Holt - Aug 6, 2023
|Fewer and fewer people walk on a daily basis. What are the reasons and how to encourage them.
2 - Incorrect word spelling. LR deduction. You need to remember to proof read your paper before you submit it...
Writing Feedbackhjannguyennnnn - Jul 28, 2023 / Holt - Aug 6, 2023
|Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What are the causes of this? What measures?
2 - This is your writer's opinion. It should not be located in the first sentence of the reasoning paragraph....
Writing FeedbackQuocVietNguyen - Jul 28, 2023 / Holt - Aug 6, 2023
|Is it important for people to have excitement and adventure in their lives?
2 - There is a problem with your discussion presentation. You are presenting an unrelated response, which will lead to an...
Writing Feedbackkarennguyen - Jul 28, 2023 / Holt - Aug 6, 2023
|Task 1: Overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007
2 - I would like to caution you against writing a 250 word task 1 essay. You cannot accomplish 250 words...
Writing FeedbackYn123 - Jul 28, 2023 / Holt - Aug 4, 2023
|More adults working and children studying from home due to cheaper technology.
2 - One of the main scoring considerations for this task is to create clear but separate discussion points for the...
Writing FeedbackKlyn - Jul 28, 2023 / Holt - Aug 4, 2023
|The increasing number of women choosing to delay pregnancy
2 - Your prompt restatement and writer's opinion paragraph will receive a failing score. You failed to accurately represent the original...
Writing Feedbackhuong1234 - Jul 27, 2023 / Holt - Aug 4, 2023
|The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Writing FeedbackNGAN NGUYEN THI - Jul 27, 2023 / Holt - Aug 4, 2023
|Horizontal city or vertical city
2 - You have written 400 words in an essay that failed to meet the discussion requirements and word maximum usage...
Writing Feedbacklqnhuroadto8IELT - Jul 27, 2023 / Holt - Aug 4, 2023
|In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns
2 - You will get a failing score for this essay based on a technicality. You misunderstood the discussion instruction. The...
Writing Feedbackchloeph - Jul 27, 2023 / Holt - Aug 4, 2023
|Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results
2 - This is your personal opinion. It should be placed in the correct section of the opening paragraph. Next...
Writing Feedbackautotelic - Jul 27, 2023 / Holt - Aug 4, 2023
|Keep doing a job are more likely to get satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs
2 - This statement removes the coherence of the sentence. It does not complete the thought process because it does...
Writing Feedbackhtuanprint - Jul 26, 2023 / Holt - Aug 4, 2023
|TASK 2: Do the positive effects outweigh the negative effects, when advertising gains popularity?
2 - The point of the essay is to prove that your opinion, the one that supports the positive point of...
Writing Feedbackbbaoxinhdep - Jul 26, 2023 / Holt - Aug 4, 2023
|The map illustrate the transformation of the ground floor of a specific building from 1958 until now
Writing Feedbacktieuthanh - Jul 26, 2023 / tieuthanh - Aug 4, 2023
|In the charts: British pupils who were able to communicate different languages than English
NEW - proportions of British students speaking foreign languages The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of British pupils who...
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|Restoration of old buildings in main cities involves enormous government expenditure
2 - Did you remember to time yourself when you wrote this task? It appears that you have used as much...
Writing FeedbackBangNguyen - Jul 26, 2023 / Holt - Aug 2, 2023
|Increasing the cost of fuels is the best way to solve the world's environmental problems
4 - It's unnecessary use of the phrase "they say" in the 2nd sentence of the 2nd paragraph and the redundancy...
Writing Feedbackvyyyy3456 - Jul 22, 2023 / Jadewestboston - Aug 1, 2023
|The chart shows the percentages of five kinds of magazines sold by a company in the UK 2001 and 2009
2 - It is not enough that you mentioned all the sections and related measurements. You also must be sure that...
Writing FeedbackDiuDiu - Jul 25, 2023 / Holt - Jul 31, 2023
|People want to get things done instantly
2 - You are thinking faster than you are explaining. While I admire your ability to write fast and give varied...
Writing Feedbackmanhne0309 - Jul 25, 2023 / Holt - Jul 31, 2023
|The maps detail the changes to the layout of a public library between 20 years ago and present day.
NEW - central library 20 years ago and today The illustrations demonstrate several prominent alternations within a central library over...
Writing Feedbackhelloooo1234 - Jul 31, 2023 / — -
|WT1: The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
2 - This is an incorrect image identifier. The presentation is not composed of diagrams. These are illustrative maps, or...
Writing Feedbackdangngoctung4 - Jul 25, 2023 / Holt - Jul 30, 2023
|Writing task 2 : learn about family history or focus on present and future generation. Discuss view
2 - You are expected to give your opinion in the first paragraph. This is a scoring requirement if you...
Writing Feedbacknoah888888 - Jul 24, 2023 / Holt - Jul 30, 2023
|WRITING TASK 1: DOWNLOADS OF SELECTED SOCIAL APPS IN 2020
2 - A task 1 essay does not allow for more than 250 words to be written for the analysis presentation....
Writing FeedbackMiyano Yark - Jul 24, 2023 / Holt - Jul 30, 2023
|Some people think that e-books are the death of paper books
3 - @ntlink You should use complex or compound sentences to create connection for the introduction, rather than simple sentences. ...
Writing Feedbackntlink - Jul 23, 2023 / tieuthanh - Jul 27, 2023
|Ielts task 1: The cyclical diagram gives information about the process of recycling plastic waste
3 - @ctam08 Instead of adding "and" at the beginning of a sentence, you should write "moreover, furthermore or additionally" to...
Writing Feedbackctam08 - Jul 24, 2023 / tieuthanh - Jul 27, 2023
|The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon.
NEW - The diagram illustrates how a salmon grows during its lifespan. Overall, it is visible that this cyclical process consists...
Writing Feedbackphungbaongoc2912 - Jul 26, 2023 / — -
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Statements about changing jobs
Writing Feedbacknhan2052006 - Jul 22, 2023 / nhan2052006 - Jul 25, 2023
|The graph shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005
3 - Make sure to upload the chart with your essay for better evaluation. Also, the 4-paragraph structure is optimal for...
Writing FeedbackThvaann - Jul 22, 2023 / dangngoctung4 - Jul 25, 2023
|In the chart inquiries which were received at a tourist office in the UK over a half-year period
Writing Feedbacklan112 - Jul 23, 2023 / lan112 - Jul 24, 2023
|Bar charts show the average size class in primary and secondary schools in 6 countries in 2006
3 - It is better to report/compare with trends (increase - decrease), especially with this kind of chart (static chart, more...
Writing Feedbackthienan1527 - Jul 18, 2023 / dangngoctung4 - Jul 24, 2023
|WRITING TASK 1, The given line chart provides data about car ownership in UK between 1975 and 2005
NEW - car ownership in the UK The given line chart provides data about car ownership in UK between 1975...
Writing Feedbackqyquanh - Jul 24, 2023 / — -
|IELTS Writing Task 1: The quantity of wheat exports from Australia, Canada and European Community
NEW - Wheat Exports The line graph compares the quantity of wheat exports from Australia, Canada and European Community between...
Writing FeedbackCapiemun - Jul 24, 2023 / — -
|The First Day of Grade Four
Writing Feedbacktuhocwriting - Jul 22, 2023 / tuhocwriting - Jul 24, 2023
|There is no need for printed book, magazines, and newspapers
3 - There is an ongoing debate about books, magazines, and newspapers While I acknowledge the convenience it offers the advantages...
Writing Feedbacktommynguyen1506 - Jul 19, 2023 / matchanh - Jul 24, 2023
|The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences, and only government action
2 - You are making an assumption in the prompt restatement that is not cited in the original presentation. As...
Writing FeedbackHazard - Jul 23, 2023 / Holt - Jul 24, 2023
|The reasons for less productivity of agricultural land and how these reasons influenced 3 continents
2 - While your presentation is quite good, you cannot write 220 words during a 20 minute task. You should aim...
Writing Feedbackdungluong - Jul 22, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|AI's possible replacement for human teachers and alternative teaching methods
2 - The establishing topic restatement in the first sentence does not represent the original thought process. This created confusion when...
Writing Feedbacknobody123456789 - Jul 22, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|Increase cost of fuel for cars ? Can we have more solutions ?
2 - Review your statement. You are contradicting yourself in the same paragraph. The writer's opinion is not clear. Which...
Writing Feedbackluanhup - Jul 22, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|It is said that the government should invest more money in the budget for train lines than highways
Writing FeedbackMinh Hieu Nguyen - Jul 22, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? Meet the employers' requirements
2 - The essay does not have a proper concluding paragraph. Rather than summarizing the discussion as was expected of the...
Writing Feedbackmihnnguyet - Jul 21, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|The diagram below shows the production of electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy
2 - Your summary is a problem. It is not changed enough. You are maintaining too much of the original...
Writing Feedbackhwnlii1986 - Jul 21, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|The chart shows the percentage of female and male who passed their driving test in one Asian country
2 - You presented the trending statement in reverse. Avoid doing that in the future. You need to make sure that...
Writing Feedbackngo kchi - Jul 21, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Should children take extra responsibilities after school?
2 - The essay lacks in public reasoning and logic. That means, you did not successfully explain the public perceptions in...
Writing Feedbacktamnguyen1111 - Jul 20, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|The pictures describe various stages of the manufacture of chocolate
2 - Two better ways to describe the image that would have gotten a better score: (1) The illustrative drawings...
Writing Feedbacktyrisepic - Jul 19, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|More and more people read e-books than paper books. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages !
2 - The major problem that the examiner will see with this essay is the word count. You wrote almost 400...
Writing Feedbackanhanhhuynh - Jul 18, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it
2 - This statement will cost you point deductions in the TA section. There is no reference to such a...
Writing Feedbackmy2002 - Jul 18, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year
2 - You should have used the singular form "region" as the word "every" indicates singular form descriptions. In terms...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1995 - Jul 17, 2023 / Holt - Jul 23, 2023
|The graphs below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam
NEW - The line graph illustrates how much profit from 3 different pizza restaurants in Vietnam during 2017 Overall, there was...
Writing Feedbackthaimanh79 - Jul 22, 2023 / — -
|WRITING IELTS TASK 1 - ATTENDANCE AT THE CINEMA
2 - In an actual test setting, you will find yourself receiving a task failing score, which will prevent you from...
Writing Feedbackanphg - Jul 17, 2023 / Holt - Jul 22, 2023
|Writing Task 2 : Topic - Arts and grants
3 - @minhnguyet231 In the 4th paragraph, you just need to write "In addition", it is unnecessary to add "to...
Writing Feedbackminhnguyet231 - Jul 17, 2023 / tieuthanh - Jul 22, 2023
|WRITING TASK 2 TOPIC: Team sports and individual sports - which is more favourable?
3 - @wurstwardchems Your thesis statement seems to be a bit short because you only mention "the first group", I...
Writing Feedbackwurstwardchems - Jul 17, 2023 / tieuthanh - Jul 22, 2023
|Writing IELTS task1: how elderly people in the United States spent their free time
4 - I suggest that the analysis is written based on the trends. You can analyze which experienced growths in one...
Writing Feedbackaye123456 - Jul 11, 2023 / danni5 - Jul 20, 2023
|The chart shows the rate of Asian women who got through their driving license test, compared to men
3 - To simplify, IELTS Writing Task 1 has three parts: Introduction, Overview, and Body paragraph(s) In introduction, the easiest...
Writing FeedbackLeduckien123 - Jul 16, 2023 / danni5 - Jul 20, 2023
|Writing task 1: The spend of parents of their children's sports and number of participation
NEW - children's sports time and disciplines The line graphs show the detail about the amount of money spent by...
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