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|Problems & Solutions of a growing gap between technical skills of younger people and those over 50
2 - Technical skills are only related to profession /work related abilities. The writers first reasoning paragraph is totally unrelated to...
Writing Feedbackbmlgoeb - Aug 4, 2021 / Holt - Aug 5, 2021
|Percentage of Internet users in three countries USA, Canada and Mexico during the period 1999-2009
Writing FeedbackAnKa1909 - Aug 3, 2021 / AnKa1909 - Aug 4, 2021
|Is it important for people to be concerned about the way they look? What are the consequences?
2 - The writer failed to identify if this is an IELTS task 2 essay or a mere writing exercise. It...
Writing FeedbackKlaracc - Aug 3, 2021 / Holt - Aug 4, 2021
|The debate about giving rewards to exceptional students or well-advanced ones
2 - The paraphrase will get a failing score for including personal opinions of the writer based on the general discussion...
Writing Feedbacklinh_nguyen90 - Aug 3, 2021 / Holt - Aug 4, 2021
|The comparison of water usage in different regions: San Diego, California, and the rest of the world
4 - is important for writer to have a well organised introduction and provide exclusive information, such as the number of...
Writing Feedbackhanaquynh - Jul 23, 2021 / Kiu1007 - Aug 4, 2021
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Line chart about senior citizens aged 65 and above in three countries
Writing Feedbackminhkhue2705 - Jul 28, 2021 / Kiu1007 - Aug 4, 2021
|IELTS TASK 1: LINE GRAPH - the number of cars registered for the first time by fuel type
Writing FeedbackKiu1007 - Aug 2, 2021 / Kiu1007 - Aug 4, 2021
|Some people spend more time reading books while others prefer to watch television.
4 - In the first paragraph, the word TV has to be plural, I think. Some verbs, like "expose" in the...
Writing FeedbackTD1 - Jul 31, 2021 / chipper269 - Aug 4, 2021
|In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss advantages and drawbacks
4 - "Therefore, they have excellent leadership and are ..." This sentence could have been better if you use relative...
Writing FeedbackEmmaNai - Jul 18, 2021 / chipper269 - Aug 4, 2021
|IELTS WRITING - TASK 2 - INVENTION OF COMPUTER
3 - @Holt thanks a lot for your invalueable instructions Can I ask u another question? how can I give feedback...
Writing FeedbackNhatminh2110 - Aug 2, 2021 / Nhatminh2110 - Aug 3, 2021
|The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffe and bananas in 1999
NEW - Topic: The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in...
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|Academic Writing Task 1: The number of people watching a television programme for sports by country
3 - You should structure you essay in a better way in order to attain enough word counts. Usually a breif...
Writing FeedbackVicz Pham - Jul 19, 2021 / Kiu1007 - Aug 3, 2021
|Task 1: the percentage of UK population following the radio and television (October-December 1992)
4 - The introduction should paraphrase the topic instead of copy it. Such as use "illustrates" "shows" "indicates" instead of demonstrates....
Writing FeedbackVanphan - Jul 26, 2021 / Kiu1007 - Aug 3, 2021
|Task2: the quality of life in the large cities is becoming worse ( cause and solve ) ?
3 - Hi @Cuongnguyen543, Your ideas are good but I think you have trouble trying to get them across. Also, your...
Writing FeedbackCuongnguyen543 - Jul 31, 2021 / lexuanhoa123 - Aug 3, 2021
|Writing IELTS TASK 2 It is believed that in a bad circumstance, the best decision is to live with it
4 - Dear @Holt and @linh_nguyen90, Thanks a lot for your useful feedback and answer. I'll keep that in my mind...
Writing Feedbacklexuanhoa123 - Aug 2, 2021 / lexuanhoa123 - Aug 3, 2021
|Adults continue to live with parents after they graduated
4 - Hi, i hope my opinion will help you ...... +spelling : error: -negativities - suggestion: nativities - Overperformed....
Writing FeedbackSunhee Nguyen - Aug 2, 2021 / Cuongnguyen543 - Aug 3, 2021
|Discovering the stories and facts connected to the house or the building in which we reside
Writing Feedbacklinh_nguyen90 - Aug 2, 2021 / linh_nguyen90 - Aug 3, 2021
|TASK 1:The charts show what Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school
Writing Feedbackllmichelle - Aug 2, 2021 / llmichelle - Aug 3, 2021
|The graph below shows the population of particular country by age group starting in 1960
2 - The task one essay should be completed within 200 words. The writer has only 20 minutes to write the...
Writing Feedbackgigi216 - Aug 2, 2021 / Holt - Aug 3, 2021
|Write sales report on top five mobile phone brands for a university lecturer
2 - The summary overview should have responded to the following qquestions to qualify as a complete quick-rundown: - What brands...
Writing Feedbackmelaniengn - Aug 2, 2021 / Holt - Aug 3, 2021
|Goverments should pay more money to improve and build effective railway system
3 - Hi @ngocbich1204, Because you wrote that building railways is more necessary than building roads in your introduction, you should...
Writing Feedbackngocbich1204 - Aug 1, 2021 / lexuanhoa123 - Aug 2, 2021
|Writing Task 1 Bar chart about 9 kinds of sports in 2002 in New Zealand
Writing Feedbacktdl - Aug 1, 2021 / tdl - Aug 2, 2021
|Many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home
2 - The writer could be considered an intermediate level English learner. The sentence presentations are mostly clear, logical, and relevant...
Writing Feedbackphgphg - Aug 1, 2021 / Holt - Aug 2, 2021
|Some people think women should play an equal role in the police and military
2 - The paraphrase cannot begin with this phrase. Since there is no previous discussion presentation, the connecting phrase does...
Writing Feedbackqaengx - Aug 1, 2021 / Holt - Aug 2, 2021
|Teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong
2 - The first paragraph incompletely presents the original discussion. There is no reference to the other opinion that teachers should...
Writing FeedbackLunar - Aug 1, 2021 / Holt - Aug 2, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2:Online shopping is increasing dramatically. How could this trend affect our...
4 - Hi @Nhattruong, I appreciate your feedback but it would be more helpful if next time, you include the reasons...
Writing Feedbacklexuanhoa123 - Jul 30, 2021 / lexuanhoa123 - Aug 2, 2021
|[IELTS task 2] Discuss both views and give opinion about spend money on improving transport
3 - Hi @nguyen3899, I think your second body paragraph lacks a clear topic sentence. A topic sentence is a sentence...
Writing Feedbacknguyen3899 - Jul 26, 2021 / lexuanhoa123 - Aug 2, 2021
|Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer
6 - Hi @nguyethoang, "The main discussion point must always remain the focus of the paragraph." means that you have to...
Writing Feedbacknguyethoang - Jul 26, 2021 / lexuanhoa123 - Aug 2, 2021
|Essay about if zoos should exist in the 21st century?
Writing FeedbackGold1610 - Jul 20, 2021 / heyima - Aug 2, 2021
|People are being encouraged to use wind energy, solar energy and other renewable energy sources
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for evaluating my essay. I have some questions, I wish you could answer...
Writing Feedbackuyennhingo0 - Jul 31, 2021 / uyennhingo0 - Aug 1, 2021
|The advantages for students and society of putting students into two streams at the age of fifteen
2 - The student put forth an excellent representation of the original presentation. The response and thesis statement is also well...
Writing FeedbackIbhus3021 - Jul 31, 2021 / Holt - Aug 1, 2021
|The international tourism has become considerably more popular than before - benefits and drawbacks
2 - The writer did not understand that the discussion is to be based on current events and facts based on...
Writing Feedbackdaladala1 - Jul 31, 2021 / Holt - Aug 1, 2021
|Nowadays, children are less reading as well as children in the past. Why is this?
2 - I will assume that the essay is for an English writing exercise since there is no prompt provided. It...
Writing FeedbackHuongmaina - Jul 31, 2021 / Holt - Aug 1, 2021
|In Internet, we dont lose contact with others, regardless of location and distance that separate us
2 - This is a one- sided opinion essay. The writeris opinion statement is singular in nature. There is no instruction...
Writing Feedbackthuhuyen2105 - Jul 31, 2021 / Holt - Aug 1, 2021
|Sponsorship in sport brings some adverse effects although it has also some positive impacts
2 - The prompt restatement is incomplete as it does not offer a glimpse into the 2 public points of view...
Writing FeedbackTa Manh Hoang - Jul 30, 2021 / Holt - Jul 31, 2021
|What are the advantages and disadvantages of advertising sports-related products by sports players?
3 - +Vocab Words in this Essay : indisputably, significant, renowned, endorsing, commentators, considerably, strategies, examine, psychological, profitability, detrimental, reducing, decades,...
Writing Feedbackjasonng92 - Jul 29, 2021 / Cuongnguyen543 - Jul 31, 2021
|The negative impacts on people' health if they do less physical activity than use electronic devices
Writing Feedbacklethuphuong - Jul 29, 2021 / Cuongnguyen543 - Jul 31, 2021
|Many historical objects lost after wars now are preserved in other countries
2 - When creating a prompt restatement, the writer must refrain from making up information due to the reinterpretation accuracy requirements....
Writing FeedbackHihimaei - Jul 29, 2021 / Holt - Jul 30, 2021
|Task 1: the table shows the percentage of main types of dwelling in three areas
2 - The number of words that ended up in this essay will need 40 minutes, rather than 20 minutes to...
Writing FeedbackCuongnguyen543 - Jul 29, 2021 / Holt - Jul 30, 2021
|IELTS Writing Task 2 about how to obtain cross-cultural understanding
Writing Feedbackamazimicha - Jul 28, 2021 / amazimicha - Jul 30, 2021
|Households with electrical appliances in one country and the length of time doing chore per week
4 - To: @lexuanhoa123 ; @Holt Omg thankyou very much. I really appreciate your words >.< it helps me a lot!...
Writing FeedbackDangtoloan - Jul 29, 2021 / Dangtoloan - Jul 30, 2021
|IELTS - it is argued that educating hometown literature is more vital than that of other nations
3 - Hi @kimlune, I think Holt is right. You should write a comparative essay when the topic instructs you to...
Writing Feedbackkimlune - Jul 29, 2021 / lexuanhoa123 - Jul 30, 2021
|Discovering isolated natural places is nothing impossible for millions of scientists and tourists
2 - The prompt restatement and opinion response is well-developed. It makes the reader believe that the will will present an...
Writing Feedbackvukhanhvan - Jul 28, 2021 / Holt - Jul 29, 2021
|Paragraph 1: The advantages and disadvantages of children using technologies for leisure
2 - The discussion topic is clearly a single opinion essay as it asks a single opinion response question: "Do you...
Writing Feedbackquann - Jul 28, 2021 / Holt - Jul 29, 2021
|IELTS 1 - Bar chart: Various subjects in university which were selected by undergraduates in 2005
Writing FeedbackBaoHanh - Jul 28, 2021 / BaoHanh - Jul 29, 2021
|Ielts task 2: Discuss both views and give your opinion about newspapers and media
Writing FeedbackVinhhppt - Jul 23, 2021 / jolie25 - Jul 29, 2021
|Discuss both views and give opinion about encouraging young people to leave home or staying atome .
Writing FeedbackBao Bao - Jul 22, 2021 / jolie25 - Jul 29, 2021
|Puting students into mixed-ability classes or sorting them based on their academic intelligence
3 - Instead of saying " i find myself completely in agreem with...", I think you should say i completely agree...
Writing Feedbackelsiee - Jul 28, 2021 / vukhanhvan - Jul 28, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2. discuss about the increasing products consumption.
3 - According to your feedback, in body 2 I should write about the other side, and my own opinion would...
Writing Feedbackjolie25 - Jul 28, 2021 / jolie25 - Jul 28, 2021
|Essay about the way media reports the lives of celebrities than others
Writing FeedbackNhat Ha - Jul 24, 2021 / Nhat Ha - Jul 28, 2021
|In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. Advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
2 - The first sentence of the prompt restatement is an unnecessary presentation. It does not relate to the original topic...
Writing Feedbackmegankinney - Jul 28, 2021 / Holt - Jul 28, 2021
|Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all young students
2 - The essay has partially good and definitely bad points. Partially Good: The writer shows a good understanding of...
Writing FeedbackHuang Mike - Jul 28, 2021 / Holt - Jul 28, 2021
|IELTS Task 1: Process- Sugar production from the sugar cane.
5 - @Vanphan Thanks for your suggestion ^^ I agree that "separating" is a proper choice for the latter one...
Writing Feedbackt3miml - Jul 26, 2021 / t3miml - Jul 28, 2021
|IELTS: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration
2 - The essay is well developed for the most part. The paragraphs connect well from the restatement + opinion, first...
Writing FeedbackHailey - Jul 27, 2021 / Holt - Jul 28, 2021
|There are some main causes, effects, and measures of the childhood obesity problem
Writing FeedbackMio_phoenix - Jul 27, 2021 / Vanphan - Jul 27, 2021
|Exploiting remote natural locations for tourism
Writing Feedbackkhanh chau - Jul 27, 2021 / hoa nguyen - Jul 27, 2021
|Large companies sponsor major sports events in order to advertise their products
2 - The writer has not responded to the essay based on prompt requirements. There is no apparent response to the...
Writing FeedbackDuonghuyen - Jul 27, 2021 / Holt - Jul 27, 2021
|Writing Task 1 - the transformation about the road which leads to the City Hospital
2 - The explanation is difficult to follow. The writer does not successfully inform the reader as to how the place...
Writing Feedbacknhilyy - Jul 27, 2021 / Holt - Jul 27, 2021
|If I could meet anyone in history, I would like to meet Steve Jobs.
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your review and your comments. They are well-noted! I will send you an...
Writing FeedbackPhong Nguyen - Jul 25, 2021 / Phong Nguyen - Jul 27, 2021
|Task 2: positives or not about computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper
2 - The provided position statement of the writer is meant for a different discussion prompt. The advantage or disadvantage format...
Writing FeedbackVanphan - Jul 26, 2021 / Holt - Jul 27, 2021
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