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Why people waste a lot of food bought from stores and restaurants and what can be done to solve this

3 - I believe the conclusion could be much stronger. Instead of talking in generalities, perhaps provide clarity. What are the...

Writing FeedbackNgTien - Nov 30, 2022 / lhyphotos - Dec 1, 2022
Essay about challenges and opportunities that my community has to face in Covid-19 pandemic

2 - The opening paragraph is confusing. If the focus of the essay is to be the community of the writer,...

Writing Feedbacklingchoo - Nov 29, 2022 / Holt - Nov 30, 2022
Received an email from club

2 - One topic per thread The email cannot be properly reviewed in its current state. When no writing instructions...

Writing Feedbackericvo1810 - Nov 29, 2022 / Holt - Nov 30, 2022
Parents are often unaware of the difficulties their children face and are unable to help them.

3 - Thank you, so my problem is using too much complex grammar and structures in this writing? Can you give...

Writing FeedbackHien My - Nov 27, 2022 / Hien My - Nov 29, 2022
What will you want to be in the future and what have you done to make your dream come true?

4 - Clearly, there are too many (...) -> There are too many things I still need to do...

Writing Feedbackphuniem1502 - Nov 25, 2022 / hopefullyUBC - Nov 29, 2022
My household chores is very boring

4 - There's a lot of repetition within the writing. I think you can definitely find a synonym for "chores" instead...

Writing FeedbackCiocasino - Nov 28, 2022 / Slyrae - Nov 28, 2022
The high population density happening in metropolitan areas. Problems and Solutions?

2 - The essay is over-written. It is not possible to write a 368 word essay within 40 minutes. Not when...

Writing FeedbackLinhkhanhho - Nov 28, 2022 / Holt - Nov 28, 2022
(Writing Task 1) The proportion of smokers in males and females

2 - There is an inconsistency in the summary overview. The image depicts the measurements in percentage form based on half...

Writing FeedbackLuana1017 - Nov 28, 2022 / Holt - Nov 28, 2022
IELTS task 1 - The proportion of the use of water in several areas of the world in three categories

6 - I think you should not use the word "below" in introduction part because when you take real ielts exem,...

Writing FeedbackYukizuna - Nov 18, 2022 / Luana1017 - Nov 28, 2022
Three unhealthy nutrients in American daily menu - the pie charts

2 - The essay falls one word short of the 150 word requirement. As such, it will receive automatic deductions for...

Writing Feedbackstudyingwithjane - Nov 27, 2022 / Holt - Nov 27, 2022
The diagrams below show the site of a school and the plan for changes to the school site.

2 - Do not focus on word usage alone. There are several instances in this presentation when the word choice is...

Writing Feedbackditmemay - Nov 27, 2022 / Holt - Nov 27, 2022
The charts give information about world forest in five different regions.

4 - There is insigficant repetition in your essay in terms of words and the first body of the passage is...

Writing Feedbacktea555 - Nov 19, 2022 / ditmemay - Nov 27, 2022
Tax private car owners to improve public transportation - ADVANTAGE AND DISADVANTAGE?

2 - The writer will do well to remember that a task 2 essay scores the accuracy of the information provided...

Writing FeedbackAngieNguyen17 - Nov 25, 2022 / Holt - Nov 26, 2022
Teaching children to manage money and their meaning in life

2 - The essay is definitely strong on the reasoning side. The writer fully explains his theory regarding teaching children about...

Writing Feedbacknobrand - Nov 24, 2022 / Holt - Nov 25, 2022
Promoting healthy lifestyle or treating diseases?

5 - While people argue that (...) This is a sentence fragment. To be grammatically correct, you must add another clause...

Writing FeedbackNamFPT - Nov 17, 2022 / Bun cha - Nov 24, 2022
Renovations in the sports centres - IELTS WRITING TEST 4 CAMBRIDGE 13

2 - ONE TASK AT A TIME. The summary overview and trending statement is not very well developed. It has...

Writing Feedbackditmemay - Nov 23, 2022 / Holt - Nov 23, 2022
The pie charts below show units of electricity production from fuel sources in Australia and France

2 - The essay is not fully analyzed, discussed, and presented in this reporting essay. The writer has not focused on...

Writing FeedbackThao4real - Nov 18, 2022 / Holt - Nov 20, 2022
The nitrogen oxide produced by 4 types of transports

2 - Never forget to analyze the timeline provided in the image. There is always a clue as to whether this...

Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Nov 19, 2022 / Holt - Nov 20, 2022
Writing 1: The bar chart shows mobile usage in a country by age group from 1998 to 2000.

3 - you forgot to add "the" before the "highest" and the "lowest". These faults of grammar will decrease your overall...

Writing Feedbackphamthao0710 - Nov 18, 2022 / DanielDang - Nov 19, 2022
Writng task 2: Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime.

2 - While the writer more than met the required word count to gain proper scoring consideration based on each scoring...

Writing Feedbackkieu mai - Nov 19, 2022 / Holt - Nov 19, 2022
The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004

3 - "while a gradual decline in oil production was seen during the period" I guess you forgot to mention about...

Writing Feedbacklavendar95 - Nov 2, 2022 / Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
IELTS 1: The increases and decreases of CO2 emissions per person in four european countries

3 - I think you should use " between....and .....". In your sentence, you use " between 1967 to 1977". In...

Writing FeedbackLuana1017 - Nov 15, 2022 / Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
The percentage of age groups in the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and predictions for 2050

4 - I think that you shouldn't use "firstly". After finishing your overall, you can write "According to the given chart",...

Writing Feedbackdat1234567 - Nov 11, 2022 / Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
The charts; the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports

4 - I don't think you should use "while " at the beginning of the sentence, and "while significantly more males...

Writing Feedbacksofia0125 - Nov 5, 2022 / Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TAX LIABILITY OF PARENTS OF CHILDREN ENROLLING IN PRIVATE SCHOOLS

2 - The opening paraphrase is missing one reference. Since there are 2 reference points in the original prompt, the interpretation...

Writing Feedbackvocongminhbuh - Nov 17, 2022 / Holt - Nov 17, 2022
Essay about hosting an international sports and how it effects a given country

2 - There is an error in the approach of the writer to the given discussion. He has decided to disregard...

Writing Feedbackdkhoa0206 - Nov 17, 2022 / Holt - Nov 17, 2022
These days, more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work.

2 - Since the term "partner" is gender neutral, and the original reference is gender specific, the writer should use a...

Writing FeedbackHai Duong Do - Nov 16, 2022 / Holt - Nov 16, 2022
Social media as the replacement for directly communication all over the world

4 - The last paragraph could use a bit more of work as it is the last one, it should impact...

Writing Feedbackngochongnhung - Oct 31, 2022 / Nanya_26 - Nov 15, 2022
People living in cities and towns in some areas

3 - I would recommend that you check your grammar. Some syntactic issues are interfering with the reading and I had...

Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Nov 15, 2022 / Nanya_26 - Nov 15, 2022
(Writing Task 1) The debris created by three companies

3 - I think the writer is lack of detailed number on the last paragraph, which could lead to a decrease...

Writing Feedbackdungqndt - Nov 15, 2022 / DanielDang - Nov 15, 2022
Culture diversity in the host country

2 - The student is merely repeating the same errors using different prompt topics. This is his 3rd essay posted here...

Writing Feedbackhnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022 / Holt - Nov 14, 2022
Children should be strictly controlled, this asserts by some parents and teachers. Others disagree.

2 - It is difficult to decide where to begin with the review of this failing score essay. Do I start...

Writing Feedbackhnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022 / Holt - Nov 14, 2022
Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence.

3 - @Holt ty very much i really appreciate that...

Writing Feedbackducanhng - Nov 12, 2022 / ducanhng - Nov 13, 2022
Information about European people visited gym

2 - A text composed of 190 words will find itself in a good position to receive positive scoring considerations based...

Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Nov 12, 2022 / Holt - Nov 13, 2022
Discuss benefits of extracurricular activities to secondary school students

2 - The student has not understood the meaning of an extra curricular activity. He has focused incorrectly on outside learning...

Writing Feedbackmai_anh_doan - Nov 12, 2022 / Holt - Nov 13, 2022
The data regarding how the rates of birth fluctuated from 1920 to 2000 in China and USA

3 - These are my comments: - The sentence "the Chinese counterpart underwent a comparatively similar pattern" should be put in...

Writing Feedbackhalinh2000 - Nov 8, 2022 / hnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022
Children & Family topic, talk about pressure on children

4 - ... are the oneones who are ... (this sentence is too complicated, i reckon you should put 2 clauses...

Writing FeedbackMaria_Ph - Nov 7, 2022 / hnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022
IELTS TASK 1: Time spent on smartphones and tablets, by category.

2 - The word "graphics" could indicate numerous image types. It is not specific enough to describe a task 1 image....

Writing Feedbackdqhuy3108 - Nov 9, 2022 / Holt - Nov 10, 2022
Are senior homes the best places for the elderly?

2 - The writer has misrepresented the original discussion topic in the prompt restatement section. Since there are actually 2 points...

Writing FeedbackHuong Pham - Nov 9, 2022 / Holt - Nov 10, 2022
The potential dangers. Do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

3 - @Hunne i would be great if you represent your ideas linked with the information about it in order to...

Writing FeedbackHunne - Nov 7, 2022 / Kjavier - Nov 7, 2022
The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart

3 - As usual, people often write their Overview in the last paragraph?...

Writing Feedbacktrang0912 - Nov 7, 2022 / Maria_Ph - Nov 7, 2022
Women are more prone to developing the autoimmune disease hypothyroidism than men are.

2 - The magic phrase in this essay title is "than men". The existence of this phrase means that the research...

Writing Feedbackdentalluisa - Nov 6, 2022 / Holt - Nov 7, 2022
[ielts writing 2] Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads.

2 - The essay could have been longer in terms of discussion explanation and better formatted in terms of presentation to...

Writing FeedbackLanternna - Nov 2, 2022 / Holt - Nov 2, 2022
How many retail stores were opened and shut down - cam 17 test 2

2 - The summary section is not complete. The summary should be composed of at least 3 sentences. It is never...

Writing Feedbacknguyentrang2809 - Oct 31, 2022 / Holt - Oct 31, 2022
IELTS TASK 2: Daily online purchases for basic necessities have proven its popularity over time

2 - The writer has not responded properly to the question. There is a single opinion that must be defended in...

Writing Feedbacktuyetmai2182004 - Oct 31, 2022 / Holt - Oct 31, 2022
[ielts task 2] Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching

2 - With only 252 words in this essay, it meets the word minimum requirement but not the full scoring considerations...

Writing FeedbackLaminate - Oct 30, 2022 / Holt - Oct 30, 2022
Writing Task 1: Police department's sources of funding and allocation of funds.

2 - The current summary overview is confusing in terms of reference. Yes, the images were properly identified. That was good....

Writing FeedbackStarShallRise - Oct 30, 2022 / Holt - Oct 30, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: the life expectancy of the modern people

2 - The writer has not taken the correct approach to this discussion. Not only does he fail to provide a...

Writing Feedbackalicexan318 - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 30, 2022
Physical activity in Australia - Writing task 1

6 - The overall section should be clearer with trends, the group with highest figure and lowest figures. You should replace...

Writing FeedbackNTDimaria - Oct 10, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 29, 2022
Children activities in Australia - IELTS Writing Task1- Bar chart

3 - In the overall sentence, please don't provide specific information (figures). Providing more about patterns in the overall section....

Writing Feedbacksegrid15 - Oct 28, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 29, 2022
The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production.

2 - The writer must be conscious of the 20 minute limitation on the completion of this essay. He cannot write...

Writing Feedbacknamk - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
Intelligence is the most important component of leadership. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - There are 2 immediate problems with the restatement and opinion paragraph. The first is the irrelevant first sentence that...

Writing Feedbackpomtal - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
FCE ESSAY"Some people say that using the internet is the best way of learning things. Do you agree?"

2 - There is a specific way of discussing an FCE essay. It has to do with specific topic considerations provided...

Writing Feedbackthatkrisss - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
Sports Betting essay, argumentative essay

2 - When referring to the Supreme Court decision in 2018, do not forget to die the case record including the...

Writing Feedbackmartinc2 - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
What are the reasons for the rise in obesity? How could it be tackle?

2 - When reading the restatement and writer's opinion, the examiner will see that the writer does not fully grasp the...

Writing FeedbackTranthitragiang - Oct 28, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
Some believe that newspapers and TV programs are pointless because it's irrelevant to people's lives

2 - The main score reduction will occur in this essay not due to the irrelevancy of the discussion because the...

Writing Feedbackimdduongg267 - Oct 28, 2022 / Holt - Oct 28, 2022
IELTS 2: Many people use written language in a less formal way and in a relaxed way than in the past

2 - There are 3 responses that need to be addressed by the first paragraph. As listed, these scoring requirements are:...

Writing Feedbackphuong132001 - Oct 27, 2022 / Holt - Oct 28, 2022
[IELTS - TASK 1] The line graph of tourists to Scotland.

6 - "the survey's years, while the figure of " "undergoing a few minor factors, it .." => no "it", use...

Writing Feedbackhoanghailhp - Oct 16, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 27, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - I need some comments about grammar. Topic is about the use of the internet

4 - "with a dramatic rise was seen in Canada" "in Mexico was consistently the lowest" "while Mexico seen saw/witnessed an.."...

Writing Feedbacklequy1209 - Oct 18, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 27, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: OLDER GENERATIONS' TRADITIONAL MORAL CODES

3 - Add a thesis statement that summarises what your essay is about and has your view on it For the...

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