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Analisys of the chart - transport used by visitors during travel in New Zealand

3 - Hi Ella, The percentage of holidaymakers using train is 20 ... Train has lower percentage than coach but higher than boat,...

Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 13, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 14, 2016
The death rate is projected to incline and reach over 0.7 percent in Scotland from 2016 to 2020

3 - Hi Ramzi, ... they experienced decline fluctuation to below less than 0.8%. I think you made a great...

Writing Feedbackramzi06 - Aug 13, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 14, 2016
The privately owned houses overtook leading position in the British housing market.

2 - Hello adip... your essay is good,.. there is a little correction from me,.. In 1985, privately owned showed the...

Writing Feedbackadip - Aug 14, 2016 / intana28 - Aug 14, 2016
Living in a small community allows to build a common bond and safe neighbourhood

4 - I am sorry to say you should under surveillance your spelling and the article after OF and please be careful with singular...

Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 13, 2016 / adip - Aug 14, 2016
Need some help in Ielts writing task 1: Essay of bar graph (about sales of digital games)

4 - Hello, Lucas... I would like to suggest you. it's better when you transform the active sentence into a passive sentence in an...

Writing Feedbacklucas xavier - Aug 14, 2016 / adip - Aug 14, 2016
A work that can give minimum salary should be obtained by people who remain jobless

2 - Hi kobayakawa07, here are some advice I would like to give you. If you have any question, feel free to ask ;)...

Writing Feedbackkobayakawa07 - Aug 13, 2016 / lucas xavier - Aug 14, 2016
International Visitors to New Zealand : Reason for visit

4 - This is the chart image of the essay. I hope you can help me to give a different way to explain that...

Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 13, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 13, 2016
In 1985, privately owned housing stood at more than a half in the total of 22 million homes in U.K.

2 - Hi, Fadhil, I have to say you have great skill in grouping the data, yet you are not qualified enough to present...

Writing Feedbackgrintdevereaux30 - Aug 13, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Aug 13, 2016
IELTS TASK 1 : Travelled Abroad, Why Travelled Abroad and Destinations Over the Same Period

2 - Hello dina, here is my comment, I hope you can avoid 'we' from writing task 1 to make your writing more...

Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016 / intana28 - Aug 13, 2016
In 2005, there were 27 million homes in United Kingdom, and most of them in private hands

2 - Hi Mahdi.. I have read your writing closely. Your creation is good, but it needs development. I hope you follow these instructions. ...

Writing Feedbackkobayakawa07 - Aug 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 13, 2016
Bulgarian education level abroad - secondary education represents the biggest number

3 - Hello Idham,... here is my comment for your ielts task 1. ... background of Bulgarian who wanted to go to...

Writing Feedbackidham23 - Aug 11, 2016 / intana28 - Aug 13, 2016
In the modern era, internet has become one of the greatest things in the world

3 - Hai Halim, you did it well! I am trying to add some feedbacks, here we go. ......., internet has become one...

Writing FeedbackHalim15 - Aug 13, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 13, 2016
Task 1 - The percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1985 and 2005

3 - Hi Mekar. I have to say that you still have a problem in making a powerful overview. Even though it is...

Writing Feedbackmolly16 - Aug 13, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Aug 13, 2016
There are three advantages and disadvantages of being person who lives in a small village.

2 - Hi dinar, you have a lot of idea in your essay. I like it very much. Here is my analysis: 3rd...

Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016 / kobayakawa07 - Aug 13, 2016
Hiring jobless people develop their living standards, give practical skills and integrate in society

2 - Hi Mekar, it is rather silly to comment your essay without seeing the question as this will lead the difficulty experienced by...

Writing Feedbackmolly16 - Aug 13, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Aug 13, 2016
Time : Rainbow cake mountains show stunning slices of colour

3 - Hello Mahdi, here are some correction from me, hope it can helps you to improve your writing skills. ... located in...

Writing Feedbackkobayakawa07 - Aug 12, 2016 / grintdevereaux30 - Aug 13, 2016
summary TED's video: advice for new grads on living a succsessful life

6 - Hi Adi, let me give you some alternative word to be used in your writing, here it is.. ... routines she...

Writing Feedbackadip - Aug 12, 2016 / grintdevereaux30 - Aug 13, 2016
People can strive some efforts to maintain their health, by changing their routines. IELTS 2

4 - I suggest you not to use the typical opening as "in modern era". the opening is too typical and will not help...

Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 12, 2016 / yon959 - Aug 13, 2016
The magic ingredient that brings Pixar movies to life

3 - the most influencer => superlative : the most influencive using simple past there are many part that you should use simple...

Writing Feedbackgrintdevereaux30 - Aug 12, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016
Longer life spans. Cutting edge of technology has driven advanced facilities in health sector.

2 - People' life tends to be longer than even before and it argued that -> compound sentence people's life tends to be...

Writing FeedbackRisty01 - Aug 13, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016
Most visitors who go to New Zealand like to use car as transportation, at more than sixty percent.

2 - Hi Atikah.. I cannot help you to give the suggestion as you have not attached the picture. I hope you include that...

Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 13, 2016
Demographic trend in Scotland measured in proportion of birth rate, population growth and death rate

2 - A change of Demographic trendS in Scotland is illustrated in the line graph in aN 8-decade period from 1940 to 2020 by...

Writing Feedbackgrintdevereaux30 - Aug 12, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 13, 2016
Gradual decrease between the birth rate and the population growth in Scotland

2 - Hei there..., you have shown us a good report writing, but some improvement are needed in order to pass your test with...

Writing FeedbackRisty01 - Aug 12, 2016 / eddies - Aug 13, 2016
Harry Potter and the Cursed Child Has Already Sold 4 Million Copies

2 - Hi Muhammad.. I am delighted to read your writing. However, I will give you a few suggestions to enhance your writing. I...

Writing Feedbackgrintdevereaux30 - Aug 12, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 13, 2016
Wired Summary: Think Explosions Are the Only Way to Form Calderas? Think Again

2 - Here my suggestions: - Recent study pointing that there are. A recent study found that ,,, The two most recent examples of...

Writing Feedbackjomul01 - Aug 12, 2016 / Risty01 - Aug 13, 2016
The statistic characterizing of human population trends in Scotland from 1940 to 2020

2 - Well done. You have successfully written your report essay, but some changes in particular Vocabulary need more improvement in order to pass...

Writing Feedbackmolly16 - Aug 12, 2016 / eddies - Aug 13, 2016
The line figure presents three kinds of demographic trends in Scotland from 1940 onwards

2 - Adi, here are some additional insights for your analysis :) A breakdown of three demographic trends proportion in Scotland from 1940...

Writing Feedbackadip - Aug 12, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 13, 2016
Polio back in Nigeria two years after being wiped out in Africa

4 - Hi, Eka. I have a few comments of your summary. Nigeria has faced polio (spelling, polio is uncountable noun, without...

Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 12, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 13, 2016
The best kindergarten by Takaharu tekuza, ted talks

2 - Takaharu Tezuka is one of the architects who design this A kindergarten in Tokyo, in 2007. That is a cylcle ...

Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 12, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 13, 2016
SUMMARY ARTICLE : POKEMON GO! AN AUGMENTED REALITY NEED A CODE OF ETHICS NOW!

2 - Pokemon Go is like a bomb. It spreads easily arround [spelling]the world, not only children but [not only+but also] older people enjoy...

Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 12, 2016 / RAY93 - Aug 13, 2016
People prefer to live in urban places - where inhabitants recognize only a few people in their area

2 - A few years ago, people were very keen on to Recently, however, people have tendency to live in Urban ...

Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 12, 2016 / adepani3112 - Aug 12, 2016
Free Things to Do in Rio (Explore Brazil's bustling city on a budget)

4 - Hello :) This museum have has unique design shaped a UFO. Don't do not miss Lapa, the ground zero for ......

Writing Feedbackeris28 - Aug 12, 2016 / Halim15 - Aug 12, 2016
"What will future jobs look like? by Andrew McAfee, TED"

2 - Hi Risty :) If want to talk about TED videos, you can see that there is a speaker who speaks to...

Writing FeedbackRisty01 - Aug 12, 2016 / Halim15 - Aug 12, 2016
TED : Global Prioraties bigger than climate change

3 - Hello Sofi, glad to read your writing. So now, let me give you some feedback :) The presented video lectureding by...

Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 12, 2016 / grintdevereaux30 - Aug 12, 2016
Summary from an article in new scientist : How to Watch the Great Perseid Meteor

3 - Hi farida! would you mind if I give feed back to you? here it is: ... see the meteors because they...

Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 12, 2016 / kobayakawa07 - Aug 12, 2016
Summary article: Anxiety on China

4 - Hi Adipran!! glad to see you here! let me make some feedback for you, here it is: Initially, China has the...

Writing Feedbackadip - Aug 10, 2016 / grintdevereaux30 - Aug 12, 2016
HOW I TEACH KIDS TO LOVE SCIENCE

5 - Hi Eka, let me give you some feedback, hope this can help you to improve your english writing skill :) #correct me...

Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 11, 2016 / grintdevereaux30 - Aug 12, 2016
South Sudan Works to Rebuild Higher Education

4 - Hi Amm! South Sudan isvery poor from the area of half a million square meters it only has fifty kilometers good...

Writing Feedbackamm_16 - Aug 12, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 12, 2016
Summery article of "Superfood doesn't mean anything, so let's stop using it"

6 - Hello Hikuma! I'll try to give you some corrections. Here we go! People, nowadays Nowadays, people are easily to believe in...

Writing Feedbackhikuma21 - Aug 11, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 12, 2016
Just a few hours' exercise a week makes your heart grow bigger

4 - dear Eka, it's so nice of you to gave me a feedback in my previous post. i have read your summary, and...

Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 11, 2016 / riaerizal11 - Aug 12, 2016
Summary out of an article: Student catches eye of Ripley's Believe It or Not!

2 - Hello Stunna! May I give you some advice? The masterpieces of her can be change her masterpiece and this...

Writing FeedbackbornStunna15 - Aug 12, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 12, 2016
Summary TED talks : The Reporting System That Sexual Assault Survivors Want

2 - Hai Farida! I enjoyed your summary! May I give you some advice? One in of 5 women and one in of...

Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 12, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 12, 2016
TED summary : The Female Body - Perfect by Leeann Schudel

2 - Hi Mekar. I think your writing is not bad. I have only found a few minor errors. You only pay attention to...

Writing Feedbackmolly16 - Aug 12, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 12, 2016
The things that has affected me the most were how my mom helped me overcome difficulties.

4 - Hi Chenqui, - My mom is the most influential people person in my life. ... how my mom...

Writing FeedbackChenqui - Aug 10, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 12, 2016
When people live in a small area, they know each other well. Threre's no chance for that in big city

2 - Hi Farida. I like the way you explain the benefits. Here is my analysis. 1st paragraph. A few years ago, many...

Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 12, 2016 / kobayakawa07 - Aug 12, 2016
The Perseid Meteor Shower Will Really Outdo Itself Tonight

3 - Here my suggestions: - In several times in a century, - historical records - For those who interested to do stargazing....

Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Aug 12, 2016 / Risty01 - Aug 12, 2016
The percentage of transportation access by people who come to New Zealand

2 - hai fadil its first time for me to examine several essay i hope it can be helpfull for you ...

Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 12, 2016 / Riandi31 - Aug 12, 2016
Few years ago, many inhabitants lived in big community in the small area. But now it's different.

2 - But now, the citizen living in the large ... it is better when we avoid using but in the first sentence....

Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 12, 2016 / Iforsa - Aug 12, 2016
Beware, We Will Run Out of Water if We Don't Do These Things!

5 - Hola Kendal, I love the article that u choose. I found it very interesting topic since I'm keen on go green army....

Writing Feedbackriaerizal11 - Aug 11, 2016 / eris28 - Aug 12, 2016
Excerpt Meaning from I Have a Dream Speech

3 - Thank you sir !...

Writing Feedbackamm_16 - Aug 12, 2016 / amm_16 - Aug 12, 2016
How Being a Middle Child Affects Your Finances

4 - Aloha Permata92, I would like to share my suggestion on your essay 1st paragraph Did you know that there is...

Writing FeedbackPermata92 - Aug 12, 2016 / bung ilham - Aug 12, 2016
Summary, National Geographic This Chart Shows How U.S. Carbon Emissions Are Rising-Again

5 - Hi, Halim. I found that coherence is the most problem in your essay. Thus, sometimes it is hard to follow. Here...

Writing FeedbackHalim15 - Aug 12, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 12, 2016
Summary an article : Parents Giving Unproven IQ-Boosting Drugs to Kids with Down's

5 - Hi, Fadhila. Iam about to give you some of my thought on your writing the researcher founded (Found itself already in...

Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 12, 2016 / bornStunna15 - Aug 12, 2016
Want to Lose Weight? Try Counting Calories

2 - Hi Sestria.. I am delighted to read your writing. However, I think you need improving. I hope you can follow my instruction...

Writing Feedbackbbcheesecake14 - Aug 12, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 12, 2016
Summary Article : Our Future School, The Green School

3 - Halo Ms. Dina, it is great to see your second article on EF and also it was an interesting summarize. However, i...

Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 11, 2016 / mem77 - Aug 12, 2016
A Social Network Aims to Speed Up Progress in Science

3 - Hi there! just some simple corrections would not hurt, yeah? :D here: ... experiment about scientific network to related to...

Writing Feedbackbbcheesecake14 - Aug 12, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Aug 12, 2016
Short introduction and conclusion of Level of education of Bulgarians planning to leave Bulgaria

3 - Hiii ziad,., welcome to essay forum, hopefully it can help you to improve your writing skill. Here some advice...

Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 11, 2016 / hasbi - Aug 12, 2016
summary TED's video: 6 talks that are music to my ears

6 - Hi adip, I already read your summary. In my opinion you might find some incorect of subject-verb agreement. I've given some corrections....

Writing Feedbackadip - Aug 11, 2016 / hikuma21 - Aug 12, 2016
Two version of the "background, identity, interest, or talent" essay

4 - Hi Adepani :) The owner of the farm also didn't did not provide a bed.. Every morning my great-grandfather woke...

Writing Feedbackadepani3112 - Aug 12, 2016 / Halim15 - Aug 12, 2016
Some people argue that teaching students to behave well and to assess right and wrong is important.

4 - hallo... these are my corrections for your essay: ... students reaches their dream in the future ambitions Based on this...

Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Aug 10, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 12, 2016

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