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|Why people waste a lot of food bought from stores and restaurants and what can be done to solve this
3 - I believe the conclusion could be much stronger. Instead of talking in generalities, perhaps provide clarity. What are the...
Writing FeedbackNgTien - Nov 30, 2022 / lhyphotos - Dec 1, 2022
|Essay about challenges and opportunities that my community has to face in Covid-19 pandemic
2 - The opening paragraph is confusing. If the focus of the essay is to be the community of the writer,...
Writing Feedbacklingchoo - Nov 29, 2022 / Holt - Nov 30, 2022
|Received an email from club
2 - One topic per thread The email cannot be properly reviewed in its current state. When no writing instructions...
Writing Feedbackericvo1810 - Nov 29, 2022 / Holt - Nov 30, 2022
|Parents are often unaware of the difficulties their children face and are unable to help them.
3 - Thank you, so my problem is using too much complex grammar and structures in this writing? Can you give...
Writing FeedbackHien My - Nov 27, 2022 / Hien My - Nov 29, 2022
|What will you want to be in the future and what have you done to make your dream come true?
Writing Feedbackphuniem1502 - Nov 25, 2022 / hopefullyUBC - Nov 29, 2022
|My household chores is very boring
4 - There's a lot of repetition within the writing. I think you can definitely find a synonym for "chores" instead...
Writing FeedbackCiocasino - Nov 28, 2022 / Slyrae - Nov 28, 2022
|The high population density happening in metropolitan areas. Problems and Solutions?
2 - The essay is over-written. It is not possible to write a 368 word essay within 40 minutes. Not when...
Writing FeedbackLinhkhanhho - Nov 28, 2022 / Holt - Nov 28, 2022
|(Writing Task 1) The proportion of smokers in males and females
2 - There is an inconsistency in the summary overview. The image depicts the measurements in percentage form based on half...
Writing FeedbackLuana1017 - Nov 28, 2022 / Holt - Nov 28, 2022
|IELTS task 1 - The proportion of the use of water in several areas of the world in three categories
6 - I think you should not use the word "below" in introduction part because when you take real ielts exem,...
Writing FeedbackYukizuna - Nov 18, 2022 / Luana1017 - Nov 28, 2022
|Three unhealthy nutrients in American daily menu - the pie charts
2 - The essay falls one word short of the 150 word requirement. As such, it will receive automatic deductions for...
Writing Feedbackstudyingwithjane - Nov 27, 2022 / Holt - Nov 27, 2022
|The diagrams below show the site of a school and the plan for changes to the school site.
2 - Do not focus on word usage alone. There are several instances in this presentation when the word choice is...
Writing Feedbackditmemay - Nov 27, 2022 / Holt - Nov 27, 2022
|The charts give information about world forest in five different regions.
4 - There is insigficant repetition in your essay in terms of words and the first body of the passage is...
Writing Feedbacktea555 - Nov 19, 2022 / ditmemay - Nov 27, 2022
|Tax private car owners to improve public transportation - ADVANTAGE AND DISADVANTAGE?
2 - The writer will do well to remember that a task 2 essay scores the accuracy of the information provided...
Writing FeedbackAngieNguyen17 - Nov 25, 2022 / Holt - Nov 26, 2022
|Teaching children to manage money and their meaning in life
2 - The essay is definitely strong on the reasoning side. The writer fully explains his theory regarding teaching children about...
Writing Feedbacknobrand - Nov 24, 2022 / Holt - Nov 25, 2022
|Promoting healthy lifestyle or treating diseases?
5 - While people argue that (...) This is a sentence fragment. To be grammatically correct, you must add another clause...
Writing FeedbackNamFPT - Nov 17, 2022 / Bun cha - Nov 24, 2022
|Renovations in the sports centres - IELTS WRITING TEST 4 CAMBRIDGE 13
2 - ONE TASK AT A TIME. The summary overview and trending statement is not very well developed. It has...
Writing Feedbackditmemay - Nov 23, 2022 / Holt - Nov 23, 2022
|The pie charts below show units of electricity production from fuel sources in Australia and France
2 - The essay is not fully analyzed, discussed, and presented in this reporting essay. The writer has not focused on...
Writing FeedbackThao4real - Nov 18, 2022 / Holt - Nov 20, 2022
|The nitrogen oxide produced by 4 types of transports
2 - Never forget to analyze the timeline provided in the image. There is always a clue as to whether this...
Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Nov 19, 2022 / Holt - Nov 20, 2022
|Writing 1: The bar chart shows mobile usage in a country by age group from 1998 to 2000.
3 - you forgot to add "the" before the "highest" and the "lowest". These faults of grammar will decrease your overall...
Writing Feedbackphamthao0710 - Nov 18, 2022 / DanielDang - Nov 19, 2022
|Writng task 2: Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime.
2 - While the writer more than met the required word count to gain proper scoring consideration based on each scoring...
Writing Feedbackkieu mai - Nov 19, 2022 / Holt - Nov 19, 2022
|The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004
3 - "while a gradual decline in oil production was seen during the period" I guess you forgot to mention about...
Writing Feedbacklavendar95 - Nov 2, 2022 / Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
|IELTS 1: The increases and decreases of CO2 emissions per person in four european countries
3 - I think you should use " between....and .....". In your sentence, you use " between 1967 to 1977". In...
Writing FeedbackLuana1017 - Nov 15, 2022 / Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
|The percentage of age groups in the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and predictions for 2050
4 - I think that you shouldn't use "firstly". After finishing your overall, you can write "According to the given chart",...
Writing Feedbackdat1234567 - Nov 11, 2022 / Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
|The charts; the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports
4 - I don't think you should use "while " at the beginning of the sentence, and "while significantly more males...
Writing Feedbacksofia0125 - Nov 5, 2022 / Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TAX LIABILITY OF PARENTS OF CHILDREN ENROLLING IN PRIVATE SCHOOLS
2 - The opening paraphrase is missing one reference. Since there are 2 reference points in the original prompt, the interpretation...
Writing Feedbackvocongminhbuh - Nov 17, 2022 / Holt - Nov 17, 2022
|Essay about hosting an international sports and how it effects a given country
2 - There is an error in the approach of the writer to the given discussion. He has decided to disregard...
Writing Feedbackdkhoa0206 - Nov 17, 2022 / Holt - Nov 17, 2022
|These days, more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work.
2 - Since the term "partner" is gender neutral, and the original reference is gender specific, the writer should use a...
Writing FeedbackHai Duong Do - Nov 16, 2022 / Holt - Nov 16, 2022
|Social media as the replacement for directly communication all over the world
Writing Feedbackngochongnhung - Oct 31, 2022 / Nanya_26 - Nov 15, 2022
|People living in cities and towns in some areas
3 - I would recommend that you check your grammar. Some syntactic issues are interfering with the reading and I had...
Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Nov 15, 2022 / Nanya_26 - Nov 15, 2022
|(Writing Task 1) The debris created by three companies
3 - I think the writer is lack of detailed number on the last paragraph, which could lead to a decrease...
Writing Feedbackdungqndt - Nov 15, 2022 / DanielDang - Nov 15, 2022
|Culture diversity in the host country
2 - The student is merely repeating the same errors using different prompt topics. This is his 3rd essay posted here...
Writing Feedbackhnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022 / Holt - Nov 14, 2022
|Children should be strictly controlled, this asserts by some parents and teachers. Others disagree.
2 - It is difficult to decide where to begin with the review of this failing score essay. Do I start...
Writing Feedbackhnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022 / Holt - Nov 14, 2022
|Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence.
Writing Feedbackducanhng - Nov 12, 2022 / ducanhng - Nov 13, 2022
|Information about European people visited gym
2 - A text composed of 190 words will find itself in a good position to receive positive scoring considerations based...
Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Nov 12, 2022 / Holt - Nov 13, 2022
|Discuss benefits of extracurricular activities to secondary school students
2 - The student has not understood the meaning of an extra curricular activity. He has focused incorrectly on outside learning...
Writing Feedbackmai_anh_doan - Nov 12, 2022 / Holt - Nov 13, 2022
|The data regarding how the rates of birth fluctuated from 1920 to 2000 in China and USA
3 - These are my comments: - The sentence "the Chinese counterpart underwent a comparatively similar pattern" should be put in...
Writing Feedbackhalinh2000 - Nov 8, 2022 / hnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022
|Children & Family topic, talk about pressure on children
4 - ... are the oneones who are ... (this sentence is too complicated, i reckon you should put 2 clauses...
Writing FeedbackMaria_Ph - Nov 7, 2022 / hnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022
|IELTS TASK 1: Time spent on smartphones and tablets, by category.
2 - The word "graphics" could indicate numerous image types. It is not specific enough to describe a task 1 image....
Writing Feedbackdqhuy3108 - Nov 9, 2022 / Holt - Nov 10, 2022
|Are senior homes the best places for the elderly?
2 - The writer has misrepresented the original discussion topic in the prompt restatement section. Since there are actually 2 points...
Writing FeedbackHuong Pham - Nov 9, 2022 / Holt - Nov 10, 2022
|The potential dangers. Do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?
3 - @Hunne i would be great if you represent your ideas linked with the information about it in order to...
Writing FeedbackHunne - Nov 7, 2022 / Kjavier - Nov 7, 2022
|The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart
Writing Feedbacktrang0912 - Nov 7, 2022 / Maria_Ph - Nov 7, 2022
|Women are more prone to developing the autoimmune disease hypothyroidism than men are.
2 - The magic phrase in this essay title is "than men". The existence of this phrase means that the research...
Writing Feedbackdentalluisa - Nov 6, 2022 / Holt - Nov 7, 2022
|[ielts writing 2] Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads.
2 - The essay could have been longer in terms of discussion explanation and better formatted in terms of presentation to...
Writing FeedbackLanternna - Nov 2, 2022 / Holt - Nov 2, 2022
|How many retail stores were opened and shut down - cam 17 test 2
2 - The summary section is not complete. The summary should be composed of at least 3 sentences. It is never...
Writing Feedbacknguyentrang2809 - Oct 31, 2022 / Holt - Oct 31, 2022
|IELTS TASK 2: Daily online purchases for basic necessities have proven its popularity over time
2 - The writer has not responded properly to the question. There is a single opinion that must be defended in...
Writing Feedbacktuyetmai2182004 - Oct 31, 2022 / Holt - Oct 31, 2022
|[ielts task 2] Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching
2 - With only 252 words in this essay, it meets the word minimum requirement but not the full scoring considerations...
Writing FeedbackLaminate - Oct 30, 2022 / Holt - Oct 30, 2022
|Writing Task 1: Police department's sources of funding and allocation of funds.
2 - The current summary overview is confusing in terms of reference. Yes, the images were properly identified. That was good....
Writing FeedbackStarShallRise - Oct 30, 2022 / Holt - Oct 30, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: the life expectancy of the modern people
2 - The writer has not taken the correct approach to this discussion. Not only does he fail to provide a...
Writing Feedbackalicexan318 - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 30, 2022
|Physical activity in Australia - Writing task 1
6 - The overall section should be clearer with trends, the group with highest figure and lowest figures. You should replace...
Writing FeedbackNTDimaria - Oct 10, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 29, 2022
|Children activities in Australia - IELTS Writing Task1- Bar chart
3 - In the overall sentence, please don't provide specific information (figures). Providing more about patterns in the overall section....
Writing Feedbacksegrid15 - Oct 28, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 29, 2022
|The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production.
2 - The writer must be conscious of the 20 minute limitation on the completion of this essay. He cannot write...
Writing Feedbacknamk - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|Intelligence is the most important component of leadership. Do you agree or disagree?
2 - There are 2 immediate problems with the restatement and opinion paragraph. The first is the irrelevant first sentence that...
Writing Feedbackpomtal - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|FCE ESSAY"Some people say that using the internet is the best way of learning things. Do you agree?"
2 - There is a specific way of discussing an FCE essay. It has to do with specific topic considerations provided...
Writing Feedbackthatkrisss - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|Sports Betting essay, argumentative essay
2 - When referring to the Supreme Court decision in 2018, do not forget to die the case record including the...
Writing Feedbackmartinc2 - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|What are the reasons for the rise in obesity? How could it be tackle?
2 - When reading the restatement and writer's opinion, the examiner will see that the writer does not fully grasp the...
Writing FeedbackTranthitragiang - Oct 28, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|Some believe that newspapers and TV programs are pointless because it's irrelevant to people's lives
2 - The main score reduction will occur in this essay not due to the irrelevancy of the discussion because the...
Writing Feedbackimdduongg267 - Oct 28, 2022 / Holt - Oct 28, 2022
|IELTS 2: Many people use written language in a less formal way and in a relaxed way than in the past
2 - There are 3 responses that need to be addressed by the first paragraph. As listed, these scoring requirements are:...
Writing Feedbackphuong132001 - Oct 27, 2022 / Holt - Oct 28, 2022
|[IELTS - TASK 1] The line graph of tourists to Scotland.
6 - "the survey's years, while the figure of " "undergoing a few minor factors, it .." => no "it", use...
Writing Feedbackhoanghailhp - Oct 16, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 27, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - I need some comments about grammar. Topic is about the use of the internet
4 - "with a dramatic rise was seen in Canada" "in Mexico was consistently the lowest" "while Mexico seen saw/witnessed an.."...
Writing Feedbacklequy1209 - Oct 18, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 27, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: OLDER GENERATIONS' TRADITIONAL MORAL CODES
3 - Add a thesis statement that summarises what your essay is about and has your view on it For the...
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