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|IELTS Task 2: Women and Men Commonly Having Different Strengths and Weakness
3 - Dini, let's start with the grammatical problems in your essay. You have made a grammatical error regarding word usage...
Writing Feedbackdinimaulana - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|People activities in sea as well as on land lead to the damaging environment; Ielts 2
2 - Agro, you definitely have a problem when it comes to sentence structure, grammar, and vocabulary. However, these weaknesses do...
Writing FeedbackAgro Wisudawan - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|Many people are treating pets as their own family member.
Writing Feedbackvipentul - Jan 1, 2019 / cutiewen - Jan 4, 2019
|Human activities and industrial waste become the main reasons regarding extinctions of animal life
3 - Herdi, contrary to the advice given to you above, it is not possible to write 500 words during this...
Writing Feedbackherdiladchi - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|Essay on Construction Regulation in Cities
2 - Pham, be consistent in your presentation. When you count out the reasons for a discussion such as your reference...
Writing Feedbackphamleminh - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: every funds for education are needed - also those in the form of tax
2 - This is a good essay and well-organized one. You deliverd your message clearly and with good range of vocabulary....
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Jan 1, 2019 / StevenSameh1512 - Jan 2, 2019
|In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
4 - Hi, your understanding about the topic is good, however, the way you organize the ideas is your main problem....
Writing Feedbackthaonghiem - Dec 29, 2018 / vietduccan - Jan 1, 2019
|IETLS TASK 2 - Houses should follow style of the old houses in the area?
3 - Hi, let's talk about the good things of your essay first. The vocabulary range you used in your essay...
Writing Feedbackkenmoony - Jan 1, 2019 / vietduccan - Jan 1, 2019
|Percentage of monthly household income spent on various items [IELTS -Pie chart 186words]
2 - This is well-designed essay. You illustrated the holistic information in the graph. I noticed such one grammer mistake which...
Writing Feedbacknchi0987 - Jan 1, 2019 / StevenSameh1512 - Jan 1, 2019
|Working from home and studying at home are on trend. Do you think it is a positive development ?
Writing Feedbacktopswijaya - Dec 29, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 31, 2018
|Should governments set a limitation on dangerous sports or not?
3 - the modern society opinions toward about take part in to get an injury extreme sports game extremely high...
Writing FeedbackLizLee - Dec 30, 2018 / thiancut - Dec 30, 2018
|The figure of travelling abroad by Japanese tourists and how many of them are coming to Australia
3 - The summary overview of your presentation should be at least 3 lines since there are several information points that...
Writing Feedbackonkileung1124 - Dec 28, 2018 / Holt - Dec 29, 2018
|Budget allocation for children's sports and the number of children playing sports
2 - You need to consider using the appropriate transition words at the start of each paragraph. Phrases like "moving to...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Dec 28, 2018 / Alao0702 - Dec 28, 2018
|Some people claim that financing the costs of health care and education should be government's duty
3 - @vietduccan - give public a great chance to enjoy give the public access to better health care services ...
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Dec 28, 2018 / MichelleA - Dec 28, 2018
|IELTS task 1: Describe the trend of three diffrent type of domestic access to modern technology
Writing Feedbacknxuanloc - Dec 24, 2018 / nxuanloc - Dec 28, 2018
|[Task 1] The following tables show the average age of students at a college.
Writing FeedbackSherk - Dec 27, 2018 / Sherk - Dec 28, 2018
|TOEFL - task 2 writing - the independent one - foreign language.
4 - This is not IELTS task. This is TOEFL, which has different writing rubrics. I appreciate your response, but can...
Writing FeedbackStevenSameh1512 - Dec 27, 2018 / StevenSameh1512 - Dec 28, 2018
|FINANCIAL AID VS PRACTICAL AID AND SERVICE
3 - Thank you for your advice. I will avoid using long and complex sentences and pay attention to the conclusion...
Writing FeedbackLizLee - Dec 28, 2018 / LizLee - Dec 28, 2018
|PROTECTION WILDLIFE POPULATION - What can we do to help?
4 - Thanks for your simple paraphrase, it helps a lot because I got stuck when trying to connect the question...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Dec 27, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Dec 28, 2018
|GLOBAL HYBRID VEHICLE SALES during 4 years (from 2006 until 2009)
Writing FeedbackLily Potter - Dec 27, 2018 / Lily Potter - Dec 28, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - Nowadays people concentrated on their job decide to delay owning a child
3 - The problem related to word count has already mentioned above so I won't discuss further. There are other problems...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 19, 2018 / vietduccan - Dec 28, 2018
|Vehicle-free days in an urban center : do the advantages outweigh disadvantages? - IELTS task 2
4 - Hi. Your essay is well-written with clear reasons and sentences. As the Contributor said, I want to emphasize for...
Writing Feedbackdhuyen135 - Dec 24, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 27, 2018
|Asking citizens to do military service or some social work - is it a good idea? Essay for Toefl exam
3 - Sara, this essay will automatically receive a failing score due to its inability to respond to the prompt requirements....
Writing Feedbacksou1978 - Dec 26, 2018 / Holt - Dec 27, 2018
|Keep healthy by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than a healthy lifestyle
NEW - to be fit or to have health issues? These days, too many people maintain their health by relying...
Writing FeedbackLily Potter - Dec 26, 2018 / — -
|TOPIC: what can be done to encourage young people to become responsible members of society
2 - Chin, for starters, it would be best if you learn how to paraphrase the original prompt rather than simply...
Writing FeedbackChu - Dec 24, 2018 / Holt - Dec 26, 2018
|Should gay marriage be allowed? The controversial topic.
2 - Your arguments are well supported and answer the question clearly. I would just make a couple edits. 1....
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Dec 24, 2018 / Junghakkyo - Dec 26, 2018
|Dangerous sports. People are free to select which activities make them feel happy.
2 - Overall the essay concept is good, but I believe that you should try to find synonyms to some of...
Writing Feedbackjenn2001 - Dec 24, 2018 / Leihn - Dec 25, 2018
|It is becoming increasingly popular among students to have a year off between finishing school
2 - Hi. Your essay is quite good in term of lexical resources and reasons provided. However, you were over discussing...
Writing FeedbackGingerlove - Dec 24, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 25, 2018
|IELTS Writting _ Task 1_ The bricks manufacturing process in the construction sector.
2 - As I can't see the flow chart, I can revise your grammer. ......dug from these ground will be....... The...
Writing Feedbackxichvan - Dec 24, 2018 / StevenSameh1512 - Dec 24, 2018
|Admission essay. The topic is - You have 650 words. Take a risk.
3 - Andrey, when the essay prompt asked you to take a risk, what the instruction meant was for you to...
Writing FeedbackLeihn - Dec 23, 2018 / Holt - Dec 24, 2018
|Computers will replace teachers in the future?
3 - ..., particularly in education. ... the opinion that one day teachers will be obsolete in the classroom computer will...
Writing Feedbackthuduong19 - Dec 21, 2018 / topswijaya - Dec 24, 2018
|Distance-learning progammes cannot bring the same benefits of attending college or university. True?
4 - It woul be better to replace "My view is that self-study ..." with "l totally (or somewhat) agree with...
Writing FeedbackKiritokun - Dec 20, 2018 / topswijaya - Dec 24, 2018
|Some prefer online courses to study and they think it is better. Others prefer classroom education.
3 - Dewa, your essay could use stronger adjectives in its presentation. Rather than using the term "strong arguments", try to...
Writing Feedbacktopswijaya - Dec 22, 2018 / Holt - Dec 23, 2018
|In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under pressure to work hard.
7 - @HanNguyen5010 the question is from 150 to 200 words ths so much @Alicelanphuong ohhh...ths so much ^^...
Writing Feedbacktrantuandiem - Dec 17, 2018 / trantuandiem - Dec 22, 2018
|The quantity of requests received by the Tourist Information Office in an urban area
2 - Linh, for starters, you should not use an apostrophe after the S in "customers'". Use the term "customer's" to...
Writing Feedbacklinhhlinhh - Dec 21, 2018 / Holt - Dec 22, 2018
|Underground Station passenger numbers in London! The line graph.
3 - KD, you have shown a very good understanding of the chart. However, your presentation is not always at its...
Writing FeedbackKDHo - Dec 21, 2018 / Holt - Dec 22, 2018
|The range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich and poor. Is it true?
4 - In most instances, that could be done. However, since you changed the prompt discussion requirements, your essay cannot be...
Writing FeedbackJusRandom - Dec 20, 2018 / Holt - Dec 22, 2018
|In graph the tendency of three categories of fast food consumed (hamburger, fish & chips and pizza)
2 - I feel like your essay is a little scattered, because you keep jumping from one unit to the other,...
Writing FeedbackCrystal Pham - Dec 20, 2018 / ch15hann - Dec 21, 2018
|Essay: Parents often give children everything they ask for and do what they like. Is it good or not?
3 - Tran, your opening paraphrase was almost completely correct. You did well by paraphrasing the topic for discussion. You also...
Writing Feedbackthinhtri - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 21, 2018
|The world has become more advanced than in the past. The family structure and capacity has altered.
3 - Annantha, you have a noun phrase problem in this essay. The term "negative changes" should have been written as...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 21, 2018
|Should pictures replace words on TV news and in newspapers?
3 - Han, your opening paragraph is very confusing to read. You have to remember that there is a difference between...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 20, 2018
|The authority is expected to allocate more budget to railroads instead of motorways
Writing Feedbackyuu483 - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 20, 2018
|Parents have a responsibility to both care for and prepare their children as they approach adulthood
Writing FeedbackTHI - Dec 19, 2018 / THI - Dec 20, 2018
|Sharing freely information without caring the importance or value of it
3 - Alicia, you once again misunderstood the prompt discussion instructions. This is a 5 paragraph discussion essay that highlights 2...
Writing FeedbackAlicelanphuong - Dec 18, 2018 / Holt - Dec 19, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - Today, humans who are staying in big towns must be confronted with lots of challenge.
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 17, 2018 / annanthaayu - Dec 19, 2018
|Different standpoints regarding business size that provide utmost benefits to its employee; TOEFL
2 - Working for a huge firm companies typically are capable I would say "one thing that need to be taken...
Writing Feedbacku5410154 - Dec 18, 2018 / leothewriter - Dec 18, 2018
|[IELTS Task 2] The animals are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea.
Writing FeedbackD12345 - Nov 12, 2018 / Holt - Dec 18, 2018
|IELTS Task2: Social media and sharing personal information on different websites does have risks
2 - Mohammed, please read up on the use of subject sentences in Task 2 presentations. Try to avoid using memorized...
Writing Feedbackbasheertoad9 - Dec 17, 2018 / Holt - Dec 18, 2018
|As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and TV, people do less physical activity
2 - This is a measurement based opinion essay. As such, the prompt clearly requires you to use only one point...
Writing Feedbackchautua - Dec 17, 2018 / Holt - Dec 18, 2018
|Asking for a letter of reference to apply for a job
3 - Swetha, when writing to your teacher, you must remember to show respect for the position of the educator at...
Writing FeedbackSSIELTS - Dec 17, 2018 / Holt - Dec 18, 2018
|The governance and big companies may be permitted to upgrade the environment - not the individuals?
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 17, 2018 / annanthaayu - Dec 17, 2018
|Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise.
3 - Doung, you turned this into a personal response essay by the way that you structured your opening paraphrase. You...
Writing Feedbackduongnt9911 - Dec 16, 2018 / Holt - Dec 17, 2018
|The table reveals the threefold of national consumer expenditure category
2 - Quoc, unfortunately, the Task 1 essay requires a minimum of 150 words for the presentation. Since you only wrote...
Writing FeedbackSherk - Dec 16, 2018 / Holt - Dec 17, 2018
|The question about the impact of parents' job on children's future job
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are...
Writing Feedbackpouryapars - Dec 16, 2018 / — -
|If you had to spend a year in either past or future, which year would you travel to and why?
2 - Kartik, first of all, remove the "we" and references to time travel with your girlfriend. The reviewer wants only...
Writing Feedbackkartikt - Dec 15, 2018 / Holt - Dec 16, 2018
|A common belief that unpaid community services should be made compulsory for high schoolers.
3 - Hi, I just rewrite my thesis statement. Could you please recheck it for me. Thanks a lot. In my...
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Dec 15, 2018 / vietduccan - Dec 16, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task2: Throwaway culture reasons and consequences
2 - Mohammed, your prompt paraphrase is too close to the original one to be considered a personal version of the...
Writing Feedbackbasheertoad9 - Dec 15, 2018 / Holt - Dec 16, 2018
|The only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel/work in a foreign country
3 - Nguyen, the essay is asking you to discuss both points of public view before you write your personal opinion....
Writing FeedbackAlicelanphuong - Dec 15, 2018 / Holt - Dec 16, 2018
|In your opinion, what has been the most significant invention of the past 200 years?
2 - I am not entirely sure whether this essay was supposed to be a creative writting work or an argumentative...
Writing Feedbackpinarsima - Dec 14, 2018 / kartikt - Dec 15, 2018
|Ielts writing task 2: buying products from other countries.
4 - Hi, I think the main problem is the way you write the thesis statement. The question is "to what...
Writing Feedbackforielts - Dec 7, 2018 / vietduccan - Dec 15, 2018
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