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|''Help me with my process: How bricks are produced''
3 - @dungpharma97 I suggest looking into finding better transitions for your essay. Avoid straining your sentences by extending unnecessarily the...
Writing Feedbackdungpharma97 - Mar 25, 2019 / Maria - Mar 25, 2019
|[IELTS] Money on protecting animals vs human well-being
3 - @anhpnguyen To create a more natural flow in your essay, I suggest rephrasing some of your lines. Remember that...
Writing Feedbackanhpnguyen - Mar 25, 2019 / Maria - Mar 25, 2019
|IELTS task 2: more young people in society - evaluation of this trend
Writing Feedbackyanhong - Mar 24, 2019 / TJLuschen - Mar 25, 2019
|Tofel writing part 2--whether children nowadays are more difficult to educate that in previous times
2 - Ruslai0, Your essay is on the right direction. However, I do suggest that you look into shortening your sentences....
Writing Feedbackruslai0 - Mar 24, 2019 / Maria - Mar 24, 2019
|[IELTS TASK 2] Longer Prison Sentences And Other Solutions. Best way to reduce crime rate
2 - In paragraph two, give at least two examples of criminals who were converted into model citizens and cite that...
Writing FeedbackTheshadow - Mar 24, 2019 / Constance - Mar 24, 2019
|Writing task 1 - layouts of a university's sports center
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Mar 20, 2019 / crystlho - Mar 24, 2019
|IELTS Writing task 2: Discuss about advantages and disadvantages of private medical services.
4 - You must make the thread Urgent for a new review from a Contributor, thank you. First Paragraph (Introduction):...
Writing FeedbackEren Jeager - Mar 23, 2019 / pc_pc - Mar 23, 2019
|Essay topic: Developments in the field of artificial intelligence - a positive impact for the future
2 - In paragraph one - some individuals... A.I. ....I would argue that the computer can be wiser than humans. ...
Writing FeedbackHuyhuynh2001 - Mar 23, 2019 / Constance - Mar 23, 2019
|When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration.
2 - Your manner of writing is good. A lot of readers would appreciate how straightforward you are when it comes...
Writing Feedbackthanhphuong02 - Mar 23, 2019 / Maria - Mar 23, 2019
|IELTS: Future science will make human almost immortal. Is that good?
2 - Coke, The direction of your essay is sufficient. I simply suggest extending the rationale of your explanations. For...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 23, 2019 / Maria - Mar 23, 2019
|IELTS_TASK 2: advantage and disadvantage of shopping online.
Writing FeedbackTUYET PHAM - Mar 23, 2019 / coke - Mar 23, 2019
|Ielt writing task 1 The table below shows key data on the demographics of 4 different countries
2 - Gio1999pt, On a technical level, I would suggest looking into studying more about proper punctuation, subject-verb agreements, and...
Writing Feedbackgio1999pt - Mar 17, 2019 / Maria - Mar 22, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 - Causes and Solutions of Obesity and decreasing Health
Writing Feedbackpropeace - Mar 21, 2019 / propeace - Mar 22, 2019
|Inventing computers as one of the most crucial human's achievements for the last hundred years
2 - In paragraph one should be humans have contributed for the last hundred years or if you want to say...
Writing FeedbackKaraVo - Mar 21, 2019 / Constance - Mar 22, 2019
|Strict ban on plastic bags - opinion essay
2 - Jalp, I think the structure of your essay is already good. However, I would also consider looking into...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Mar 22, 2019 / Maria - Mar 22, 2019
|Nowadays changes need to be made regarding the school curriculum, prepare children for adulthood
2 - Saons, I think there are two points to consider in your essay. Firstly, let's delve into the technicalities of...
Writing Feedbacksaons - Mar 22, 2019 / Maria - Mar 22, 2019
|Writing task 1 : The employment of the first-year teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007
2 - Hope this could help. First paragraph gave too much information about the graph. Usually, you re-phrase the title...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Mar 20, 2019 / jalp - Mar 22, 2019
|IELTS task 2: Stay in the same type of work or change jobs time to time. Discuss both sides/opinion
Writing Feedbackbuttercup - Mar 20, 2019 / buttercup - Mar 21, 2019
|IELTS T2 - mandatory courses of foreign languages in schools
Writing Feedbackifaedward - Mar 20, 2019 / ifaedward - Mar 21, 2019
|Equal investment on railways and roads?: IELTS 2
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Mar 15, 2019 / crystlho - Mar 20, 2019
|[IELTS TASK 2] - ARTS AND SCIENCE; unique traits of arts vs science and technology
3 - Thank you for the suggestions, I appreciate your help :D I should really think about your idea about "arts...
Writing Feedbacklamnhathuy - Mar 20, 2019 / lamnhathuy - Mar 20, 2019
|News comparison case study - a bombing attack in the UK
2 - I like your writing style; thoughtful and to the point (you could be a reporter :). I'm not sure...
Writing Feedbackxxxu021 - Mar 18, 2019 / Rich Monte - Mar 20, 2019
|SOCIAL MEDIA AND OTHER REASONS INFLUENCE COMMUNICATION
2 - You've got a very good point about using the "old-fashioned" communication (like letters); people would generally be able to...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 19, 2019 / Rich Monte - Mar 20, 2019
|[IELTS] People should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet.
3 - Personally, I think you should include passive voice in some of your sentences to avoid repetition. For example: First,...
Writing Feedbackbuimingduc - Mar 20, 2019 / lamnhathuy - Mar 20, 2019
|Two sides of debate - CBEST: Technology contribution to the modern life
2 - hi @jakepkdt This is my suggestion for your writing: 1.The technology serves to ... society and economy...
Writing Feedbackjakepkdt - Mar 15, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 20, 2019
|Universities function is providing the knowledge and skills required in a workplace / employer
Writing Feedbackidontwannabeyou - Mar 19, 2019 / idontwannabeyou - Mar 19, 2019
|Packaged food benefit society
Writing Feedbackdust1205 - Mar 19, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 19, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: The better selection for improving life quality in developing countries
2 - Obviously, people are happier when ... => i just think the sentence is unnecessary, to replace, you can mention...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 18, 2019 / Hammy - Mar 19, 2019
|The problems and solutions to increasing life expectancy
3 - in my opinion, i don't agree with you that your essay talked about a general view which means including...
Writing FeedbackThao Hien - Mar 16, 2019 / Hammy - Mar 19, 2019
|How to define and achieve happiness
3 - @Ekaputri17 I think you've written a strong essay overall. I can only suggest that you don't need to put...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 17, 2019 / coke - Mar 18, 2019
|[IETLS Writing] the advantages of the government's spending on university fees
2 - It would be better if you explain your point of view first rather than you explain the opposite sides....
Writing Feedbackanhtu - Mar 17, 2019 / danggraini - Mar 18, 2019
|IELTS2 - the power of advertising and the real needs of the society in which they are sold
2 - Hy @Leon2501 Overall your ideas are good, you only need to make it simple and well-organized In my...
Writing FeedbackLeon2501 - Mar 17, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 17, 2019
|It is argued that preventing problems relevant to health is more crucial than curing these problems
3 - Phan, you have not followed the discussion requirements for this essay. This happened because you went in a different...
Writing FeedbackHuyngoc168 - Mar 14, 2019 / Holt - Mar 17, 2019
|Nurses are a critical part of healthcare and make up the largest section of the health profession
2 - Sydnea, what is the whole point of this paper? It is a highly informative research paper that failed to...
Writing Feedbacksydmarie - Mar 13, 2019 / Holt - Mar 17, 2019
|Writing task 2 (Fixing punishment and prison time)
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 14, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 16, 2019
|Creativity and Entrepreneurship - young people are more creative than the old in business
2 - Hi @Sanazhemmati, I supposed you were writing a short essay for language tests like TOEFL or IELTS. Following this...
Writing FeedbackSanazhemmati - Mar 14, 2019 / liuzhengxian - Mar 16, 2019
|Most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is very important
2 - good arrangement furniture -> well-arranged need money for fulfilling -> to fulfill this forces them continuing -> to continue...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 16, 2019 / ngothanhnam2211 - Mar 16, 2019
|Rates of recidivism are still high - reasons of this phenomenon and possible solutions
2 - Hy @crystlho In my opinion, your solutions do not tackle the causes of the problems which you are...
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Mar 14, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 15, 2019
|It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects
Writing Feedbacktranthanh1992 - Mar 12, 2019 / peacock34 - Mar 15, 2019
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Giving judges the access to past police record of a defendant
5 - Tran, I find that my students find it easier to create a paraphrase when they have 4 instead of...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Mar 10, 2019 / Holt - Mar 14, 2019
|Exercising - A Natural Way to Help Your Health
3 - Dong, since this is not an extent essay, your agreement should not be presented as a measured response. It...
Writing Feedbackddoris - Mar 12, 2019 / Holt - Mar 14, 2019
|Children suffer more pressure from academic, social and commercial aspects
3 - Le, unfortunately, all of the reviews int he world will not be able to help this essay in its...
Writing FeedbackLeduythaiduong - Mar 12, 2019 / Holt - Mar 14, 2019
|IELTS 2: In many schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects and boys choose science
2 - hey, I have some advices may be helpful for you ! u use some inappropriate words and expressions like...
Writing Feedbackhuyenltt - Mar 11, 2019 / julggo44 - Mar 13, 2019
|IELTS Task 2- Advantages and Disadvantages of Nursing homes for the Elderly
2 - Dear Spartan, I would like to have some comments on your writing as follows: 1) Strengths: You have answered...
Writing Feedbackspartan1 - Mar 11, 2019 / crystlho - Mar 13, 2019
|WATER POLUTION - a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment
3 - I think IELTS examiners won't check for plagiarism in the real test as the examples given by test takers...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 11, 2019 / coke - Mar 13, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 Writing: Discuss about studying in groups and studying alone.
2 - Hy @coke, I am also still learning, and I just want to give advice based on my recent knowledge...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 11, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 12, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?
2 - Hello writingbuddy888 I think your 2nd body only lists 3 ideas on why social media is advantageous. You need...
Writing Feedbackwritingbuddy888 - Mar 11, 2019 / coke - Mar 11, 2019
|Ielts task2 - Should government give more financial support to local film industries?
2 - Please include the whole question in your post next time. Word count is 193 which is way too far...
Writing Feedbackbenice - Mar 11, 2019 / coke - Mar 11, 2019
|Writing task 2- responsibility of the goverment of the poor nations and the rich nations
3 - Diep, kindly remember that there is a difference between UK and US English when it comes to spelling certain...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Mar 10, 2019 / Holt - Mar 11, 2019
|Essay about the future effects of computer technology advancements.
3 - Pronob, You did a great job in presenting the Task Accuracy requirements of the first paragraph. It strictly adheres...
Writing FeedbackPrch - Mar 10, 2019 / Holt - Mar 11, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 Writing: Printing newspaper and magazines will cease to occur in the near future
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 9, 2019 / coke - Mar 10, 2019
|People have lost their night sleep. Why is night sleep distorted? Impact on society & individuals
Writing Feedbacksumitbabel0101 - Mar 9, 2019 / Holt - Mar 10, 2019
|The hard copy version of newspapers & magazines has been in great threat toward the printed version
Writing FeedbackJames777 - Mar 9, 2019 / James777 - Mar 10, 2019
|Review My Essay task 2 : implementing strictly noise controls
2 - Minh, before I delve into the composition problems of your I would like to show you the simpler problems...
Writing FeedbackMinhHuong96 - Mar 9, 2019 / Holt - Mar 10, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 Writing : Charging with people for admission is a positive way to maintain a museum
3 - Pei, I cannot give this essay a passing score because it will automatically receive a failing score of 1....
Writing Feedbackwedward8780 - Mar 9, 2019 / Holt - Mar 10, 2019
|Topic - Animals not anymore as a food source, or a "product"
2 - Zombu, this is an extent response essay. That means that you cannot just "lean towards" an opinion, you actually...
Writing Feedbackzombu11 - Mar 8, 2019 / Holt - Mar 9, 2019
|Children's free time must include educational activities
3 - Jasur, the direct question essay must be discussed from a single point of view. Not a comparative point of...
Writing FeedbackJas8086 - Mar 8, 2019 / Holt - Mar 9, 2019
|IELTS Writing task 2: Studying subjects that we do not like is a complete waste of time
2 - Hello angella1706, You need to state your position on whether or not studying uninteresting subjects is a waste...
Writing Feedbackangella1706 - Mar 8, 2019 / coke - Mar 9, 2019
|WORK CONDITIONS AND TIME TOPIC. THE TEST IN 2-3-2019.
2 - Hello dinhphong, Firstly, the prompt has never mentioned any trend in making alterations of works so I think...
Writing Feedbackdinhphong - Mar 5, 2019 / coke - Mar 9, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Why national leaders should spend more money on public transportation
2 - Nguyen, your essay does not follow the discussion prompt as it is provided. This is a 5 paragraph essay...
Writing Feedbacknguyenxuandinhpq - Mar 7, 2019 / Holt - Mar 8, 2019
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