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|Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past, which reduces their activity
2 - If you review the prompt for this essay, you will notice that there is a direct question being asked...
Writing Feedbackbaxtr03 - Apr 17, 2020 / Holt - Apr 17, 2020
|Discuss about punishment which help children learn about the difference between right and wrong
2 - There is a formatting problem with your response essay. Based on the original prompt, it appears that the response...
Writing Feedbackhuyen25 - Apr 17, 2020 / Holt - Apr 17, 2020
|The internet isolates us and encourages people not to socialise or just allows us to stay connected?
3 - Saying "To a certain extent, I..." Is considered a non answer in a Task 2 extent of dis/agreement essay....
Writing Feedbackntngn - Apr 16, 2020 / Holt - Apr 17, 2020
|Ielts task 2 " Art can be made by everyone or with those with special ability"
2 - Hey @student_univers! You got a pretty solid argument here, really there's only repeat spelling issues and the lack of...
Writing Feedbackstudent_univers - Apr 16, 2020 / willy_mcnilly - Apr 16, 2020
|Data on the yearly salary of doctors and other workers in seven nations in a particular year (2004)
2 - The forum has a single essay per thread policy. So your second posting in the same thread is scheduled...
Writing Feedbackphunghoangthuyan - Apr 16, 2020 / Holt - Apr 16, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1: The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of th
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your feedback. I have just started my IELTS preparation so I hope...
Writing Feedbackvuthanh99 - Apr 15, 2020 / vuthanh99 - Apr 16, 2020
|Do you Agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money ? Give reasons for your answer
3 - You are not taking the test seriously. You are not being careful with your grammar, your punctuation marks, your...
Writing FeedbackAmy Tran - Apr 15, 2020 / Holt - Apr 16, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Most of world's problems are caused by over-population.
Writing Feedbackaprilw - Apr 13, 2020 / aprilw - Apr 16, 2020
|Benefits of living in the countryside
3 - @Dung2001 Nice writing practice! I think you can make some improvement on your grammar as follow: you can...
Writing FeedbackDung2001 - Apr 15, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 16, 2020
|Compare and contrast essay: Online learning and traditional learning
3 - @Holt Thanks so much. I wrote this essay like a general English essay writing, I just wanna practice before...
Writing FeedbackLuana - Apr 14, 2020 / Luana - Apr 15, 2020
|THE RATIO OF BIRTH AND DEATH IN NEW ZEALAND
Writing Feedbackphucnguyenhong04 - Apr 14, 2020 / phucnguyenhong04 - Apr 15, 2020
|Some people think that they should be able to keep the money they earn and do not have to pay tax.
4 - Every paragraph needs to have 3 sentences minimum in the presentation. That includes the opening and closing paraphrase. You...
Writing FeedbackTang Phuong - Apr 8, 2020 / Holt - Apr 15, 2020
|Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today.
2 - Please remember that in the direct opinion essay, you must outline your discussion points in the first paragraph as...
Writing Feedbackhoimin2399 - Apr 15, 2020 / Holt - Apr 15, 2020
|Fake news is becoming increasingly common in the era of social media. What problems will it cause?
2 - Please remember to post the full prompt the next time you come here for an essay review. It will...
Writing Feedbackmngocng - Apr 15, 2020 / Holt - Apr 15, 2020
|The idea of imposing university education at no charge from a government for society growth
4 - While your essay shows that you support a solid opinion on this essay along the lines of totally agreeing...
Writing FeedbackThao Vo - Apr 9, 2020 / Holt - Apr 15, 2020
|Employers should be concerned about how efficient the employees work, rather than by their clothing
5 - " While I think dress ...". You should have use "Although" not "While". "how efficient the employees work". Use...
Writing Feedbackhellohello123 - Apr 13, 2020 / minhthu121 - Apr 14, 2020
|IELTS Task 2: Agree- Disagree: Funding for wild animal protection
5 - In my opinion, you should add more explanations and examples in order to prove your point view in 3rd...
Writing FeedbackladyMcc - Apr 11, 2020 / renezella - Apr 14, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 1: Internet Users from countries as percentage of population 1999-2009
9 - I think you should got 4 paragraphs with 2 bodies. The first one you can describe and compare USA...
Writing Feedbackmaizaq - Mar 30, 2020 / clara2608 - Apr 14, 2020
|How many people suffered from diarrhea in Mashhad throughout the period from 1983 to 1992?
Writing Feedbackclara2608 - Apr 13, 2020 / clara2608 - Apr 14, 2020
|Explain the motivation of choosing Ireland as your study destination - GOI-IES
3 - Hello, thank you @Holt for the answer, Can I get more explanation about "Expand the discussion to focus on...
Writing Feedbacknabilah_hannan - Apr 8, 2020 / nabilah_hannan - Apr 14, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 2-Most medical doctors want to work in cities where they will make a lot of money
3 - The essay is a direct opinion essay. As such, the format is as follows: - Paraphrase the topic...
Writing Feedbackseansean1703 - Apr 13, 2020 / Holt - Apr 14, 2020
|Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason?
6 - You should just need to check the tenses that you used for the verbs, those would affect your final...
Writing Feedbacktinanguyen1510 - Apr 7, 2020 / seansean1703 - Apr 13, 2020
|Some people believe that it is good for students to have the same teacher for several years
3 - Your response went off topic. You have only 2 choices for your response. The response should have been based...
Writing Feedbackseansean1703 - Apr 13, 2020 / Holt - Apr 13, 2020
|Should ads targeting children be banned? (Ielts - writing task 2)
4 - You have to work on your reasoning paragraphs. Believe it or not, you have extremely long discussions in these...
Writing Feedbacksyrenaphan - Apr 13, 2020 / Holt - Apr 13, 2020
|IELTS task 2: Will artificial intelligence replace teacher in classrooms.
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Apr 13, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 13, 2020
|The appearance of computers is the most important revolution in both 20th and 21st century
Writing FeedbackHangngo - Apr 12, 2020 / Hangngo - Apr 13, 2020
|The huge numbers of jobs could be substituted by robotic devices - Task 2
2 - Why did you change the prompt for this essay? The actual discussion instruction for this essay is: Discuss both...
Writing Feedbackhongkongstudent - Apr 12, 2020 / Holt - Apr 13, 2020
|The issue about protecting wild animals. Give your opinion
Writing Feedbackrenezella - Apr 4, 2020 / renezella - Apr 13, 2020
|Writing task 2 - Parents responsibility (Some people think that parents...)
Writing Feedbackkha420 - Apr 11, 2020 / banhmithit - Apr 12, 2020
|Describe a second-hand thing that you own.
3 - When you write descriptive essays, try to avoid the use of word fillers. For example, the word "Actually" does...
Writing Feedbacktandlvn2003 - Apr 12, 2020 / Holt - Apr 12, 2020
|IELTS Task 2: Agree- Disagree: Government should assist disadvantaged people.
Writing Feedbackminhthu121 - Apr 10, 2020 / minhthu121 - Apr 12, 2020
|The diagram describes how coal is used to generate electricity for human activities.
2 - You are making an assumption in your summary overview that is not indicated in the diagram. The electricity is...
Writing Feedbackannahoang - Apr 11, 2020 / Holt - Apr 12, 2020
|The amount of four different kinds of food used by people in an European nation from 1979 to 2004
3 - You should improve the grammar. Remember doubled check your essay. And I think in p4, you should put information...
Writing FeedbackUTam - Apr 11, 2020 / annahoang - Apr 11, 2020
|IELTS task 2: Artificial intelligence used to drive car
4 - @annahoang Thank you Anna. I can get your point. I myself feel a little bit irritating as I totally...
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Apr 9, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Apr 10, 2020
|Should tax payers fund artists? Discuss both of views and give your own opinion
3 - Okay... if information is not stated in the original prompt, do not use it in your prompt paraphrase. Financially...
Writing FeedbackMax_02 - Apr 10, 2020 / Holt - Apr 10, 2020
|Writing Task 1 The changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day
Writing Feedbackannahoang - Apr 9, 2020 / tung53202 - Apr 10, 2020
|Writing Task 2: Discuss and give opinion about certain talents and training
3 - @Holt I'm very grateful to your advice. Hope to receive more significant comments from you What about the way...
Writing Feedbackconghieu98bn - Apr 9, 2020 / conghieu98bn - Apr 10, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Memorising facts is the most important way to succeed in education.
2 - You failed the test the minute that you wrote your opening paraphrase. You cannot score higher than a 3...
Writing FeedbackDieuThu - Apr 9, 2020 / Holt - Apr 10, 2020
|Tourism explosion becomes an accumulated threat for the unique and worthy of visiting places
2 - This is a 4 paragraph, not 5 paragraph essay. You went overboard with the discussion points. There were only...
Writing Feedbackphuong1452001 - Apr 9, 2020 / Holt - Apr 9, 2020
|International exchange programs benefit teenagers
2 - You have mixed up the essay discussion instructions. You are combining an extent essay with an A/D essay discussion...
Writing Feedbackkhanhhoa - Apr 9, 2020 / Holt - Apr 9, 2020
|Essay about discussing two views about protecting local culture and giving opinion
3 - @Holt thank you so much for your advices. This is the first time I have written an IELTS essay...
Writing Feedbackhthuhuong - Apr 9, 2020 / hthuhuong - Apr 9, 2020
|Writing Task 1 - The percentage of people employed in various sectors in California.
3 - I think you should explain the upward trend in body 1 and the downward trend in body 2, don't...
Writing FeedbackNgon - Apr 8, 2020 / nabilah_hannan - Apr 9, 2020
|Women who worked in parliament - IELTS _Writing Task 1_Line Chart
8 - You should give the detail about the time frame such as "from 2000 to 2012" or "between 2000 and...
Writing Feedbackmy123456 - Mar 27, 2020 / nabilah_hannan - Apr 8, 2020
|Ielts essay task 2 regarding who determines children's academic success
3 - In final paragraph you can add some more points to support your final thoughts about the topic....
Writing Feedbackkhanhhuyen2447 - Apr 5, 2020 / Froggy23 - Apr 8, 2020
|Task 1 IELTS: Compare consumers Germany, Italy, France and Britain
3 - I think you should, put the word "Overall" or "In general" for the overview. Then, usually there are three...
Writing FeedbackKhaiHoan - Apr 7, 2020 / nabilah_hannan - Apr 8, 2020
|Can a country be more interesting and develop quickly when it has a mixture of nationalities?
Writing Feedbackly3108 - Apr 8, 2020 / ly3108 - Apr 8, 2020
|IELTS TASK 1: LINE GRAPH ABOUT CHANGES IN PRICE
2 - I have to say, this is a very impressive task 1 presentation. It is almost totally accurate in representing...
Writing FeedbackMRielts - Apr 8, 2020 / Holt - Apr 8, 2020
|Toefl independent question - studying art and literature vs math and science
Writing Feedbacklnb1 - Apr 7, 2020 / lnb1 - Apr 8, 2020
|Temperature and hours of daylight in Mumbai and Moscow - TASK 1 IELTS
2 - Excellent writing. You made proper comparison points and clearly stated the information provided using a proper mix of simple...
Writing Feedbackkenny Tran - Apr 8, 2020 / Holt - Apr 8, 2020
|Should rich countries give other types of help to poorer ones instead of giving financial aids?
Writing Feedbackly3108 - Apr 8, 2020 / ly3108 - Apr 8, 2020
|Advantages and disadvantages of children from nuclear family moving geographically with their parent
3 - To @Holt: First of all, thank you for taking your time to give me feedback. However, I find it...
Writing FeedbackCoroline - Apr 8, 2020 / Coroline - Apr 8, 2020
|Pros and cons of media on gender inequality
2 - I am not sure what English test you are practicing for or what prompt you are responding to ....
Writing FeedbackBeginners - Apr 8, 2020 / Holt - Apr 8, 2020
|Task 2: Children's education is expensive. In some countries, the government pay some of it.
Writing FeedbackHangPham99 - Apr 7, 2020 / Holt - Apr 8, 2020
|Master in Entrepreneurship -AAS- How will the proposed study contribute to your career?
2 - You are not responding to the question. How will the study contribute to your career? So you want to...
Writing Feedbackhendiva87 - Apr 7, 2020 / Holt - Apr 7, 2020
|Essay about the changes in the number of Vietnamese students studying abroad.
2 - You kind of let your writing get away from you in this task. The ideal word count is 175-190....
Writing FeedbackLam - Apr 7, 2020 / Holt - Apr 7, 2020
|Money on average earned - correct this Task 1 IELST Writing
4 - You need to make a clear structure in Task 1 IELTS writing test. 1. Introduction 2. Overview 3....
Writing FeedbackLe Quoc Dzung - Apr 7, 2020 / hendiva87 - Apr 7, 2020
|Australia physical activity - (Task 1 in IELTS writing test)
3 - @Tphuc Overall, you have done a good structure in Task 1. In the introduction, you have already paraphrased...
Writing FeedbackTphuc - Apr 7, 2020 / hendiva87 - Apr 7, 2020
|IELTs_Task 2_The causes of stress in college student - the university' life will be colorful and des
Writing FeedbackTynna - Apr 7, 2020 / Holt - Apr 7, 2020
|Students should have the right to make comments about their teachers - IELTS Writing Task 2
3 - The inaccurate prompt paraphrase has created a discussion instruction deviation on your part. The discussion asks you to compare...
Writing FeedbackNTG - Apr 6, 2020 / Holt - Apr 7, 2020
|IELTS Task 2: Agree and Disagree: Introducing more physical education in school curriculum.
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