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|(IELTS) Purchasing unnecessary - pricey goods by people
NEW - Some people get into debt by buying things they do not need and cannot afford. What are the reason...
Writing Feedbacksznnis25 - Sep 24, 2018 / — -
|[IELTS] Children are better off to spend the time on other activities than reading story books.
2 - Suggestions too much times winder topics "Children will have various topics to share" becomes repetitive finding process-learning process, this...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Sep 23, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Sep 23, 2018
|The differences of Education in Vietnam
3 - Phuong, your essay is very confusing to read. It feels like you are just picking up the discussion points...
Writing Feedbackpphanhh - Sep 22, 2018 / Holt - Sep 23, 2018
|Music cannot be prioritized by its importance - each genre has its own purpose
3 - Daniella, although you were given a detailed review of your work above, the person who gave you the advice...
Writing FeedbackDanila312 - Sep 22, 2018 / Holt - Sep 23, 2018
|Young people admire sports stars though they do not set a good example. This is negative or positive
5 - You mentioned only the drawback of athletes which is unfair. Secondly, in your last paragraph you have written "a...
Writing Feedbackvybeo23 - Sep 19, 2018 / anakosola - Sep 22, 2018
|The human have a negative effect on our planet. By harming Earth, we put our lives in danger.
4 - Ana, regardless of the information and review that you received above, your essay will still get a failing score...
Writing Feedbackanakosola - Sep 21, 2018 / Holt - Sep 22, 2018
|[Writing task 2] The decline of face-to-face communication due to the rise of technology
4 - proper uses cogently you mean coherently? Also, you've written too long which exceed 250 words a lot for...
Writing FeedbackOkabe_Rin - Sep 19, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Sep 21, 2018
|Describe a favorite class you had in school. What made it your favorite class. (250-350 words)
2 - Kushboo, one particular activity in this class is not enough to make it a favorite class. Memorable? Yes. Favorite?...
Writing FeedbackKhushbooVohra - Sep 19, 2018 / Holt - Sep 20, 2018
|IELTS PART 1:...how selected age groups bought concert, cinema and theatre tickets online
2 - Ly, the first thing you have to remember is that there is a big difference in writing the Task...
Writing FeedbackLy Huyen Tran - Sep 18, 2018 / Holt - Sep 19, 2018
|It is more advantageous for children to start learning a foreign language at a primary school
2 - Hi Uyen, I think your discussion is quite good and clear. However, I have some feedback for your essay:...
Writing Feedbacktuuyen - Sep 18, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 18, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: Occupied and available types of living accomodation in London
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Sep 17, 2018 / Legecy - Sep 18, 2018
|Is My Life Worth Saving Someone Else Working in Law Enforcement?
2 - Nechee, this is a very timely piece of writing here. Your personal insight into the life of a police...
Writing Feedbacknecheecraig - Sep 16, 2018 / Holt - Sep 17, 2018
|Essay about whether government should be responsible for education and healthcare
2 - Zeng, you are using too many memorized phrases in this essay for it to be considered a piece of...
Writing Feedbackzengzhiz - Sep 16, 2018 / Holt - Sep 17, 2018
|Ielts Writing Task 1 Multiple Charts
NEW - The table illustrates quantity of tourists to Ashdown Museum in the year before and after it was refurbished while...
Writing Feedbacklequangtan - Sep 17, 2018 / — -
|Building a large gym facility on the company's premises, or to pay employees to sign up elsewhere?
5 - Han, this is still an opinion essay. That means you need to take only one stand and defend it....
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 15, 2018 / Holt - Sep 17, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2, topic is about technology and the relationship between people
2 - which automatically impacts through in many distinct ways The technology innovations have significant influences were it not for...
Writing FeedbackThuyKieu - Sep 17, 2018 / cao1km - Sep 17, 2018
|Although more and more people read news online, newspapers remain the most important source of news
Writing FeedbackTranTuan - Sep 9, 2018 / TranTuan - Sep 17, 2018
|[Writing task2] Punishment to recognize the right/wrong distinction by kids
Writing FeedbackMinh Luong - Sep 14, 2018 / Minh Luong - Sep 16, 2018
|Immigration: An Analysis of its Impact on the American Economy
2 - Hi Kacee, You did a nice job with your essay. Good intro, solid conclusion, and you had plenty...
Writing Feedbackkap444 - Sep 16, 2018 / Razumikhin2018 - Sep 16, 2018
|Task 2:Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject or not
3 - Nguyen, you have a TA response problem in your prompt paraphrase. The question is not whether the university should...
Writing FeedbackNhat Px - Sep 15, 2018 / Holt - Sep 16, 2018
|Taking a gap year before entering university is the choice of many high school graduates
3 - Hi Khanh, I think your essay is good when you presented a full structure of a paragraph. However, I...
Writing FeedbackKhanh2901 - Sep 12, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 15, 2018
|Contribution to societies through taxes or by there should be other responsibilities
2 - Hi there, I think your essay is quite good with an organized structure. However, It seems that there are...
Writing FeedbackMTALY - Sep 14, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 15, 2018
|Task 2: Opinion about video games - more problems than benefits
7 - For your conclusion, it needs to be a paragraph not just a one sentence. Also, you may need to...
Writing FeedbackNhat Px - Sep 13, 2018 / MTALY - Sep 14, 2018
|Tourists visiting rough condition places ( IELTS task 2)
4 - Hi @amal_yaddy, I agree completely with what @Holt has said. In my honest opinion, I believe your level...
Writing Feedbackamal_yaddy - Sep 13, 2018 / MTALY - Sep 14, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - Discussion on giving financial or practical aid to developing countries
3 - I think you should give your opinion in the opening like : While people think.... I personally believe.... Remember...
Writing Feedbackstacy422 - Sep 13, 2018 / Nhat Px - Sep 14, 2018
|What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet and what solutions can you suggest?
2 - Lee, your presentation is way off base when considering the required discussion presentation. You did an introduction to the...
Writing FeedbackJameslee - Sep 13, 2018 / Holt - Sep 14, 2018
|My topic is choosing subjects to study university, subjects what they like or related to future job.
2 - Some of your sentence makes me confused as: Choosing fields suitable for each ... ( I think it should...
Writing Feedbacknhumai1307 - Sep 13, 2018 / Nhat Px - Sep 13, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2-Discuss Main Aim For University Educaiton
3 - Ryan, I'm also preparing IELTS test. I also made the mistake of not discussing both views in this kind...
Writing FeedbackRyan C - Sep 11, 2018 / stacy422 - Sep 13, 2018
|ART VS SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY - How can art make a difference in our society?
Writing Feedbackjalp - Sep 10, 2018 / kalyn - Sep 13, 2018
|Governments should focus its budget more on environmental protection than on economic developments
2 - Carol, when you are asked to respond to a question, you must do so within the first paragraph of...
Writing Feedbackgilgameshauo - Sep 12, 2018 / Holt - Sep 13, 2018
|The bar chart reveals the change of the proportion of USA citizens (all ages) living alone
2 - Ngo, while you did write 180 plus words in this essay, the analysis and presentation of facts for your...
Writing Feedbacknhatlamielts - Sep 11, 2018 / Holt - Sep 12, 2018
|I don't believe that students can acquire more knowledge from schools than during online education
2 - Zhou, you have automatically failed this essay test due to your misunderstanding of the topic for discussion and how...
Writing FeedbackKaren_Karen - Sep 11, 2018 / Holt - Sep 12, 2018
|Does a free society requires having freedom of speech and express their word? IELTS
2 - Noura, rather than presenting question after question in this essay, which creates redundancies, you should instead be responding directly...
Writing Feedbacknoura1993 - Sep 11, 2018 / Holt - Sep 12, 2018
|You left a bag of equipment at the gym last night. Write a letter to the manager - task 1
4 - Hi Han, although you did cover the prompt requirement in this letter, there are mistakes that would cause you...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 10, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Sep 11, 2018
|IELTS Task 1 : the table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries 1930-1980
4 - Hi Asih, since many advice have been given regarding your cohesion and logical overview, I would just focus on...
Writing FeedbackAsih Mustikasari - Sep 9, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Sep 11, 2018
|Blood Diamonds, The Bad and The Ugly
2 - McKelvey, you may want to revise this essay a bit. You mention the Kimberly Process a few times in...
Writing Feedbackmcmfoster1 - Sep 9, 2018 / Holt - Sep 10, 2018
|'Experiences, moments, and events all have an impact on our life' - Defining Moment: Paragraph
5 - Sujana, one of the points for correction in this essay is your reference to the idea that you could...
Writing FeedbackSuj - Sep 9, 2018 / Holt - Sep 10, 2018
|A laptop market share table in 2006-2007.
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Sep 9, 2018 / Asih Mustikasari - Sep 10, 2018
|The scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments, not private firms
3 - Actually, I myself am still studying, so let's study together. ... limited because they must share for all...
Writing Feedbacktit992 - Sep 9, 2018 / Asih Mustikasari - Sep 10, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 - opinions on transportation improvements
3 - Shi, your essay falls short in terms of Task Accuracy and cannot get a passing score due to discussion...
Writing Feedbackstacy422 - Sep 9, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|These days many families move abroad for work.
3 - Vivek, you turned this essay into a single point of view discussion when it should have been a 3...
Writing Feedbackvdhiman23 - Sep 8, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: ANIMAL SHOULD BE "EMPLOYED" OR THEY SHOULD HAVE THE RIGHT AS HUMANS ?
5 - Dang, your essay does not properly discuss the prompt provided. This is a 3 body paragraph discussion covering 2...
Writing FeedbackDang Khoa - Sep 8, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|APPLICATION FOR THE MOOT CLUB - THE BANNING OF WEARING HIJAB IN EUROPE COUNTRIES
2 - Linh, I believe that you should be arguing this case from the point of view of the separation of...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Sep 8, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: describe a table about forest land
3 - Emma, you need to be precise when it comes to describing the image that is presented to you for...
Writing Feedbackhjy1994 - Sep 8, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|Task 2:Supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture - Discuss
4 - Pham, This is a 5 paragraph essay. The body of paragraphs need to cover 3 represented topics as per...
Writing Feedbacknobuta54 - Sep 8, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|Unknown charge - CELPIP TEST - email to the credit card company
3 - Thanks Holt for your detailed feedback. I'm still working hard on improving vocabulary usage and grammar....
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 7, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 8, 2018
|IELTS Taks 1: Some college has agreed to check your house and pet while you are on vacations
5 - thanks you very much. I really appreciate your cooperation. i will take care for these mistake next time....
Writing Feedbackaimal - Sep 7, 2018 / aimal - Sep 8, 2018
|Task 2 - Some individuals believe that studying at university or college is the best route
4 - Hoa, why are you discussing pros and cons in an essay that is asking you to discuss "both points...
Writing Feedbackhoa123 - Sep 7, 2018 / Holt - Sep 8, 2018
|Theoretical knowledge and qualifications should never be underestimated - crucial in the job market
2 - Mai, you need to address this essay with a clear response to the extent question that was provided in...
Writing Feedbackmailong25 - Sep 6, 2018 / Holt - Sep 7, 2018
|It is true that most people are likely to choose high-paying jobs - IELTS TASK 2
3 - Shao, this is an "extent" essay so you cannot simply dis/agree with a given statement. You need to show...
Writing FeedbackRogerscup - Sep 6, 2018 / Holt - Sep 7, 2018
|Some people think that the students should have a gap year?
3 - @Ahnne This particular prompt asks you to discuss the advantages or disadvantages of a student taking a gap year...
Writing FeedbackAhnne - Sep 6, 2018 / Holt - Sep 7, 2018
|Cbest essay topic - Is individual effort necessary to combat pollution and global warming?
Writing FeedbackAnita Paul - Sep 6, 2018 / Holt - Sep 6, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Waste disposal in an European country
Writing Feedbackhoa123 - Aug 31, 2018 / Rogerscup - Sep 6, 2018
|The reality of Traffic jams in my city
4 - Nguyen, since you did not tell us what this writing assignment is all about, it is really hard for...
Writing Feedbackducminhnhue - Sep 5, 2018 / Holt - Sep 6, 2018
|Hi! I'm currently preparing for IELTS. This is one of my writings for describing a map
Writing Feedbackstacy422 - Sep 5, 2018 / Rogerscup - Sep 5, 2018
|With the higher use of TV and computers we are under some threats posed by a range of violent scenes
2 - @annyht the last sentence in your closing statement should have been the thesis statement for your opening paraphrase. That...
Writing Feedbackannyht - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 5, 2018
|Essay : some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution
2 - @langtieubich your work cannot be scored due to the missing prompt requirement. The instructions for the discussion are required...
Writing Feedbacklangtieubich - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 5, 2018
|School funding in a particular UK school. IELTS writing task 1.
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 31, 2018 / Rogerscup - Sep 5, 2018
|In the days and ages, the world has been witched by the explosion of migration in big cities
2 - @nhiphuong since this is a direct question essay, you should be presenting at least one difficulty in the prompt...
Writing Feedbacknhiphuong - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 5, 2018
|IELTS task 2 - THE AGE AT WHICH PEOPLE RETIRE FROM WORK SHOULD BE RAISED CONSIDERABLY. TRUE OR NOT?
3 - Danka, excellent work. You stayed on track from beginning to end with the strongest justifications for your point of...
Writing Feedbacktkd980219 - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 5, 2018
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