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Admission policy of museums - charging entry fees does not create more benefits


zzzfly 1 / 2  
Oct 11, 2016   #1
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Many museums charge for admission while others are free.
Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?


Admission policy of museums is always a controversial issue. From my point of view, charging entry fees does not create more benefits than providing free admission because this type of organizations usually could gain more from other sources, such as donations and selling artifacts.

The most significant advantage of charging no admission fee is that it could bring more visitors. The increases of people not only promote a museum but also enhance its income. Take my personal experience as an example. Last time my friends and I planned a trip. We wanted to find a balance between travel spending and the variety of attractions we plan to go. As such, the spending on entry ticket became a critical factor for us to determine whether we should visit historical sites or not. Furthermore, according to an official survey in the UK, admission fees does not actually account for the largest proportion of museum's earning. It indicates museums rely more on donations and the profits created by the secondary spend of admissions.

On the other hands, the opposite opinions primarily focus on that providing zero admission charge will damage the financial position of museums. The reason is that operating and maintaining a place to preserve culture and historical artifacts are not easy jobs. It requires a sufficient income to pay for bills and the salaries of museum's staffs. However, it is possible to offset this lost income by raising income from donations such as implementing a proactive donations strategy.

In conclusion, although charging admission fee can increase the income of museums, in my opinion, providing free entry to people can bring more positive effects and the increasing of tourists might even improve museum's income.

Afdhel 14 / 21 1  
Oct 12, 2016   #2
Hi zzzfly, I want to give you advice

Admission policy of museums always becomes the controversial issue

The enhancement of people not only promote a museum but also accelerate its influx .

Take my personal experience as an example (It is the speaking style, not the writing style)

You can improve like this: For instance, based on my experience

The reason of that operating and maintaining a ...

Actually, your sentence makes us being confuse. You just put a conjunction if there are two verbs.

Good luck, keep writing
andika08 81 / 80 16  
Oct 22, 2016   #3
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections for you

We wanted to find a balancedifferent between the cost during travel spending and the variety of attractions we plan to gobefore we going

... factor for us to determine whether we should visit ...
It indicates museums rely more on donations and the ...

However, it is possible to offset thisabout lost income by ...

..., providing free entry to people can would bring more ...

You have made a good writing structure for body 1 and 2 also in conclusion

too many repetitive words (income,increase,charging), maybe it can be changed into new words,


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