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Advantages and disadvantages of computer to run a small business!


vothiha 11 / 29  
Jan 9, 2010   #1
Computers are essential in the modern offices nowdays. Write about advantages and disadvantages of relying on computers to run a small business.

Invention of computer is a turnpoint of humandkind's history with which our life is much more easy. More and more people have applied advantages of computer to run their own business. However, computer-aided business also bring hidden drawbacks.

Firstly, computer is a great help to simplify a process of dealing with a huge data related to work. We can store, analyse and withdraw easily data by specific softwares which had to consume a large amount of time and effort before. However, depending completely on computer can put us at risk of losing important information if we don't take precautions to save them in another way. Many risks we can list firstly are attacks of virus, hackers, hardware damage or software errors.

Secondly, bisinessmen can use computer to spread their company's image throughout the world and contact immediately with their partners. For example, a businessman can introduce and advertise their products and services through a website, keep in touch with customers by email, and conduct online storefronts. On the other hand, doing business in a help of computer is not always reliable because a virtual company can take an unfair advantage of clients' belief to appropriate money.

To sum up, besides unexpected danger, smart computers are a vital part of modern offices tat help to lighten enormously a workload and assist a businessman with reaching the global market.

chuncky13 8 / 13  
Jan 9, 2010   #2
The invention of the computer is a turnpoint of humandkind's history with which our life lives are much more easy. Many people have applied the advantages of the computer in order to run their own businesses. More and more people have applied advantages of computer to run their own business. However, computer-aided businesses also bring hidden drawbacks.

You should really watch your grammar.
chuncky13 8 / 13  
Jan 9, 2010   #3
Firstly, computer is a great help to simplify a process of dealing with a huge data related to work.
When it come to simplifying a huge amount of work, the computer is an ideal invention to help the process.
OP vothiha 11 / 29  
Jan 10, 2010   #4
Thank you chuchky 13!
When it come s to simplifying a huge amount of work, the computer is an ideal invention to help the process.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jan 16, 2010   #5
I'll do a little more work with it here:

The invention of the computer is a turnpoint of humandkind's history with which our life lives are made much more easy easier. Many people have applied the advantages of the computer in order to run their own businesses. More and more people have applied advantages of the computer to run their own business.(you wrote the same sentence twice?)

:-)
khoctham 6 / 12  
Jan 17, 2010   #6
your mistakes were pointed out. u need to practise more in order to improve your writing skill. try to spend more new structure as well as vocabularies
hatung94 6 / 8  
Jan 23, 2010   #7
you use too many linking words. This may make your essay incoherent or maybe sometimes illogical


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