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[IELTS writing task 2] Advantages and disadvantages of media

hi021132 6 / 11 4  
Jul 27, 2017   #1
Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as Media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.

the most effective media types

Television, comic and film are three common channels to convey information to the general public. Among them, movie is the most effective tool to communicate information. The advantages and disadvantages of the three media are illustrated in the following paragraphs.

Each of the three aforementioned media has their own merits. Television's coverage is the widest among them. It is a free access to information as well as a traditional way for audience to receive news, especially the elderly's generation. Comic, which is a comparatively simple method to communicate information, usually contains a few blocks of picture. The delicacy of comic is that authors convey the subtle message with a few simple drawings which are easy to understand. In contrast, film is also very popular because people like story. The messages can be instilled into audience's minds with a series of scenes subconsciously.

A coin has two sides. There are some constraints for these media. Although television has been the most successful medium in the past decade, its influence is declining due to people's prior preference of the Internet and wireless network which are more convenient than conventional television. The popularity of comic is limited by the amount of content. Owing to the length of ordinary comic, it can be funny and easy to understand but not affluent in content. Notwithstanding the attractiveness of casts and scenarios of film, the cost of seeing a movie is comparatively high among the three channels. Therefore, it may not be an available choice of media for people who are sensitive to price.

In conclusion, film is the best way to distribute information as it is rich in content and attractive to the general public. (280 words)
Kaylee - / 9  
Jul 27, 2017   #2
I think in the conclusion, you should write sth like "It seems to me that TV...."
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 13,879 4563  
Jul 27, 2017   #3
Peter, your discussion has so many problems that I do not know where to begin. All of the problems your essay has connect to the fact that you are not discussing the essays in the proper one paragraph per topic manner. As this is a 5 paragraph essay, the format should have been as follows:

1. Paraphrase
2. First media discussion
3. Second Media Discussion
4. Third Media discussion / the most effective media discussion
5. Concluding paragraph

You must also be aware that when you type the words, you need to spell it out properly otherwise you end up spelling a totally different word by definition. A "comic" means to "causing or meant to cause laughter." or is a "a comedian, especially a professional one.". While "comics" refer to comic strips. While a "comic" may also refer to a comic strip, the keyword used in the essay has the "s" at the end. Therefore, you should have typed it as such. Always spell the words and make sure that your keywords are referred to properly as presented in the original.

Make sure that you never present your opinion or give a direct answer to the prompt in the paraphrasing because that is a violation of the writing rules for this test. The first paragraph should only summarize the original prompt. A sample format for the writing of this topic is as follows:

In this essay, I will be discussing the advantages and disadvantages of 3 forms of media in relation to information communication. The presentation will be based on the least effective to the most effective form. I will be supporting my choices with relevant examples from my personal experience or popular information.

My first choice is television for the following reasons.... However, the disadvantage of television is....
My second choice...
My preferred choice as the most effective media for communication is... To me, this is the most effective form even though it has disadvantages such as ... These do not affect its effectiveness as a communication tool.

In the end, all 3 have their advantages and disadvantages...

The work that you did on this essay is not very good. It did not properly assess and represent the required discussion and you would not have gotten a very good score for this kind of work. I hope to see improvements to your work in the next essays. Take my suggestions into consideration with your next writing piece.

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