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Age of marriage in today's world



thebest_kz 1 / 2  
Apr 7, 2010   #1
Hello! This is my first essay. Please, read and leave your comments.

In the past people often get married and had children when they were very young. Nowadays many people choose to start a family later on in life. What do you think are the advantages of this development?

It is obvious that people prefer to start a family later nowadays. Some people want to get more achievement in theirs career as they don't want their future family to be hard up. For more people family is too hard responsibility and they don't want to sacrifice theirs freedom till they realize that it is unusual to spend old age in loneliness.

Clearly, it is very convenient to start family at an older age, because person got some experience how to behave with people and this experience will help to make relationship easier. In addition to strong relationships, people who married later can bring up children better than people married earlier, because young people sometimes don't realize importance of upbringing. And this cause is partly responsible for crimes, diseases and even drugs trade among young people.

On the other hand, marriage in old age brings some unforeseen consequences. In old age very difficult to play with children, parents can not spend much time for children's amusement because of tiredness. In addition to tiredness, sometimes people should give up a lot of free time for upbringing their children. And as a result for somebody it can be very stressful. And mainly these stresses have bad influence on children. Some parents even could not see theirs grandchild, as they could not live that long.

To sum up, the benefit of marriage in old age is financial secure for family. The problem is that some causes can have bad influence on children's behavior.

asokapalama 3 / 18  
Apr 7, 2010   #2
Your arguments about the age of marriage are quit right. However, I would like to give some additional points for your topic.

1.Legally there is a minimum age for marriage. So people can marry after that age
legally.

2.One should marry when he/she physically and mentally mature. Then only the couple can face to the problems successfully and also have healthy children

3.Before marry one should have stable employment or source of income. That is why some people have to wait.

4.Right age for marriage depend upon the individual and also the country he or she
lives.
OP thebest_kz 1 / 2  
Apr 7, 2010   #3
Thank you for your recommendation, I'm very glad that you didn't ignore my essay, but actually I would like to know grammar points also.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Apr 8, 2010   #4
For some people family is too hard a responsibility, and they don't want to sacrifice theirs their freedom -- until they realize that it is unusual to spend old age in loneliness.

Clearly, it is very convenient to start family at an older age, because an older person has got some experience and knowledge of how to behave with people, and this experience will help to make the process of relationship easier.

In old age it is very difficult to play with children, parents cannot spend much time...

In addition to tiredness, sometimes people should give up a lot of free time for bringing up their children. --- upbringing is a noun

And as a result, for some people it can be very stressful. And mainly these stresses have bad influence on children. Some parents cannot even not see their grandchild, as they cannot live that long.

To sum up, the benefit of marriage at an older age is financial security for the family. The problem is that some causes factors associated with marriage at an older age can have bad influences on children's behavior.

If you are still able to have children, you are not experiencing "old age." That is why I changed it to say "older age." Instead of marrying young, you marry at an older age, but if you can still have children you are not yet experiencing old age.

:-)
OP thebest_kz 1 / 2  
Apr 8, 2010   #5
EF_Kevin
Thank you very-very-very much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! =)))))
I adjusted my essay, today I' going to pass it... I'll tell you my result and score =)


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