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Today's schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today.


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Nov 15, 2021   #1

financial lesson in the curriculum



Financial management has always been such an imperative but also stressful objective for many people, especially young adult who is likely to be fraught with the troublesome issues in finance once they are on the threshold of life. Thus, there comes a sentiment of involving the education about economic survival for present-day students in the schools' curriculum; meanwhile, some people vigorously oppose this idea. As a supporter of the former, I will explain the reasons here.

Firstly, it appears plainly that an independent life will certainly necessitate the ability of well financial management. Since it seems that current youngsters are making for achieving self-reliance, being early equipped with financial savvy is one of the top priorities for their future preparation. To illustrate, when children are taught how to save, manage money and develop a positive attitude towards financing, they may find it less troublesome when confronting financially unexpected life changes. Moreover, not having an early mindset about finance might establish bad habits in childhood that may lead to worse problems as they grow up.

Secondly, notwithstanding its benefits, financial knowledge could be obscure to many students if it were not a must-have part at school. Even though financial know-how can be achieved throughout the youngsters' daily life or through university; however, it is not certain that every student can have a chance to experience it. For instance, to those students who study in technical faculty, subjects like finance are not imparted at all.

By way of conclusion, I fully endorse the request for the school to have the financial lesson in the curriculum, considering its necessity for youngsters' future life and the insurance that it can be reached by every student.
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Nov 16, 2021   #2
The prompt paraphrase and opinion paragraph has deviated from the original topic and required response format. The restatement should not be more than 2 sentences, with an emotional, measured response as the final sentence in this paragraph.The error was created because the writer gave personal insights immediately into the topic rather than just repeating the original presentation in his own words. He confused the restatement with a reasoning paragraph. This is therefore, an avoidable error. As for the opinion statement, the lack of conviction and strength in the writer's point of view led to an altered response format. Providing an unacceptable answer to the question. Both errors will lead to a non-passing task score.

I fully endorse the request for the school to have the financial lesson in the curriculum

There was no such reference to this topic in the original prompt. Though the reasoning paragraphs fit the discussion, the writer's tendency to alter the original topic and discussion requirements are what will cause the failing score.


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