Personally, I believe that this idea creates more drawbacks rather than benefits.
There are several problems with this prompt restatement + opinion presentation. The first, is that the original topic is simply a one liner sentence that does not contain any of the opening remarks that the exam taker presented here. The personal opinion presented in the opening statement created an inaccuracy in the topic restatement and will be scored down. The second error, is that there is an inaccurate opinion presentation as the exam taker:
- Incorrectly used and agree or disagree statement in the title (It is an extent response instead)
- Incorrectly gave his opinion in an incorrect format (drawbacks v. benefits instead of extent of agreement or disagreement)
As such, the essay has already recieved a failing preliminary TA score due to the inaccuracies presented. These opening statement errors are enough to fail the test overall due to the incorrect presentation format and lack of a valid opinion based on the discussion question provided. There is no need to review the rest of the essay at this point since the discussion is irrelevant to the given scenario.