Should air fares be increased to discourage people from travelling by plane

Environmental impact of aviation

Nowadays, many airlines offer cheap fares on flying. Although there are good arguments in favor of this trend, I personally think that cheap flight can make serious problem to the environment, but in the other hand, bring some benefits to people in a lot of ways.

One good thing about cheap air fares is that broadened travel possibilities for many people, particularly for the lower income group. They can develop their careers, travel for pleasure, create new commercial transactions, and promote the tourist industry development, boots the economy and job markets of many countries.

On the other hand, the drawback of cheap air fares is that produce a negative impact on the environment. With more flights, air pollution and global warming are the biggest concern of Friends of the Earth. Burning plane fuel can releases CO2 into ozone layer and produce climate and natural effects that can be dangerous for humanity.

In conclusion, I think air fares increasing is not the solution for the pollution. Instead, the government should develop action plans for CO2 emission reductions, setting baselines for fuel generators, installing CO2 monitoring system on the airports and promote fiscal benefits to airports that fulfill these plans.

I am suggesting some changes. Incorporate it if useful.
"but in the other hand -- on"
Also (bring some benefits to people in a lot of ways.) this sentence is wrong. Either remove 'some' or ' in a lot of ways' and add "it brings" instead of bring.

Also, I would advise you to follow one side of discussion if it's debate.

Andy, kindly remember to provide the complete prompt the next time that you provide an essay for review. We cannot help you further improve your written content without it. I strongly recommend that you do that so that you can also be familiarized with the different discussion types for the various essay tests. At this moment, I know that you presented an acceptable argument in your essay. However, the arguments that you present are weak because you are always under the minimum 3 sentence requirement of the cohesiveness and coherence section of the essay scoring criteria. As such, the examiner will consider all of the presentations under developed and under discussed, thus garnering you the lowest possible scores in the TA, C&C, and GRA sections. Your opening statement does not come across as a complete paraphrasing of the original prompt either, which will reduce the TA score even further. As you did not provide the original prompt, I am also uncertain as to whether or not you were able to accomplish all of the tasks within the requirements provided. Therefore, even though you have a nice essay presented for review, it may not be the kind of essay that will garner a passing score in an actual setting.