IELTS WRITING TASK 1; Annual expenditure of a British school

The three pie charts illustrate the figure of annual expenditure of a particular british school in 1981,1991 and 2001.

In all three years the greatest expenditure on staff salaries. but while other workers' salaries declined from 28% in 1981 to 15% in 2001, teachers' salaries remained the biggest cost , occupied 50% of total spending in 1991 and slightly dropped to 45% in 2001.

Furthermore, Insurance occupied the least percentage of school budget but it shows an upward trend,went from 2% in 1981 to 8% in 2001.

Expenditure on resources such as books had rose to 20% by 1991 before decreasing to 9% in 2001. whereas, the cost of expenditure and equipment shows an opposite trend. this cost decreased to only 5% in 1991 but rose dramatically in 2001 when it constituted 23% of the school budget.

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not british, it should be British

Instead of the separation of each year, write "during a period of 20 years, from 1981 to 2001" or " between 1981 and 2001"

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I haven't mentioned all mistakes!

Please mention all my mistakes that I have done in this task

please find the attached details of pie charts.

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In all three years the greatest expenditure on staff salaries. But( LETTER AFTER FULL STOP HA TO BE AS PER 1ST ALPHABET) while other workers' salaries declined from 28% in 1981 to 15% in 2001, teachers salaries remained the biggest cost, ( SPACE SHOULD BE ONLY AFTER COMMA NOT BEFORE) AND TAKEN OVER 50% of total spending in 1991 and slightly dropped to 45% in 2001.

Hey, your image is too small for us to have a good look at it. I think it is better you upload it once again with a bigger version of the image.

With regard to your structure, I strongly suggest to follow what Pahan has suggested you. Have the parts - Introduction, Overview and Details in your response.

The three pie charts illustrate the figuredetails of annual expenditure of a particular british school in 1981,1991 and 2001.

Thank u for ur reply. But how much bands i will get for this task???

I think 5.5 )

But we write overview in last para.

but we write overview in last para.