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The annual rice production of 4 countries


DanielDang 5 / 8  
Oct 6, 2022   #1

The annual rice production of 4 countries



The bar chart compares four different countries in terms of the amount of rice produced annually in 2005, 2010 and 2015. It is noticeable that the rice production of country A and B overtook that of country C and D by a wide margin. In general, while there was an increase trend in the output of rice in three out of four countries between 2005 and 2015, the figure for country C remained gradually the same.

In 2005, the productivity of rice of the country A was 45 million tonnes, compared to nearly 26 million tonnes of the country B. However, the total outputs of rice in B rose significantly to 43 million tonnes and closely caught up the productivity of A, at 47 million tonnes. The amount of rice per year produced by A kept the same trend and went up to 50 million tonnes in 2015. The figure for the country B bucked the trend with seven million tonnes decrease.

By contrast, the rice industry of the country C and D were considerably lower than other countries, with 5 million tonnes and 2 million tonnes respectively in 2005. By 2015, the amount of rice production of the country C and D shared comparable figures, with 5 million tonnes each.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,919 4799  
Oct 7, 2022   #2
While the essay can still be completed using lesser words, the writer did a pretty good job of completing the task in an understandable manner. I would like to commend the writer for doing a very good job in creating the summary overview + trending statement paragraph as well. It was concise and truly informative for a reader to scan.

That said, I have to comment though on the way that the reporting paragraphs were created. He seemed to focus his information and comparison presentation only on 2005 and 2015 data. He appears to have overlooked the 2010 information from the graph for some reason? Why did that happen? It is important for the writer to remember that all 3 years must be represented in the reporting paragraphs since these were also indicated in the actual image and overview information. It should have been mentioned in some way or manner within the reporting paragraphs as well.


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