WRITING TASK 1 The average proportions of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in meals

The average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutritions

The charts show the average proportions of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar, which may be unhealthy if consumed too much in four types of meals.

Overall, sodium and saturated fat are the most preferred types of nutrients for all typical meals, while the highest percentage of sugar is eaten in snacks. In addition, breakfast is the meal with the lowest fat, sodium and sugar.

The percentage of sodium in dinner is 43%, which is the largest proportion, compared to 29% for lunch and 14% for both snacksand breakfast. Dinner has 37% of saturated fat, which is the largest amount for this category, followed by the figures for lunch, snacks and breakfast, which are 26%, 21%, and 18%, respectively.

The amount of added sugar consumed in snacks is the largest, with 42%. There are 23%, 19%, and 16% in the equivalent figures for dinner, lunch, and breakfast.

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The summary overview contains a personal opinion from the writer. As this is a task 1 score that does not allow for personal opinion presentation, the writer will receive a failing mark for the summary overview. Never provide a personal opinion in this part. Just summarize the information from the image. That will cause points deductions in the TA section.


Missing a comma in this part.


You forgot to place a space between words.

It appears that you are weak when it comes to proof reading and editing your work. You did not actually do that did you? So you left the errors that will cause major deductions to you score in the essay. You will fail due to careless not because of your lack of writing skills.

You must not express your opinion, just report that. (like in intro)
In the overview, you should emphasize biggest or smallest percentage, don't write "breakfast is the meal with the lowest fat, sodium and sugar" if in the body you don't divide into the figures of breakfast, lunch, ... It'll make you lose at cohesion