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A balance is required when covering news about celebrities and ordinary people

amrillahmk 29 / 47 6  
Nov 4, 2016   #1
The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationship of celebrities such as actors, singers, or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some believe celebrities, such as actors, singers, or footballers, are too much covered by the media, while others assume more attention should be paid on mundane people. Although there is a reason why the media often reports celebrities' lives, which is gaining profits, I would argue the media should cover both side. Thus, the principal of media can be upheld.

In competitive media industries like current situation, it is undeniable fact that the media should gain profits in order to survive. So, one of the many reasons why the media cover celebrities is because this will bring benefits for media Industries. This happens because actors, singers, or footballers have thousands or even millions of fans that will follow their day-to-day activities. As a result, when the news about their idols is updated in the television, radio, or magazine, such fans will watch, listen or read that news so that the media will earn an excessive amount of money.

However, the media should remember their principal when reporting topical circumstances, to be impartial. As such, it will ensure ordinary people to be covered as well, and many people can learn from their inspiring stories, such as how to live in simplicity and keep persevering no matter what the situation is. This will make people more sensitive to one another because the media can create public opinion, so that hopefully they will help to those in need. Moreover, I firmly believe many more lessons of lives will be gained when reporting mundane people's lives.

In conclusion, although covering celebrities will bring significant profits, ordinary people cannot be entirely neglected. Because the role of media is not only reporting celebrities, but also ordinary citizens. Thus, it will uphold media's principal and many people can get much more information as well as see both side of the news, so a balance is required.
Medo91 4 / 10 3  
Nov 4, 2016   #2

I agree with you that mundane people's life should be brought to light and to bolster your statement, the governments should pay attention to this like state media.

This will make it more balanced and attract more viewers to know how other people manage to live.

well done
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Nov 4, 2016   #3
Hi Miftah, as I go through your essay, I must say you have created a well written essay, you made sure that the words you choose are very easy to understand and this is one thing that some writers tend to neglect, as they say, keeping it simple is the best way to go, comprehension is one thing to consider when writing, so your message will be sent across as clear as possible.

Further to your essay, I have a few suggestions that will strengthen it.

- Some people believe celebrities,
- often reports the lives of celebrities' lives( the word "celebrities" does not need an apostrophe in it, it's the plural form of the word "celebrities") , which is gaining profits,however,

- I would argue that the media should cover both sides .
- Thus, the principal of media can be upheld.- I'm not sure what you mean by this sentence when you say, "the principal of media", please elaborate or rephrase"

There you have it Miftah, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision, so far, the above remarks are my suggestions and I hope they are able to help you out in your revision.
OP amrillahmk 29 / 47 6  
Nov 4, 2016   #4
Hi Justivy thankyou for coming back in my thread, your feedback means a lot to me.
Yes I am currently experimenting a lot with my writing in this forum, so if I make mistakes, I hope someone will correct me so that my writing skills will improve. Feel free for correcting my essay, any suggestion or critics will be much appreciated.

Thank you in advance.
Miftah Khairi
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Nov 10, 2016   #5
Hi Miftah, it's great to hear from you and here at EF, you can be sure that we will be here whenever you need us and you don't even have to write a formal essay or answer a prompt, a draft will suffice an entry and practicing to write as often as you can is always a good way to develop your writing skills and with the help of contributors, students and writers here on EF are here to back you up.

For future writing reference however, mind the minor details of your sentences make sure that you include them in the essay and keep your sentences direct to the point while keeping it simple and easy to comprehend, it will also help if you use simple words, words that best describe your ideas, this way, you yourself understands the essay and you are able to convey your ideas to your readers, this is one of the most important aspect of writing.

I do wish to review more of your essays soon and should you have anything in mind at all, we are here for you.

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