Hi, Good essay with clear structure. I am also new here, try my best to give you some suggestions.
There is no question that people who live in urban areas benefit from many facilities, such as access to education, healthcare, social services and cultural activitiesIt is no doubt that/ It is true that
people who live in urban areas are
benefit from many facilities, such as
educations, healthcares, social services and cultural activities
in your conclusion, you would better response to the question "What are some benefits and drawbacks of urbanization?"I feel you only talk about the drawbacks.