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The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses.


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Jun 21, 2021   #1
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The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses.

Do you agree or disagree?



Making parents take parenting courses is considered as the key factor behind the growth of children. Personally, I disagree with this idea because I strongly believe that other factors are equally important.

On the one hand, there is a widely held view among parents that parenting courses furnish them with the knowledge of children's growth. This would enable parents to get a closer insight into signals and expressions throughout each phase of children's development so that they can take care of their babies far better. Additionally, those courses foster a sense of security for parents. Having some changes weekly such as getting tense and testy or crying is inevitable, but it makes parents extremely worried if they are not well-informed that such changes are a part of growing up. Thus, it is pivotal for parents to take up parenting courses.

Nevertheless, despite the benefits of parenting courses, I am convinced that the growth of children is influenced by other factors. Initially, the amount of time spent on their children by parents is far more concerning. It is no doubt true that parents' devoting their time to their children may affect children's abilities and emotions and behaviors as well. Further and even more important, though how parents cultivate their children plays a dominant role. While children whose parents are patient with their false tend to behave well, the opposite was true for those whose parents use physical punishments for their wrongdoings.

By way of conclusion, although parenting courses are beneficial to parents due to the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that parents should take their time and educate children into equal consideration.
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Jun 22, 2021   #2
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