Best way to resolve the problems of big traffic and pollution by introducing higher price of petrol

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measure do you think might be effective?

Some people agree that it is the best way to resolve the problems of increasing traffic and pollution by introducing higher price of petrol; however, I tend to hold that there must be a better way to deal with these situations.

Before the new policy shows its effect, the implement of it will possibly bring complaints from the public because petrol is the necessity in people's lives. Besides, it is also important to control the range of price adjustment for fear of affecting people's living quality. Therefore, the effect of price increasing policy might be limited without any supplementary policy offering people other alternatives to change their habits. Raising the price of petrol blindly is very likely to lead to dissatisfaction amid people.

Before the adjustment of petrol price, I believe that government should start planning the construction of mass transportation system or providing subsidy for those who buy eco-friendly vehicles such as electronic scooters or cars. Take Taipei city for example, the number of car per household is less than one, which mostly contributes to the convenience of the public transportation. When people develop their habits to take mass transportation, it will decrease the demand of car and then the petrol. On the other hand, providing subsidy for electronic vehicles is not only encouragement for consumers but also incentives for business to put more efforts on the R&D and marketing of these products. The industry will gradually change and follow the supplementary policy.

Instead of the enforcement of increasing price of petrol, I argue that the offering of alternatives to people is far more effective and bring satisfaction among the society. Furthermore, the whole industry will make progress with the change of policy.

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