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IELTS Task 1: A breakdown of Wheat Exports in Several Countries



fahmisadja 33 / 33  
Jan 19, 2016   #1
A breakdown of wheat exports in several countries is presented in the line chart from 1985 to 1990. Overall, there were parallel falls in export rates between Australia and Europe countries in the first second period. On the other hand, Canada showed a stable percentage from the beginning of time frame over the period in question.

Between 1985 and 1987, a similar trend was seen by Australia and European communities in wheat exports, regarding a slight decrease. The former went down steadily from 15 to 14 million tonnes, while the latter fell by around a million ton. In contrast, the proportion of Canada's wheat exports rose slowly and reached at over 20 million tonnes.

Interestingly, Canada witnessed an upward trend. The alteration was most noticeable in the third period, when the figure showed a significant increase and peaked at 25 million tonnes. However, this had fallen back to the 1985 figure by 1990. By contrast, the portion of Australia declined gradually at about 10 million tonnes, albeit the other grew up to more than 20 million tonnes. Eventually, a gap between those had widened.

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vangiespen - / 4077  
Jan 19, 2016   #2
A breakdown of wheat exports in several countries is presented in the line chart from 1985 to 1990.
- Using what measurement? This creates a gap in the information you are delivering and will render the whole essay useless due to incomplete information.

... and Europe EUROPEAN countries ... first AND second ... beginning of THE time frame AND over ...

... by Australia AUSTRALIAN and European communities in DECREASING wheat exports, regarding a slight decrease . ... a million tonS... reached at over 20 million tonnes.

... By IN contrast, the A portion of Australia AUSTRALIAN EXPORTS HAD declined gradually at TO about 10 million tonnes, albeit the other
- What other?

...grew up INCREASED to more ... Eventually, a gap between those had widened.
- A gap between?

Your essay suffers from your lack of concentration. You are either in a hurry to write the essay or you do not care that you do not provide complete information. Your haphazard manner of writing will ensure that you fail the test. You need to develop proper writing and proof-reading abilities. Know that every bit of information counts towards a higher score.


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