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IELTS Task 1: The brief summary of healthcare and life expectancy


eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Jan 17, 2014   #1
The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.

Answer:

The two given charts show the facts regarding to health and medical care in different countries.

Let's look at the first chart which the number of sharing hospital beds is 14 thousand from Japan. As seen, Germany and Netherlands come second and third in the next allocation, with at 8 and nearly 5 thousand beds of population. While Australia has a slight point below the Netherlands, this country leads UK, Canada, Spain and USA which supply the lowest quantities of hospital beds, at around 4 per thousand.

At the second chart, official governments of different countries show the amount of money spent. In this section, the Dutch government come the highest one of $3,48 grant, which leads US and Japan spending $6,719 and $2,581 of fund programme. However, Japanese uplifts the best grade point average in 83 years of life expectancy rather than Dutch with 80 years and 78 years of American people.

Clearly, by comparison with the other countries, Japan spending less money to its citizens as fund programme for medical and healthcare provides more beds for patients and life expectancy.




Pahan 1 / 1,908 553  
Jan 17, 2014   #2
The two given charts show the facts regarding to health and medical care in different countries.

You do not introduce your topic adequately. Your topic is;

The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.

In your introduction you do not talk anything about life expectancy which is an important aspect of this graphical presentation. You can take lots of help from the topic title for constructing the introduction. It does not mean that you should repeat every word of it, but you can certainly re-phrase it with your own words.

After the intro, you better have a paragraph to give an overview of overall presentation. That means you should discuss the most obvious trends there, but very very briefly. For example;

According to the graph and the table, the highest average life expectancy is recorded from Japan, while the lowest is recorded by the US. However, the records show that USA has spent the highest amount on healthcare.

Now you can start discussing the details :)
dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Jan 18, 2014   #3
Yes, Pahan has given you good advice. This is the structure we suggest you to follw;
1. Introduction (one or two lines that introduce the graphs briefly)
2. Overview (briefly talk about the most obvious trends)
3. Details (talk about trends in details with the support of data or statistics)

Let's look at the first chart

This sounds too personal. You need to be more formal with your sentences because this is about report writing.


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