IELTS Cambridge Book 1, Test 3, Writing task 1 - the weekly expenditure on 3 fast food

money spent on fast foods in britain

The bar chart illustrates the weekly expenditure on 3 fast food (hamburgers, fish and chips, and pizza) in Pence among the British high, average and income groups whereas the line graph illustrates their use in grammes over the years 1970, 1975, 1980, 1985 and 1990.

Overall the highest amount was spent by the high income group which was for hamburgers while the least amount was spent on pizza by the low income group. The consumption of hamburgers and pizza showed a rise as opposed to the fish and chips consumption over the given period.

The amount spent on the hamburgers was highest in the high income group (more than 40 Pence) which showed a decrease among the average and low income groups accounted around 33 and 18 Pence respectively. The expenditure for the fish and chips showed the highest among the average income group which was exactly 25 Pence while the high and low income groups spent almost less than 20. Almost 20 Pence spent for pizza by the high income group whereas, the average and low income groups only spent around 12 and 8 Pence respectively.

In 1970, both the hamburgers and pizza consumption was less than 100 grammes and remained almost steadily for the next 5 years. Then they reached the peaks around 550 and 275 respectively in 1990. The fish and chips consumption started just over 300 in 1970 and decreased gradually in next 15 years until 200 grammes but in the final 5 years increased slightly around 250.

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The discussion in the paragraphs do not represent properly analyzed and thoroughly presented paragraphs. the writer is too much in a hurry. The presentation is mostly comprised of run-on sentences that tend to be confusing to the reader. For instance, when presenting the images, the writer used one long sentence to explain the content of 2 different images. Each image must be independently identified and must contain information relative to the image. These cannot be compressed because the differening image information will cause confusion for the reader. The writer is using long sentences to show "complex" sentences. This is a misunderstanding on the writer's part. A review of the differences between complex and run - on sentences is in order. The writer should also make an effort to identify the image information referred to in the paragraphs. Right now, the reader does not have any idea as to which image is being referred to in the essay. If the images were not available to the reader, this would be a stressfully confusing presentation that would result in a failing score.

@SaraOm
Hi, i think it's best if you explained one by one about the image first. Then u can collaborate both information that given by the chart and graph