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( career preparation / job opportunities ) Why people attend college or university?


margarita 8 / 25  
Nov 5, 2009   #1
People attend college for several reasons. Primarily, students go into undergraduate courses for career preparation, to be competitive when looking for a job. Others go to college as graduate students, to enhance his knowledge in certain area; and some people go to college just taking advantage of the opportunity in a career change.

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EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Nov 6, 2009   #2
Hello!

Are you posting to get corrections for your English? Here is some help:

Nowadays , a lot of people without a master degree experience they are behind the job offers when looking for a job and see they have to struggle among master degrees colleges who are applying for the same , especially in now days, difficulty competing for jobs among others during this national recession.

Finally, some people go to college look for a career change. They see they can explore other areas that can give them more satisfaction and better accommodate better to their aspirations.

Among the reasons for people to attend college or university are the following: looking for better opportunities in life, to master his knowledge, and for career change.
Poojasugandhi 18 / 35  
Nov 7, 2009   #3
Hi,
Do not use very long sentences as in para 3. Its makes the reader confused about the actual reason/topic. Therefore break the sentences and make use of Comma, transition and connecting words. This will help to express better your point of view.
OP margarita 8 / 25  
Nov 9, 2009   #4
I made some changes, please give me your thougts
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Nov 11, 2009   #5
Some students go into undergraduate courses for career preparation or to be competitive when looking for a job. Others go to college as graduate students, to enhance their knowledge in certain area, or to and some people go to college just taking take advantage of an opportunity for a career change.

So much better!!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Nov 12, 2009   #6
...of the opportunity for a career change.

...college as undergraduate students looking to improve the future of their lives . It is well known how a career can step a person up enhancing his/her opportunities in a job search.

...to augment their knowledge and get specialized training in a field. Nowadays, due to a lack of jobs in a national recession, it is an advantage to have a master degree.

Great! Add this sentence to the end of the first paragraph:
All these reasons for going to college share a common theme: improving one's future life.
OP margarita 8 / 25  
Nov 12, 2009   #7
Many thanks Kevin! I appreciate your help!


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