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IELTS Task 1:The changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960


aniani 20 / 20 13  
Nov 21, 2015   #1
The alterations that have occurred in the construction of Queen Marry Hospital from 1960 to 2000, a four-decade period is illustrated in the map. Overall, it can be seen that the most noticeable changes are the replacement of business and green areas with several major health center projects.

To begin, there were several major changes in the west of map for healthcare purposes. Shopping center lying in the north west of the map was replaced by cancer center and pharmacy. While farmland area was substituted by nursing school. But nevertheless, the infrastructure was demolished and there was an extensive of cancer center in that area.

On the other hand, there were no significant alteration in the east of area. During the period, hospital and car park were still in the same place, but in 2000 the car park was minimized to half area, and the nursing school was building between cancer center and car park.




eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,204 469  
Nov 21, 2015   #2
This is a good report writing. Yet, I want you to notice some changes I have made;

Some alterations that have occurred in the construction of Queen Marry hospital from 1960 to 2000, a four-decade period are illustrated in the map. Overall, it can be seen that the most noticeable changes are the replacement of business and green areas with several major improvements on health center projects.

Major developments occurred in the west of map for healthcare purposes. Shopping center lying in the north west of the map was replaced by a cancer center and pharmacy, while farmland area was converted into a nursing school. In the year 2000, this nursing school shrunk after the expansion of the cancer center to be an L-shaped building

In the east of area, there were no significant alterations in hospital and car park over period in the question. Yet, in 2000 the improvement of cancer center has shrunk the car park to nearly half of its default size to nearly a twentieth of its original size.


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