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IELTS Task 1: Changes in Town_Maps



April April 13 / 147  
Aug 19, 2012   #1
The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st century.
The maps demonstrate alterations made to the town of Lakeside in the first few years of the 21st century (2000 and 2009). Generally big differences occurred to the north of the river, while the south of it just slightly changed.

First of all, in the north of the river, a car park was built in 2009 in place of the derelict warehouses of 2000. Below these warehouses was the old town, which was transformed into blocks of offices, and a part of the land was used to build a new university near the school which stayed the same after nine years. To the left of the school where an Arts centre used to be, a multi-screen cinema was constructed in 2009. Just by the river, in 2000, there existed a residential area, but nine years later, it was replaced with a big shopping centre. However, the other residential area in the north remained unchanged throughout the period.

In the south of the river, there used to be a small industrial complex and a residential area, but the neighbourhood was removed in order to give room for the expansion of the industrial zone in 2009. It is also noted that the lake to the north of the town, which was connected to the river, was changed into a pond.

All in all, it can be seen that major alterations were made so as to make the lives of the citizens more convenient with the introduction of business buildings and a university and the development of the industrial complex.

What could be used to replace "residential area"?
Please give me some feedback. Any comments are appreciated!



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ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 661  
Aug 20, 2012   #2
big differenceschanges occurred toin

The old town was located in the south ofBelow thesethe warehouses was the old town

, and a part of the land was used to build a new university near the school which stayed the same after nine years.

This sentence is a little vague. I think the picture shows that in 2009 the number of schools increased since the word "school" has been written in plural form, while in the left image a singular word (SCHOOL) has been used. If we consider this point, you can write that more schools were built over nine years.

residential area

U can also use "residential district".
OP April April 13 / 147  
Aug 21, 2012   #3
big differenceschanges occurred toin

=> but at the end of the sentence I used "slightly changed" already so there'll be repitition? (When I wrote this I was also confused over these words)

Anw, thank you Ahmad!
artin 7 / 17  
Aug 24, 2012   #4
Hi April April,
How are you?I would like to appreciate for your useful comments on my previouse essays.
Recently I have wriiten a new one.I would be thankful if you correct me again.
Since I`m managing to take Toefl exam.
Thanks,
Artin
OP April April 13 / 147  
Aug 25, 2012   #5
@Artin: So glad you found my comments useful. I'll try my best to help with your next essays :)


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