More and more children are accessing the internet unsupervised at a younger age.

unrestricted usage of internet and kids

More and more children are accessing the internet unsupervised at a younger age. This can sometimes put children at risk. What problems do you think parents face when dealing with their children using the internet? How can that problem be solved?

There is no denying that the advent of the internet has generated concerns about the tremendous implications that the unrestricted usage of it might bear for young children. There are several problems that derive from this act, and in order to contemplate on an effective solution, it is considered essential to present the challenges that parents might encounter.

First and foremost, the internet has been an indispensable tool for people's daily lives, and it is hard to convince a child not to use it. To be precise, parents set the pace for their children, but as long as the internet is a vital tool for the work and other adults' needs, it is inevitable for parents not to use it and exemplify for their sons. Simultaneously, once the child is introduced to the virtual world, significant effort is required to influence him as a parent. Another problem that parents have to deal with is the young's refusal to do homework because they are absorbed by the attractive world of the internet.

Taking into consideration all the aforementioned problems, it is evident that finding an effective solution is a rather uphill task for parents. Nevertheless, I consider that the most efficient ways to alleviate this issue are through constructive dialogues and dedication of quality time with the children. It has been proven that children's most significant need is their parents' attention. Additionally, parents can discuss the internet with young people and its destructive consequences in a simple and convincing way, so that the message will be transmitted.

To recapitulate, the unsupervised access to the internet can pose a threat to children's development. Only if the solutions mentioned were applied will parents encounter fewer challenges with this issue.

There is a standard rule in writing the Task 2 test. To get a high score, keep sentences short and clear. Why? Long and wordy sentences tend to overdo the presentation, causing confusion for the reader and improper vocabulary use on the part of the exam taker. Your first paragraph is definitely an example of the pitfalls of a long and wordy sentence. The number of words you write are not as important as the clarity of your message per sentence, per paragraph. Let me show you how you could have made a better presentation for the prompt restatement:

There is a growing trend of youngsters going online without any adult overseeing their cyberspace activities. This is a situation that causes dangerous scenarios for the kids. There are several complications that parents should identify in this scenario. After identifying the red flag situations, parents should be prepared to work out the situations for the protection of the kids.

The above presentation shows a clear representation of the original prompt discussion topic and discussion requirements. It is not too wordy and not too focused on advanced vocabulary usage. Some people will say, "use complicated words to score higher!" That is wrong! The examiner is looking for a natural flow of discussion, the vocabulary used should not feel forced or out of place in the discussion. Keeping things simple allow you to clearly present your thoughts. That is what you are scored on anyway, not the word count of complicated vocabulary use. However, if you are a master of writing advanced English level papers, then go ahead and try to sound like Einstein. Just make sure it sounds natural in the presentation.

Your first reasoning paragraph got lost in translation. Were you referring to the current work and study from home scenario? You did not do a good job of referring to that. The presentation is lacking in explanation development and supporting samples. However, the second paragraph managed to get the job done. You were able to explain yourself in a somewhat clear manner. I understood what you wanted to say. Don't get me wrong, the paragraph could use further explanations and example presentations to show the effectiveness of your suggested solutions.

The summary overview is short by one sentence. All the paragraphs should have at least 3 sentences. You should have offered an example of the internet trouble a child can face and, the final sentence, could be the solution you suggested parents apply.

I can see that you are capable of understanding the prompt discussion topic and instructions. The problem is the way you write. You have to practice thinking and writing in English. Never think in your native tongue and then translate word for word. That is how you end up with confusing sentences and little explained paragraph presentations.