I think you have an interesting idea and the structure is well organized but with mistakes. I think you should put more effort to edify your sentence
Some children do extra-ordinary work hard in their studies to get their favorite wish to satisfy by their parents
It is little confusing. Some chidren do extraordinary work hard in their studies so their parents can satisfy their favorite wish?
I think if you simplify the sentence it would be better. I know you want make the sentence sophiscated. But at first, make the meaning clear and then use some academic words.
Moreover, complimenting children for their excellence boosts their self-esteem and better individuals in the future.
As samnemeth said, this sentence is confusing too. Do you want to be positive or negative?