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IELTS Task 2 :Children need to eat a healthy meal at school!



tiaDS 73 / 222  
Jan 16, 2014   #1
To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?

Adopting the best quote "regardless logistic our logic does not work" which indicate our topic that healthy food are quite notable to maintain health. Not only do children have to consume healthy food, but all people also need healthy meal to give energy and more active in the daily activities. Standing in contrast, why should children consume a healthy meal? The answer is common, because their bodies are still growing.

Most people agree with this statement that children have to eat a healthy food. It will be a problem for children when they are not getting enough nutritious from healthy food. Moreover, when children are hungry in the school day, they cannot focus on the lesson. As a result, children cannot participate fully and accept all of materials which deliver by teacher. If we compare a kid who has breakfast at home than who does not have breakfast, they will show different performance when children learn at school, for instance. Standing in contrast, productivity in school depends on not only healthy meal, but also the teachers who are of role to encourage sense of competition.

Having said and done, nowadays many working parents prefer to give money than serve healthy food at home. Because of that, some children eat something at school's canteen which sells various meals. If children are given a choice between crisps (junk food) and salad (healthy food), what do they choose? The answer is ironically "Crisps". So, school should consider about meals which are sold in the food court in which healthy food is provided. Having said this, bringing meals from home which is made by mother will be better than buy some food in canteen. In my experience, when I was school my mother always catered a meals which was eaten in the break time. The merit of this was more economically and more hygienist.

In my eyes, presumably healthy food will give extra energy for children in the school and will help children's bodies which are still growing and establish brain's nerve. However, parents and school should provide healthy meal in school and home. I ponder that the average food which is not as well-being as food was the past.

Pahan 1 / 1824  
Jan 16, 2014   #2
healthy food are quite notable

healthy food is quite notable / healthy foods are quite notable
thakursajeeb 5 / 8  
Jan 16, 2014   #3
[Tidas]
It will be a problem for children when they are not getting enough nutritiousnutrition from healthy food.

for instance. Standing in contrast, productivity in school depends on not only healthy meal, but also the teachers who are of role to encourage sense of competition.

his is not the example.

In my experience, when I was at school my mother always catered a meals which was eaten in the break timelunch . The merit of this was more economicallyeconomy and hygienist hygenic.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 17, 2014   #4
Most people agree with this statement that children have to eat a healthy food.

....Actually I think this is out of question. Everybody agrees with the statement and therefore this sentence sounds too obvious. Start the body paragraphs with giving your reasons because the reader is awaiting that.

It will be a problem for children when they are not getting enough nutritiousnutrients from healthy food.

nutritious food / nutrients in food / nutrients from food


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