Yusuf05 11 / 14 2 Aug 10, 2016 #1The confidential files revealed a massive reports of sexual abuse committed on the assylum seekers' camp facility in Nauru, Australia. The victims who were mostly women and children had been sexually abused, brutally attacks, and threatened in a poor living situations. The news even leak how a girl had her lips sewn together and many children experienced a series of molestation.The further examination by The Guardian also highlighted that the mental of assylum seekers had got worse since they were imprisoned in the camp and supplied with a very limited basic needs, not to mention, a small number of tents for refugees' dwelling.In fact, the critics of detenting by U.N put the place as a low standard for regional neighbors. It has been since long in 2015 indicating that Australia's government set badly the management of detention camp prior from New Guinea to the latest in Nauru Island.||- essay resources time.com/4445992/australia-nauru-asylum-camp-abuse/ -||
gabrieloandco 10 / 11 11 Aug 10, 2016 #2Your mistakes corrected:The confidential files revealed a massive reports of sexual abuseThe victims , who were mostly women and children ; had been sexually abused, brutally attacksattacked , and threatened in a poor living situationsconditions .The news even leak how a girl had her lips sewn together and how many children experienced a series of molestationThe further examination by The Guardian also highlighted that the mental health of assylumasylum seekers had gotgotten worse; since they were imprisoned in the camp and supplied with a very limited basic needs, not to mention, a small number of tents for refugees' dwellingIn fact, the critics of detenting by U.N's detention put the place as a low standard for regional neighbors I am not sure of this one, because I don't know what you meant with "detenting".ItThis has been since long in 2015 , indicating that Australia's government set badly the management of detention camp prior from New Guinea to the latest in Nauru Island.The paragraph is OK, just practice more your writing.