Cleaning is the most important job in my city

A clean up the city. B build more bicycle trails. C plant more trees. Explain why.

Its a SPEAKING test which I wrote a draft.

I will definitely go for the cleaning job.

First of all, cleanness matters a lot with people's health.If the hygiene of our living area is bad, we ll get some health problems. For example, if the air which we breath every moment is polluted, it will be much easier for us to be infected by the dusty air which will probably lead to serious illness. So we need to clean up the city to live a healthy life.

Secondly, a clean environment gives a good feeling of living. Nothing can be more unpleasant than dirt like stinky trash, smoky air and dusty cars.We have to clean up those dirt to live a better life.

That's why I would like to do the cleaning job.

You have made some good pints . Howver here are a few suggestions-

Its a SPEAKING test which I wrote a draft.

I will definitely go for the cleaning job.

First of all, cleanness matters a lot with [to] people's health.If the hygiene of our living area is bad, we ll [ use whole words. Will or we'll ] get some[ suffer instead of get some] health problems. For example, if the air which we breath every moment is polluted, it will be much easier[ "it will be much easier" is not very impactful, suggestion- we are more likely to] for us to be infected by the dusty air which will probably lead to serious illness. So we need to clean up the city to live a healthy life.

Secondly, a clean environment gives a good feeling of living. Nothing can be more unpleasant than dirt [ no need to use the word dirt as dusty cars strictly speaking is not dirt]like stinky trash, smoky air and dusty cars.We have to clean up those dirt to live a better life.[ A clean city helps us lead a bettr life]

That's why I would like to do the cleaning job.

Hello chaz my name is nasrin . I live in Iran. Your opinion is very interesting. On three jobs that you mention, I like to plant excessive trees. Green place is very charming for me. The first reason is that green place is full of positive energy. These gives you the sense of living. I red a book on james red field . he had told the trees absorb negative energy and exude positive energy for this is that in the forest we feel freshness and power and happiness . Now you imagine you live in green city because of being energy , you always sleep deeply , wake up happily and come to an end your day whiteout exhausted. In winter and summer you observe a beautiful singe on behind of window.every morning you soak up a fresh air . the second reason is that the trees soak up co2 and exude o2 cause that air pollution become less.  

.... the right word is "cleanliness" and not "cleenness"
First of all, cleanliness matters a lot for peoples' health. .... Very good start :)


...there are more chances for us to be infected by germs in the polluted air that may cause serious illnesses.


That's why I prefer a cleaning job than others.
I think this is pretty good for a speaking task. : )

hello dumi i am appreciated to check my response to riak about cleanig is the most my job in my city. i like to know your oppinion about structre and grammer and suitable using of words

I understand you are preparing for a speaking task.
Generally this is the structure I used to follow;
Express my choice - I think cleaning up the city is the most important job.
Tell my first reason why I choose that option; The first reason why I think it is important is that cleanliness is the most important thing to keep good hygienic conditions.

Tell one example to support this reason; Suppose the garbage in the city is not collected properly. The whole city would be in a mess and people would soon fall sick.

If you have time, tell them a second reason
2nd reason; Also, if we dont keep our city clean, it would affect the local tourism very badly.
Example; because the tourist would be scared of touring in highly polluted cities.

:) that's the structure, I recommend for you too :)

.... my pleasure :)
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Thank you.