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IELTS:companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research



guokaifu 1 / -  
Feb 15, 2011   #1
In today's world, private companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In contemprory sciety,the issue that private corporations invest in and administer the scientific research is increasingly concerned and sparks much debates.But in the meantime,some people claim that we can benefit from that while many others argue that it has some disadvantages. Personally, I am favor of the merits of the view outweighing the weakness.

Convincing arguments can be made that individuals have benefited greatly from those research private companies invested in.To start with,the research allocated money by private firm promot the development of science and technology. For instance,as a result of enormous investment in telecommunication,the technology relevant increases rapidly.Morevoer,the research allocated money to in abundance make people's lives more convenient and efficient.In the term of medical research, quantities of patients have been cured benefiting from new medical technology researched.In addition,the investement in scientific research would generate more employment opportunities.In consequence,The students after graduated can obtain the participation in scientific research.

Admittedly,the technology invested in by private enterprises causes problems.The reason of this is that the scientific research sponsor and regulate by companies lead to the technological monopoly.Obviously,the enterprises concern much about maximizing their interest.For instance, the os-system softeware of computer-windows owned by micosoft has dominated the market for many years. Even some countries' governments use windows to solve the daily affairs.

In summuary,I would concede that the scientific research invested in and conducted by private companies may causes the technological monopoly.Despite that,individuals profit greatly from the developing technology.Overall,I am convinced that the merits of allocating money to and administer the scientific reseach by private enterprises outweigh the weakness.

dolly 12 / 32  
Feb 16, 2011   #2
In today's world, private companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?


In the present dynamic and advancing era there is much more involvemnet of the private companies compared to the government. But whether is privatisation is beneficial or not is one of the most debated topics in the business sectors. The results of privatisation are always overwhelming , therefore in my opinion, the companies should pay for and conduct scietific researches.

In the past , the researches were conducted only by the government sectors but these days the emergence of private companies have made drastic changes in the research field too.The first reason is that, the private companies when pay money to their employees they demnad results in return of that.The employees are bound to work efficiently and are subjected to the explanations demanded by the companies , in case of the non satisfactory results. Therefore work in these companies are carried out in a more dexterous and adept manner, compared to the work done by the government companies.

Secondly, the private companies carry out the researches expeditiously, because there are huge number of companies working on the same project. Because of this competition among the companies , the final results of the researches come very early , which is ultimately benefial for the public only.

There is another reason why I feel that it is better to get the researches done by private sectors because the governmnet 's main stay of focus remains the general welfare of the society ,as a whole . The government funds also get distributed to a large diversified sectors of the society and the money for research becomes a secondary requirment.

Therefore,, from my perspective , its better that privatisation takes place in research field also, which is essential to ameliorate the process of advancement and upgradation of science and technology.
EF_Susan - / 2310  
Feb 22, 2011   #3
Use a spell checker:
In contemprory sciety society, the issue...

that private corporations invest in and administer the scientific research is increasingly concerned and sparks much debates.----I don't think this is a good way to start an essay. I see a lot of essayists do this, and I don't know who is teaching them to do it. You should not start an essay by saying, "Recently, the topic of ____ has become the subject of debate." That is just not true... so it makes the essay start in a bad way. It is better to start with a sentence that expresses your most interesting idea about the subject.

... by private firms promotes the development of science and technology.

Admittedly,the technology in which private enterprises invest causes problems.The reason for this is...

Overall,I am convinced that the merits of allocating money to scientific research by private enterprises outweigh the weakness.

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