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A comparison in the level of the readers at the Burnaby library from 2011 to 2014 based on gender



yogi07 4 / 2  
Jan 14, 2016   #1
The chart illustrates comparison in the level of the reader at Burnaby public library from 2011 to 2014 based on sexes. Overall, it can be seen that over the period as a whole the figure of reader increased significantly. While the female reader decreased dramatically, the male reader grew sharply in 2014.

Female reader level stood at fairly 5000 in 2011. The trend increased considerably for the next two years and reaching the peak of approximately 10,000. However, they jump suddenly only 8000 which were almost 2 times than the starting year.

At 2,500, the male reader figure stood in 2011. They rose gradually to 4000 in 2012 which made distance more far with another reader. By 2013, they had grown noticeably to 10,000. Furthermore, the number was as same as the female reader number. It overtook female reader in 2014 and reached the peak of approximately 15,000. The number was six times than the first year.


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vangiespen - / 4077  
Jan 14, 2016   #2
... illustrates A comparison in the level of the readerS at THE Burnaby public
... based on (sexes) GENDER.
...over the period (as a whole) the figure of readerS increased significantly.

Female reader levelS stood at (fairly) 5000 in 2011.
...considerably (for) OVER the next two years and (reaching the peak of) PEAKED AT approximately ...
However, (they) THERE WAS A SUDDEN jump (suddenly only) TO 8000 which were almost (2 times) TWICE than...

(At 2,500, the) THE male readerS figure stood AT 2,500 in 2011.
(They) THE FIGURES rose gradually ...
... which (made distance more far with another reader) REFLECTED A MARKED DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE READERS.
...the number was as same as the female readerS number.
It overtook THE female readerS in 2014 and reached (the) A peak of approximately 15,000.
...six times MORE than the first year.

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eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Jan 15, 2016   #3
The chart illustrates comparison in the level ...

The chart illustrates the comparison of the total books read by males and females at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. What stands out from the graph reveals that 2011 to 2014 showed a significant increase in the number of books read in the library. The total of printed publications read by men was by far more significant growth than that of woman readers.

Female reader level stood at fairly 5000 in 2011...

Initially, men read about 3000 books, but then the number of books read rose slightly to nearly at 4000 books in 2012, an increase of approximately 1000 books read over 12 months. In the same time, the woman's bracket showed a noticeably upward trend in the number of books read from 5000 to 8000 between 2011 and 2012.

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