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Consuming: People are never satisfied with what they have; Agree or disagree



boraceber 1 / -  
Jul 22, 2012   #1
Hello everyone,

Could you check my essay please. Thank you!

Consuming

People do not usually realize what they have. Most of people cannot stop to buy new things. Also when they do not consume new products they get bored. Unreachable things are always stunning for people.

We live in a consuming world now. There are a lot of information to tell us to buy new things. If you do not realize about advertising, you have no idea what it is telling you and it means that they have already taken you in their hands. Therefore most of people cannot stop themselves to get buy new products. I believe that a normal person who do not consume if he/she does not need that.

In today's world, if everything is fine, you may have some problems. If you have everything, I mean you don't need anything you may encounter a problem which is being bored. Yes if don't buy unnecessary clothes, electronic products or mobile phones you get annoyed. Many years a go I had read a book about modern life and it was telling that if there is something in your mind, you obtain it someday there would not be any value for you. I agree with it.

I believe that life has some levels like games. I mean when people finish their school they join to business world from first level. Time by time when they increase their status and income, they want to obtain unreachable things. This feels for some people that I am special. If I am special I should have private products.

Today, we have no restrictions about consuming. There is everything more that we need. Advertising world is really working on how people can consume more and more. We should develop mental abilities and stop ourselves to buy unnecessary products.

deepakbaniya 3 / 91  
Jul 23, 2012   #2
are always stunning fortempting people.
In today's world, if everything is fine, you may have some problems. ( What does it mean?)
ana_p 27 / 81  
Jul 23, 2012   #3
Hi,

Try to explain your ideas with examples. For example, starting of your third para, seems like unclear ideas.

I believe that life has some levels like games.I mean (don't use such words in essay) when people finish their school they join to business world from first level. (you can use words like phase of life ...) Time by time when they increase their status and income, they want to obtain unreachable things. This feels for some people that I am special. If I am special I should have private products. And try to concentrate on your sentence structures.

Just a suggestion but hope this helps..:)

Good Luck!!

Thanks,
Ana.


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